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Review of chapter "'I need that in Captain Dummy talk, Kaylee'" from Oxnate
Review:
"Granted, you had to put a ton or so of lead radiation shielding around the thing to keep your crew from growing extra arms or whatnot," LOL.
Review By [Oxnate] • Date [25 Jul 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "'Big Damn Heroes'" from Oxnate
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The Harry Potter bits coming out like non-sense to the crew were great and the snow ball at the end was just perfect.
Review By [Oxnate] • Date [25 Jul 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "'I need that in Captain Dummy talk, Kaylee'" from Selonianth
Review:
Makes me sad when a fic gets abandoned this early, before the actual crossover happens and, in this case, the crew meets Illyria/Fred

Edit: Writing Still-Crazy Riverspeak is hard. I don't do POV's though, not really. Too hard to write and hard to understand to some extent.
Comments from author:
I was working on the next chapter, but was having trouble getting something I liked.
A River POV isn't easy to do... at least, not in a way that isn't TOO crazy for anyone to read. Then other projects came up, and this got dropped.
Still, someday I might get back to it; I do like this 'verse and this story.
Review By [Selonianth] • Date [28 Jan 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "'I need that in Captain Dummy talk, Kaylee'" from Hecatonchires
Review:
Such a shame its been abandoned
Comments from author:
I'm doing a rewatch of the series soon--it might prompt some movement on this, as I'm quite fond of it.
Review By [Hecatonchires] • Date [25 May 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "'I need that in Captain Dummy talk, Kaylee'" from dreameralways
Review:
So where's the Fred/Illyria cross? You should come back and finish this.
Comments from author:
Illyria is out there, waiting for our crew of heroes to get to a certain place.

Sorry for the delay; real life has basically crushed my writing life for the last couple of years now, but I'm trying to find some room to write again. When I do, this story is definitely in line for an update.

Thanks for commenting, and reminding me.
Review By [dreameralways] • Date [1 Dec 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "'Big Damn Heroes'" from kavier
Review:
I really liked this chapter. I read it before but forgot to post a review...back then. It is cool "watching" Mal try to keep his "lifestyle" while his ship slowly , or not so slowly, falls apart around him. Luckily he has a genius mechanic, Kaylee. She is the sexier version of Mr Scott, without the ego. The voices are dead on Firefly and the characters actions flow the same way as the show or movie did. I'm glad that Simon is not the only one to couple up.

Keep the good stories coming!

Kavier
Review By [kavier] • Date [12 Aug 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "'I need that in Captain Dummy talk, Kaylee'" from CattyNebulart
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Well there is a good build-up, so I hope you'll go back and continue this story.

I like the technical discussion, but 60kW is not a lot for a spaceship. Your car probably has more power than that. That said it is a lot of power for an RTG, but that is because they are not very efficient. Even if you meant 60GW instead that is still less power than a B-29. Clearly Serenity must have some other power source in addition.
Also at the rate the RTG's decay in the story the half live of the material used should be on the order of 2-3 months.

I like your explanation of RTG's but I would drop the specific numbers since getting the right sort of scale for this kind of thing is very hard. when kaylee is telling the captain about the output keep the numbers but drop the units. If kaylee says we need 60'000 and we only have 16'000 we know we have a problem, we don't need to know the units.

Also while space might be cold without convective cooling it doesn't feel that way, and humans create plenty of heat through biological processes. for spaceships the main concern is usually getting rid of heat.
Review By [CattyNebulart] • Date [15 Jun 09] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "'I need that in Captain Dummy talk, Kaylee'" from draconis
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Just saw this story. I really hope you consider continuing the story. I think it has considerable potential, just from the bit so far. I've started reading a number of your stories and find I like them too.

Although, you might want to consider leaving out the deep technical details when discussing things like RTGs (e.g. the output wattage of the RTGs). People will always find flaws with such nitty-gritty details and that level of detail often isn't needed for the story. For example in this case, one could talk about degradation of percent of original output rather than the actual watts. The nitty-gritties sometimes also turn away non-technically inclined readers``
Review By [draconis] • Date [1 Feb 09] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "'I need that in Captain Dummy talk, Kaylee'" from Mackon
Review:
could be good
Review By [Mackon] • Date [5 Aug 08] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "'I need that in Captain Dummy talk, Kaylee'" from Bobboky
Review:
cool
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [13 Apr 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "'I need that in Captain Dummy talk, Kaylee'" from firefly
Review:
Excellent chapter! I'm so looking forward to seeing what they'll find on Boros. Great job with the tech stuff. I know diddly about physics, but that sounded very realistic.
Review By [firefly] • Date [13 Apr 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "'I need that in Captain Dummy talk, Kaylee'" from Archer
Review:
Excellent story, more please! I can't wait for you to get to the crossover part. I've signed up for story alerts.
Comments from author:
Thank you.
I'll be working on it all weekend, I expect. Hopefully you'll receive an alert before Monday rolls around again.
Review By [Archer] • Date [9 Apr 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "'I need that in Captain Dummy talk, Kaylee'" from Satori
Review:
Yay, a technological discussion of Serenity's systems that doesn't sound like it was made up by the idiots who created treknobabble. I really like how you show the wear and tear on the ship as a foil to the loss felt by the crew.
Comments from author:
Wait--So you're saying Kaylee shouldn't try repairing the depolarized Isolinear chips by generating a phase-modulated tachyon pulse? Dude, that would SO increase the warp coil output by 3000%!
^_^

Raise shields!
Phasers to maximum!!
Review By [Satori] • Date [9 Apr 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "'I need that in Captain Dummy talk, Kaylee'" from RevDorothyL
Review:
So glad you're continuing with this, and I look forward to seeing whatever comes next.

Also, nice work in NOT skimping on the technical stuff (however imaginary) -- it's comforting to know that you, as an author, have taken the trouble to figure out how and why things work, and what the physical limitations are on your version of 'Serenity'.
Comments from author:
Glad you're still following along.

RTG's aren't imaginary, btw; they're exactly as described here. Seemed like a reasonable piece of solid, realiable tech for Serenity to be using.
And yes, I like knowing/describing/using the limitations of the people and machines to help drive the story.
Review By [RevDorothyL] • Date [9 Apr 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "'I need that in Captain Dummy talk, Kaylee'" from AngusH
Review:
Nice start!

I'm really looking forward to the next chapter.
Comments from author:
^_^!
The next chapter isn't going as planned, but I guess that's par for the course when it's mostly River's POV.
Review By [AngusH] • Date [9 Apr 08] • Not Rated
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