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Review of chapter "Part 49 Sober and calling in the calvery" from draconis
Review:
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Thanks for sticking with the story, and overcoming some of the 'corners you painted yourself into'. Looking forward to how far this all goes.

With all the very powerful and/or immortal 'white hats' you're bringing to Sunnydale, the story however, could fall into the trap that everything becomes TOO easy...that NO one is really at risk. Could lead to boring story.

Also, you should recall that the Matt Helm character was a notorious boozer and womanizer. Neither one is a good thing for Jessica to bring back into her life. Perhaps you might have Matt "clean up" a bit before he shows up?
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Minor consistency issue?...

Since you've made some changes, this might not be the consistency issue I think it is, but you wrote they found out from a Sunnydale newstand's newspaper about the time change from 1999 to the past. But, you also wrote that Willow had already done the slayer activation spell (which she did just moments before the collapse of the Hellmouth). So...Sunnydale should already have been a big ol' crater. That they've been walking around in not-a-big-crater-Sunnydale is surely more obvious a hint than a newspaper date in a city in which they shouldn't be able to walk?...
Comments from author:
Yep thats true and one of the things I am still working on working myself out of. Yes Matt Helm a boozer and womanizer in the books. I think I will base him more off the Dean Martin version of Matt Helm as I have seen several movies. He might still be a bit wild and a bit of drunk but I think the Hell Mouth will sober him up fast plus If he wants to be with Jessica she will want him sober at least. I am thinking of giving him a kick in the ass to sober up and maybe to realize his lifestyle not working. I have some ideas on how to fix the continuity issue but its as wild as the time rewrite.

Fire
Review By [draconis] • Date [17 May 14] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Part 49 Sober and calling in the calvery" from deathgeonous
Review:
Ah, this is still as fun as it ever was. Well, thanks for writing this, and bye for now.
Review By [deathgeonous] • Date [16 May 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Part 1 Lawyers Part 2 Lost Connections" from fanreaderonetwo
Review:
Even before the time jump, you had utterly mangled the timeline.
They had run into Glory and the Initiative _before_ Graduation and Joyce was still alive.
Then there is a mention of the Scythe.
Comments from author:
Yep but they dont know when the timeline got mangled they just kind of noticed it a bit lol. Seriously it is AU and it is intended to be mangled the time jump merge is just to make it work in a twisted insane way. Like I said in the disclaimers I mess with cannon and make it work to my advantage any way I can. Though I wish I could keep it straight if only to not drive people nuts :).
Review By [fanreaderonetwo] • Date [15 May 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Part 49 Sober and calling in the calvery" from Doodle
Review:
Excellent chapter. 2,000/10


Immortal.
Comments from author:
Thank you I am glad you like this insane work.
Review By [Doodle] • Date [14 May 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Part 46 Warnings and a New Un- life" from deathgeonous
Review:
Wow, it's been a LONG time since I've last read this one. It's going good, and now I understand just how it got so AU, time MERGING, and is that not a nice twist on an old idea or what, huh? Well, thanks for writing this, and goodbye for now.
Comments from author:
I kind of had no choice as I backed myself into a corner. It was the only way I could write it without a major rework. So hopefully this will solve the issue as well as explaining why so may bads from differing seasons are around. It also allows me to save some characters and change the dynamics a bit. Thanks for the kind review. I do promise to try to update more soon. RL been busy but I will try.
Fire
Review By [deathgeonous] • Date [4 Feb 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Part 46 Warnings and a New Un- life" from locard
Review:
I am so happy you added a new chapter to this story for it is one of my favorites. I will be glad when you do a little B/G together time.
Comments from author:
I am glad someone likes this story. Its not been easy to write but I hope it works for some people. I mean really angel was 240 so Giles and Buffy not such a strech. Hope to update more soon. Thanks for the positive feedback it means a lot.
Review By [locard] • Date [17 Dec 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Part 46 Warnings and a New Un- life" from Eureka
Review:
Dang! Finally a new chaptere that you had given up on this one due to RL.
Comments from author:
Thank you for the review. Its not abandoned I just had a wicked case of writers block on most of my works. Generally I start a new one when that happens but RL does not always allow for it. I am going to finish them all one day. It just may take time. Hopefully the muse will start working again soon. Its winter and not much going on so maybe I can do it. We will have to see.
Fire
Review By [Eureka] • Date [13 Dec 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Part 44 clueless….no more" from locard
Review:
That is a great story and full of surprises. I hope you will up date it soon and not forget about it.
Comments from author:
Thanks I am working on things life has been busy of late so writing has to take a back seat. I will finish this eventually.
Fire
Review By [locard] • Date [8 May 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Part 44 clueless….no more" from djhardim
Review:
From the wikipedia article 'The hell gods barely defeated Glory, but despite their victory, Glory was too powerful to destroy, so they banished her into the earthly dimension, where her essence would be imprisoned in a human child named Ben, created solely to "contain" her until he eventually died as a mortal, sealing her.'

It would appear at first glance that Ben was a victim, up until the point where Glory offered to make him immortal in return for his aid in capturing Dawn.

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Glory_(Buffy_the_Vampire_Slayer)
Review By [djhardim] • Date [20 Mar 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Part 43 Figuring it all out….clueless…." from kdakmmt
Review:
interesting take on the immortals:) I would think that if glory goes with the quickening then the willpower of the immortal that took it would come into question. opens up some possibilities.
Comments from author:
Yes it does. I would think the host would have to be willing if I recall the episode. Because Glory told Buffy and Giles Ben was no so innocent that he summoned her. So if that's the case I would think maybe she wont be transferable. It is something to think about and a question that needs to be asked.
Fire
Review By [kdakmmt] • Date [21 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Part 43 Figuring it all out….clueless…." from djhardim
Review:
What would happen if an Immortal took Ben's head? Would they become host to Glory?
Comments from author:
Interesting question I will have to think about it :)
Fire
Review By [djhardim] • Date [19 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Part 36 Meeting Mom" from (Recent Donor)Hawklan
Review:
hmm Jessica sober? that's a surprise.....
Comments from author:
Not many fics redeem her or Tony thought Id give it a shot. Have to thank the Lost Souls series for that idea.
Review By [(Recent Donor)Hawklan] • Date [22 Nov 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Part 40 Bad tidings" from Rhyssia
Review:
Just found this, and have to say - interesting story!

Even though it could use a /lot/ of editing, it is rarely needs a repeat read to understand where you are going with it, so I'll be tracking it. :)
Comments from author:
Thanks
Review By [Rhyssia] • Date [6 Oct 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Part 40 Bad tidings" from (Recent Donor)tchizek
Review:
Handled well.
Comments from author:
Thanks it gave me fits.
Review By [(Recent Donor)tchizek] • Date [5 Oct 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Part 39 SOS MALL Part 39 SOS MALL Part 39 SOS" from Shadowman
Review:
Still another excellent crossover story from you.
I have only just found your stories recently and am looking forward to the continuations of this and your other stories.
Comments from author:
I promise they will all be done someday no guarantees as to when. RL is busy and writing is my relaxing time which sadly is in short supply. But I will try. Thank you for the reviews and support on this and my other works.
Fire
Review By [Shadowman] • Date [27 Sep 12] • Not Rated
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