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Satsu’s Haiku

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Review of chapter "Satsu’s Haiku" from clarityfades
Review:
Looked good to me! Only problem, "dojo" not "dogo". ;) Loved the Mr. Miyagi touch, by the way! I love him! :D
Comments from author:
Huh, wonder how that slipped past spellcheck. Thanks; fixed it now. I love Mr. Miyagi and he'd make a great Watcher. Hmmm, I feel a bunny coming on. Shoot!
Review By [clarityfades] • Date [21 Feb 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Satsu’s Haiku" from serenityselena
Review:
well .... that sure was an appropriate haiku ^__^
Comments from author:
Thanks.
Review By [serenityselena] • Date [13 Jan 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Satsu’s Haiku" from ShadesofGray
Review:
Nice haiku (I'm not overly sure about the reviewer who said you have to include a nature reference but then again - 7th grade was more years ago than I want to think about...)
Comments from author:
Actually, when I was looking up how to write haikus, one site said that 'shadows' was supposed to be symbolic of winter, which I thought fit the line pretty good. But I never claimed that poetry in general was my strong suit, so...
Review By [ShadesofGray] • Date [12 Jan 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Satsu’s Haiku" from Satori
Review:
technically you;re supposed to have a nature or seasonal reference, but given the subject matter....

Thanks for the haiku. Loved the inclusion of Mr. Miyagi. Awesome dude.
Comments from author:
Huh, the website I read on haikus said the word 'shadow' was a metaphor for winter, the season for belief in the supernatural. Maybe I misunderstood.

Glad you liked it otherwise.
Review By [Satori] • Date [30 Sep 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Satsu’s Haiku" from RevDorothyL
Review:
well done.
Comments from author:
Thanks.
Review By [RevDorothyL] • Date [27 Sep 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Satsu’s Haiku" from Harry
Review:
Haiku's are not my strong point either, but the one you wrote up worked. At least if she is going to go down, she will not go down easy, and will have allies to back her up.
Comments from author:
Which will make Miyagi satisfied with the situation.
Review By [Harry] • Date [27 Sep 10] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Satsu’s Haiku" from borgrabbit
Review:
Haiku logic:

A demon does stink
There's a reason don't ya think
Promises to twist

•│•│•│•│•│•│•│•│•│•│•│•│•

Yeah, haiku's are lots of fun.
Comments from author:
Maybe for you, but they give me a headache to try and think up.
Review By [borgrabbit] • Date [26 Sep 10] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Satsu’s Haiku" from (Past Donor)KieriToews
Review:
It was different. Decent, but not you're best. *sheepish grin* Sorry.
Comments from author:
*sigh and pout* I guess I'll take what I can get. LOL.
Review By [(Past Donor)KieriToews] • Date [26 Sep 10] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Satsu’s Haiku" from spk
Review:
I just loved your inclusion of Miyagi. :)
Comments from author:
Miyagi *had* to be her Sensei.
Review By [spk] • Date [25 Sep 10] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Satsu’s Haiku" from RandomSelection
Review:
I think the haiku fits all necessary requirements, just one small thing: It has to be 'Myagi-sensei', just like Satsu-chan or Buffy-san ... title after the name, not before.

Like yours series!
Random Selection
Comments from author:
Thanks, fixed it. Guess I'm too used to the way it sounds the other way.
Review By [RandomSelection] • Date [25 Sep 10] • Not Rated
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