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Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Current Donor)SusanAnthony
Review:
I really love this idea of Xander as a Standard Bearer or Paladin. That fits him so well.
Review By [(Current Donor)SusanAnthony] • Date [10 Dec 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Kethric
Review:
You really should stick to the shorter stories. For whatever reason, you seem to irritate me less with errors on the shorter stories. I used to think authors using the wrong word was my biggest pet peeve. I now rank the wrong name as higher on the list. Kinsley? Apothis? Granted, neither of those names appear in this story, and that's very good. Your short stories are very well done, and mostly error free.
Review By [Kethric] • Date [14 Oct 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Current Donor)dogbertcarroll
Review:
Excellent work. Love the feel of it.
Review By [(Current Donor)dogbertcarroll] • Date [19 Mar 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Elleria
Review:
Love this.
Review By [Elleria] • Date [20 Jan 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Gremlin
Review:
I loved this, very Xander, would love to see it continued or expanded.

Gremlin
Review By [Gremlin] • Date [13 Jan 08] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from LordCorwin
Review:
A very good idea ....
Review By [LordCorwin] • Date [12 Jan 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Bumpkin
Review:
Interesting idea - I liked what you have so far, but I don't feel it was finished. This felt more like the prologue to an epic or a longer story, or at least a series of stories that will deal with similar situations of a more immediate nature.

thanks for sharing and keep penning,
Marns
~pN
Review By [Bumpkin] • Date [12 Jan 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Past Donor)HiltonK
Review:
Great concept.
Definitely worth expansion.
Review By [(Past Donor)HiltonK] • Date [12 Jan 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from purrfus
Review:
So much potential.

In something this short, it is especially important to choose all of your words carefully. Once chosen, it becomes imperative that they are spelled correctly. There is not enough verbiage for ill-chosen or miss-spelled words to hide.

Working with a beta can be difficult because of schedules and differing points of view, but when working without one don't depend on spell and grammar checkers to highlight all of the problems. Reading the chapters out loud can really help. I also find printing the chapters seems to make a difference in the number of errors that I find when reviewing.
Review By [purrfus] • Date [12 Jan 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Bobboky
Review:
sweet
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [12 Jan 08] • Not Rated
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