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Review of chapter "Chapter 22" from azulkan
Glad to see the update. Looking forward to more.
Comments from author:
Thanks! Hope to work on it some more soon~
Review By [azulkan] • Date [29 Apr 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 22" from Morgomir
Great chapter. Keep up the good work.
Comments from author:
Thanks! I'll try~
Review By [Morgomir] • Date [14 Apr 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 22" from Bill
Very well done!
Comments from author:
Thank you!
Review By [Bill] • Date [4 Apr 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 22" from Alkeni
That's weird...I've had this story on tracking and not gotten the last four chapter updates...

Anyway, good chapters.
Comments from author:
That is weird. Still, I'm glad you liked them.
Review By [Alkeni] • Date [3 Apr 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 22" from ChaosLady
Too short for such a long absence, but a good start for getting restarted again.
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It is a lot shorter than I hoped but it did work as a complete scene. I'm hoping future chapters will be at least a little longer.
Review By [ChaosLady] • Date [29 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 22" from RevDorothyL
Glad to see you're continuing this! :)
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Review By [RevDorothyL] • Date [29 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 22" from CageFire
Hmm, what a coincidence. I recently started reading all of dogbertcarroll's stories. Apparently I had already read several randomly, but only now did I notice they were all by the same author and decided to give the rest a try. So far I've enjoyed every one I've read. :)
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He's got a lot of fans. Just yesterday I spent a lot of time scouring his stories for something I was certain he wrote and finally found it not in his one-shots but as part of a story he'd written before that I had forgotten I had been reading.
Review By [CageFire] • Date [29 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 22" from Mrimpossible
The story is good but you could consolidate it into eleven longer chapters and all subsequent chapters could and should be at least twice as long.
Comments from author:
I'm not sure that having short chapters warrant a rating of 2/10 if you think the story is good. Feeling a little hurt about that right now.

That said I'm glad you like the story. Part of why my chapters are short is because I really do use review feedback to influence how I move the story along. A lot of comments end up inspiring things I'm having trouble deciding on or even introduce new thoughts that wouldn't have occurred to me otherwise. This chapter in particular was very short as I'm trying to get back into the swing of writing again. I've hardly written anything in almost 2 years. Future chapters should hopefully be a bit longer but will probably continue to be shorter than you like.
Review By [Mrimpossible] • Date [29 Mar 14] • Rating [2 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 22" from (Current Donor)dogbertcarroll
The Scoobs may want to contact the rest of the Asgard to fix the problems with X2. They would do a better job than a human trying to figure out that was done with our, primitive in comparison, equipment. Not to mention I'm curious about what they'd do with the werewolf data considering they have a problem with degeneration and werewolves are known for their regeneration.

Thanks for the shout out, but really thank my typists, they got me moving.
Comments from author:
Awww. I feel like half my reviews so far are all commenting on how awesome you are. I'm in the middle of re-reading your fragments for like the third time this month. I think this is my first time doing a shout out too.

For some reason I hadn't even thought about the Asgard fixing X2... Which is what I'm going to be calling him from now on instead of Xander 2.0. Also hadn't thought about applying werewolf genetics to solve the Asgard problem. I will be thinking about using both ideas in future chapters now. Thanks~
Review By [(Current Donor)dogbertcarroll] • Date [29 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 22" from Bobboky
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Review By [Bobboky] • Date [29 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 22" from AnFan
Well I'm glad dbc (dogbertcaroll) has encouraged your muse. I really like his work also.

I didn't notice a change. Then again, it has been a while since you added to this one. I hate it when the tech we use breaks down on us and stops working. Part of the reason I'm no longer in IT. Got tired of the disposable mentality in the market on hardware and software. A tool is supposed to be reliable, not something you expect to throw out 2 years down the line or less. Probably why game consoles have broken the back of the computer game industry (sort of). I hope you have the ability to retrieve some of the work you've done on this before, and if not I hope you haven't lost much.

Have you written to dbc asking if you can use any of his material? Even w/o the comedic value of Xander claiming he's the King of NoPants there is an awful lot of those shorts dbc has written that are gold. While you are at it (writing to him that is) try to encourage him to write that into a story and dump some of his creativity into it. Or, any of his other stories you like, it doesn't really matter to me :) Any of his work is a good read. (now I'm wondering if he's put that into a story from his fragments or not. can't remember. oh well that's age for you)

I am kind of wondering when we will see Xander's part of the story. I would imagine that there is only so much that Loki could get out of his cells before he gave up on that rout and decided that if Xander had the answer that it may not be in his genetics. Even if it's the are that he is most comfortable with as a scientist, he could continue to do that work while Xander was awake and possibly providing other answers than Loki could find himself. Though, it might have taken him a little while if he decided to delve into Xanders memories. It's never stated that the Asgard can do that (I don't think) but there were at least two other episodes of SGC where the memory could be accessed if not more. And the device that linked everyone on that dying world would have even been able to catalog all of his memories into a library. Loki could have wasted some time searching through that after not seeing an immediate result from his examination of Xander's genetics.

It will be interesting to find out. I hope you don't dump it into another story altogether. I also hope that you pick up quicker postings of chapters now that your muse has decided to light a fire under you. Or was that dbc's muse? :D

Thanks for the update. I look forward to more.
Comments from author:
Nice long review. Thanks!

I enjoy dbc's work but I've never asked to use it. I'm worried about doing it justice. King of No Pants is one of the many stories he's done that I'd like him to do more of though. This part of the review was really for dbc. lol

Xander, the original Xander... His part of the story is for the sequel should I ever get to it.
Review By [AnFan] • Date [29 Mar 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 8" from Oddshot
Just discovered this story what I read so far I am liking it so I hope you will return to it soon .
Review By [Oddshot] • Date [23 Sep 13] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 21" from loretta
this is a great story! please update it soon
Comments from author:
Thanks! I actually started the next chapter... But it's on my broken tablet... Didn't finish it because I found a mistake I gotta fix in the published chapters... No one noticing the mistake made me unmotivated to work on this. I've got the story planned out though. Once I finish my new stories this will be the one I go back to work on.
Review By [loretta] • Date [1 May 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 21" from Blackett
I got back to this and reread it. Awsome. Hope there will be some updates in the future.
Comments from author:
Thanks. I actually started the next chapter and realized I had made conflicting scenes in previous chapters. *sigh* When I fix that I'll update this story. Please look forward to it.
Review By [Blackett] • Date [17 Apr 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 21" from (Recent Donor)nerfherder
Yeah, definitely worth continuing. I hope you get back to it some day.
Review By [(Recent Donor)nerfherder] • Date [24 Jan 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
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