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Review of chapter "Chapter 27" from DieselDriver
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These are word files? Cool. I can help. I might be better if I got a newer version though since I still use Office 97... I recently switched over to Libre the free open source "Office" replacement. Free is good and although I've only used the word processor so far that works great!

http://www.libreoffice.org/

Let me know if you want me to help with proofreading and spell checks. I have actually worked as a proof reader professionally although it was technical documents. Same principle. I may just download the previous story and put in what I think was meant to be said and send it to you. It needs some serious proofreading.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [18 Nov 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 26" from DieselDriver
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"pushed her back in time to become the nice of Wesley"

I think the word you're looking for is not "nice", I think you meant "niece" as in the child of a brother or sister.

Yeah Microsoft. Absolutely! Windows 3.1 wasn't to bad, 95 sucked, 98 very good, ME and 2000 sucked royally, 7 is good, I like it. Windows 8 and 8.1... Bleh! Garbage. I bought a couple of brand new Windows 7 Pro discs so I can ride it out and wait for the next good version, assuming there is one in my lifetime. I build my own computers and the thought of having no recourse but to use Windows 8.X makes me ill.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [18 Nov 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 22" from DieselDriver
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So Ranma has the best of both worlds. Or at least s/he has both worlds to try and see what s/he likes.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [18 Nov 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 21" from DieselDriver
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Buffy worded it wrong. It never gets better. It just gets less bad.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [18 Nov 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 18" from DieselDriver
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BTW (again), The blonde galactic policewoman is MIHOSHI not Mishoshi. There's only one S in her name.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [17 Nov 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 17" from DieselDriver
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You never did explain about "Jupp". From the context in this chapter I'm thinking it may be that you mistyped it or misunderstood what people were saying and the correct word is "Yep" meaning "yes" but with a bit more emphasis. Sometimes folks pronounce it "yeup" if they have a north east (Maine) accent or "yup" if they are from the south. But I've never seen or heard it as "jup".
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [17 Nov 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 16" from DieselDriver
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"Sasami smashed her face in her hands. How stupid could a guy be?"

Trust me on this, I am a guy after all, they can be very very extremely stupid. Although, stupid really isn't the correct word. More like ignorant or maybe blatantly naive would be best in Tenchi's case.

So many people use the word stupid interchangeably with the word ignorant that it just amazes me. They do not mean even close to the same thing. Stupid means you do not have the ability to learn anything at all complicated and it's really only an insult if the person it's directed at takes it that way. Otherwise it's just a fact of life. Ignorant however, is a totally different thing but can also be or not be, an insult. If you are ignorant but not stupid, it simply means you have the ability to learn something but you have not done so.

For instance, "Joe was to stupid to learn to speak proper English". "Jose was from Mexico and was ignorant of the proper way to speak English." "I am ignorant in that I cannot speak Spanish." "I'm stupid because I cannot learn to speak Spanish." These are simple factual type statements.

Insult would be "Joe has lived here 20 years and is to stupid to learn English although he's tried many times". Better to say "Joe has lived here 20 years and has been unable to learn English although he's tried very hard to do so." "Joe is ignorant of the way to speak proper English even though he's lived here for 20 years because he has not tried to learn it." "That's a really stupid thing to do."
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [17 Nov 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 15" from DieselDriver
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Ok I think I've figured out what is going on with this story... It's all just one long, crazy dream sequence as a result of someone spiking the brownies with happy dust of some kind.

Hmm. There's a strange thought pun. Spiking the brownies. Wouldn't it be more fun if they were girl scouts instead of brownies? A bit more grown up?

BTW, no one and I really mean NO ONE, says "I do not want..." or "he did not want..." It would be "I don't want..." or "He didn't want..." that you would use in real conversations. Only Commander Data talks like that.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [17 Nov 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 13" from DieselDriver
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"he told us that the Jurarian are long lived"...

This has jarred me every time I run into it. I'm pretty sure the correct spelling is not "Jurarian" but instead is thus, "Juraian" or simply "Jurai". Saying the word with the extra "r" would be like calling me an "Americaran" instead of an "American". Or in the latter, which is the one I think is correct, it would still simple be "Jurai" without any modifier like the word "deer". You can have one deer or a hundred deer but never a hundred "deers". Same with the Jurai. You can have one Jurai or you can have a group of a many Jurai (or any number greater than 1).

So, from what I understand having watched the Tenchi Muyo series several times, I bought copies of the DVD sets, I believe your sentence would be more properly "he told us that the Jurai are long lived"...

Still, even with some weird sentence structure and words, I'm enjoying reading this a LOT. I love that series and would like very much to have Ryoko's powers (with all three crystals of course).
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [17 Nov 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 11" from DieselDriver
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Again, some of your sentence structuring needs a lot of work to be correct in English, I spent 18 months in Japan, Okinawa, a long time ago and tried to learn Nihongo but didn't have a lot of luck once I reached the counting things. I do remember that the sentence structure was different and I wondered if you might be something other than a native English speaker. I mentioned this before but I'm not apparently going to get any replies to my comments. They would be quite helpful in understanding your point of view.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [17 Nov 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 10" from DieselDriver
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An OMAK? What is an omak?

I really hope those are dream sequences at the end of the chapter.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [17 Nov 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "8" from DieselDriver
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I'm wondering if those little episodes are dreams, Starships night out indeed.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [17 Nov 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "7" from DieselDriver
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Definitely don't want to anger Joyce. No Joyce cookies? Oh the Humanity!
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [17 Nov 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "4" from DieselDriver
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I have no idea what they thought Saturn was so funny. I would have fired him into the sun.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [16 Nov 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "3" from DieselDriver
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Heh, Great fun and it's nice to see them working together and making snarky remarks instead of putting a "hate" on each other. I am curious to see why Buffy can't go to the moon with her.

By the way, "Suite" is a large apartment/rental room with much more than a regular rental bedroom. "Suit" is what you wear when you leave the suite. Faith put on her space suit to leave the suite she stayed in at the top of the lunar Hilton.

"Suite" is pronounce "Sweet" and "Suit" is pronounced the same as "Soot" but with slightly more U in the sound.

Oh and a suite can be a comprehensive package of something like a security suite on a computer. Protects against viruses, trojans, denial of usage takeovers etc.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [16 Nov 14] • Not Rated
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