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Review of chapter "Part 26 If wishes were simpleā€¦" from DarthTenebrus
Review:
For the last two chapters...

25: Ooh I feel for Janus and Murphy...they bout to get their immortal butts fried by Zeus/Jupiter. ..

26: Heh heh heh...only Anyanka...only her...
Comments from author:
I hope you like the chew out lol. YEs Anyanka was special lol. I removed her so reality can not be easily reset. I can see Zeus worring about her lol considering how he treated Hera at times. I hope it amuses.
Fire
Review By [DarthTenebrus] • Date [30 Nov 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Reason Why" from DieselDriver
Review:
Oh oh... Ethan is in for a bit of chaos all his own. Janus is not happy with him, stirring up more than he was supposed to do. Turn him into a teenage girl potential Janus... That would be pretty chaotic and just deserts too.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [29 Nov 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Altering Fate" from DieselDriver
Review:
I get the impression this is going to be a lot of fun to read. I don't think I've read anything by Firewolfe before. I hope it turns out as much fun as the idea seems to be.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [29 Nov 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Part 24 Chaos Keys To A Better And Brave New World" from DarthTenebrus
Review:
Well done sir. Though there are some issues with spelling and run-on sentences, the narrative overall more than makes up for it, plus you have written quite an engaging story. I shall have to track this. Correct these issues and you will have a powerhouse of a story, worthy of the likes of Ironbear and the Dark Scribbler.
Review By [DarthTenebrus] • Date [29 Nov 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Part 24 Chaos Keys To A Better And Brave New World" from slmncpm
Review:
i do so love this story, i am glad to see you working on it!
Review By [slmncpm] • Date [25 Nov 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Reason Why" from FinalGuardian
Review:
I really like the way you started things off but the dialogue feels wooden.
Review By [FinalGuardian] • Date [24 Nov 14] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Part 22 Communication" from bradsan
Review:
good story so far.

If I read it right Angel/Cordy/ Dawn and friends are stronger than Buffy and Faith and became immortal. Xander/Willow/Oz are as strong as Buffy and Faith and probably Immortal. Or are they all as strong as Buffy and Faith and everybody is immortal. Because I don't think that Dawn will like it becoming a demigod with a lifespan that is bigger than her mom and sister. I think Spike won't like it when he will outlive Buffy same goes for Faith and Xander.

I don't understand Buffy logic about Angel if she is gone stay with Spike well her friends don't like him either so she could lose her friends also. I know she didn't saw him yet but it will be the same. Buffy is in for a surprise when she meets Spike her mate. They all hate Spike as much as they hate Angel and if she is afraid to lose her friends because of Angel. However it was Xander who hated Angel and Spike not Willow. Still some vampire, one of the four horseman etc. His rate will be worse than Angels. Wonder how she is gone solve that.

I would say go for it if they can't cope it's their lost. She has to live with him and not the other way around. She don't judge their partners so you can presume they let her choose her own.

Wonder when you gone update this one.
Review By [bradsan] • Date [26 Jan 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Part 22 Communication" from falsegod
Review:
I only gave you a 5 because its half of what your main story thread would get, but seriously rewrite it and leave out the all the distraction
Review By [falsegod] • Date [23 Jun 13] • Rating [5 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Just one Night" from DragonBard
Review:
This is 'before' Angel lost his soul, so you're mixing up the timeline again.

The Halloween episode was early Season 2, while Faith was Season 3.
Comments from author:
I always mix up the time lines Its more fun that way. I never keep them on track so please forget what happened when it will only be more confusing.
Fire
Review By [DragonBard] • Date [4 Mar 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Level Field" from DragonBard
Review:
Faith isn't around yet.

Plus you originally said you were going to leave Spike as a vamp.
Comments from author:
He still is sort of.
Review By [DragonBard] • Date [4 Mar 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Part 22 Communication" from djhardim
Review:
Considering the evil characters that you introduced, is it really necessary to bring in the First Evil and Glory?
Review By [djhardim] • Date [24 Jul 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Part 22 Communication" from Dragonelf
Review:
I like what you have done so far with the story and it will be interesting to see what will happen with the augmented characters in your story.

::Gives the plot bunny a slice of Chocolate Apple Pie::

# = # = # = # = # = # = #
Neither fire nor wind,
birth nor death can
erase our good deeds.
- Buddha
# = # = # = # = # = # = #
Review By [Dragonelf] • Date [17 Apr 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Part 22 Communication" from Morgomir
Review:
Great chapter. Keep up the good work.
Comments from author:
Thanks glad you enjoyed it. Hope to see some updates on your work soon too.
Fire
Review By [Morgomir] • Date [9 Feb 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Part 22 Communication" from Eureka
Review:
Good story. Really like the premise of it, but...you really need to watch your spelling and punctuation. Also you mentioned Jessie McNally, but he isn't shown again so far, are you going to bring him out to re-meet Xander and Willow along with the rest of the gang? I mean he may be in the body of his cousin, but it is him, and Xander and Willow would LOVE it if he was back. (At least IMHO)
Review By [Eureka] • Date [26 Jan 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Part 22 Communication" from trongod
Review:
I don't get it, you have Clark/Superman disgusted at the idea of Angel/Buffy, and then later on you are bent on tieing Angel/Cordelia or the new Clark/Wonder TEEN together... Plus all the machinations of Janus to get them together... If there's disgust at the age difference for the first pairing, why not the second? Both girls are about the same age, the semi-male body in question is still that of a centuries dead man in his late twenties when he was Turned... Not seeing much differences here, Boss...

Even assuming that they all integrate their memories equally well, equally quickly, there's still the age difference.

Plus I never like Stalker!Corpse in the first place.You want him redeemed per canon, OK, let'em do it for himself somewhere else away from the rest of the crew.

Faith - like her upgrades, although I need to re read this to get a better sense of just when this is all occurring. So, back I go!!!
Review By [trongod] • Date [24 Jan 12] • Not Rated
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