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Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty-eight: Strife in Fornost" from (Recent Donor)Luna
Review:
Tis rhyming review day
and I haven't much to say
It's been a while since I read
But I forged ahead!
Elladan always pleases me
I hope they're meant to be
The jealous wife is tripe drama
Sillier than a purple llama
I look forward to more
This tale is not a bore!
Comments from author:
Nearly seven and a half years on this site and this is my very first rhyming review. I'm even more honored since yesterday wasn't even the appointed day. You brought a smile to my face, Luna. Cheers!
Review By [(Recent Donor)Luna] • Date [15 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty-seven: Back to the Wilds" from ChikaraKatherine
Review:
So Sauron decided to show up again. Hmm.... got to wonder what his game is. Clearly he doesnt want Buffy an Miriel talking. Jerk. Loved the interactions with everyone. Miriel has some good karam going on. Between Buffy and everyone else looking out for her. She's not going down easly no matter who Sauron throws at her. Actual I like the idea of Miriel and one of the twins. I think it would be a wonderful for them to get a little love in. That is if they can, that and I'm short of a Buffy/Haldir shipper. I know, I know. :) Loved the fight with the Barrow-Wights. Nasty little things, glade they got a smack down. Even if it wasn't from old Tom. So many things to cover.... man Hal seems to becoming a far better watcher than one would have thought earlier. Go him. Just a lot of good plot progession with many wonderful details. Wonder if Buffy will make her self known at breakfast sometime? She's got to be ready to punt old Sauron in the butt for all his crap. That and I'll wager she wants to let Mirel know she's ok. I agree with her punishment of the rapist it fit the crime. Nasty little monster that he was. Got what was coming to him. Gods know his family wouldn't have let him stand trail or anything like that. Over all just a great read and I'm greatful you work on this and post it. Thank you.
Comments from author:
Glad to hear that you liked the chapter. I don't think Buffy will make an appearance at breakfast, but that's not to say she won't make an appearance before the end of the tale.

Thanks for the feedback.
Review By [ChikaraKatherine] • Date [14 Dec 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty-seven: Back to the Wilds" from JinaSolo
Review:
Oh, good. lol
Review By [JinaSolo] • Date [12 Dec 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty-seven: Back to the Wilds" from JinaSolo
Review:
Was weather top part of the Cruciamentum? :-(
Comments from author:
Nope.
Review By [JinaSolo] • Date [11 Dec 13] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty-seven: Back to the Wilds" from Eureka
Review:
So glad to finally see a new chapter Laurelin, I had started to think you forgot about this story.
So did S get Buffy?
Comments from author:
I'll never abandon any story I post. Although, sometimes, real life prevents me from writing as much as I'd like. Hopefully, the next chapter won't take so long.

No, Sauron didn't get Buffy. She's still around and may make another appearance in the next chapter.

Cheers!
Review By [Eureka] • Date [10 Dec 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty-six: Erestor" from Dapsy
Review:
As always, amazing chapters, one of the best reads around. I remember reading your first couple chapters of this story long time ago thinking that this will be one of the greatest stories… 30 or so chapters later I did not change my mind. I love this story… your portrayals of characters are amazing, plot, and you even have taught me a few things about Middle-earth I did not know before… fantastic.

There is so much one could comment on(in a good way) but nothing I could come up with could really do it justice, So I will finish this comment saying its all superb :D

p.s. I kind of liked how Buffy was helping(even if in small ways) Miriel while Miriel was awake for example when dealing with Mother of Vampires,

also,
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Miriel chuckled. “You’re talking to the wrong person, Buffy.” She smiled, adding, “Feel free to make your announcement at breakfast tomorrow morning.”

Buffy frowned. “And how the hell am I supposed to do that?”

Her protégé shrugged. “You’re the clever one. I’m sure you’ll come up with something.”
…………..

I wonder if Buffy will poke her nose a bit more out of the dreamscape sometime now… after all, she was “dared” to try :D ((btw. Don’t answer that, maybe it will be a surprise in some future chapter))
Comments from author:
Glad to hear that you're still enjoying the story. I really appreciate the feedback. :-) Hopefully, you'll like what's to come.

Thanks again!
Review By [Dapsy] • Date [30 Sep 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty-six: Erestor" from kiwi
Review:
excellent chapter!
Comments from author:
Thanks!
Review By [kiwi] • Date [15 Jul 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty-five: Confessions" from (Current Donor)SamuraiCatFan
Review:
Really enjoying the story and the great characterizations.

One glaring error-You refer several times to Endor. The western part of Middle-Earth was known as Eriador (the area between the Blue Mountains and the Misty Mountains). Endor is the forest moon from the 3rd Star Wars movie.
Comments from author:
Thank you for your feedback. I greatly appreciate it.

However, my use of "Endor" is actually correct. It's Sindarin and translates to "Middle-land", or "Middle-earth". This is easily verifiable on numerous LotR websites, such as:

http://www.glyphweb.com/arda/e/endor.html

http://www.councilofelrond.com/encyclopedia/endor/

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Middle-earth (under Middle-earth Cosmology)

Please don't think I'm being a wise ass. I'm very anal about using the correct term(s) in my stories. Keep in mind the Elves loved to give people, places and things multiple names. Some of them fell out of use by the latter part of the Third Age, but I'm of the opinion that some of the older Elves (Elrond, Glorfindel, Galadriel, Celeborn, Círdan, etc.) would still use these names from time to time.

Thanks again for your feedback.

P.S. Not a fan of Star Wars. I barely made it through the first movie let alone the rest of them. ;-)
Review By [(Current Donor)SamuraiCatFan] • Date [20 May 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty-five: Confessions" from Misty
Review:
Cool, I like. Thank you
Comments from author:
Glad you liked it. :-)
Review By [Misty] • Date [20 May 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Twenty-nine: Banishment" from maxthehobbit
Review:
Now that's what I call Justice, real justice, let the punishment fit the crime. I also think Ivy, the Mayor's wife was right. You let someone get away with a crime without being punished, then they just go on to do more crimes, even bigger crimes thinking they are above the law. I'm not so sure that the townspeople running the Thornberry's out of town was actually justice served, more like vindictiveness.

I liked the talk between Miriel and the raped girl, but I know one woman that was raped when she was in her early twenties on her college campus. Anyone that knows her knows she hasn't gotten over it and maybe never will.

Excellent Chapter!
Comments from author:
Woe unto all would-be rapists that cross this Slayer's path! I'm of the opinion that a woman never gets over having been raped. Yes, life goes on, but the pain of those torments continue to haunt you until the end of your days. At least, that's the way I've decided to approach it with this story.

Glad to hear that you enjoyed the chapter!
Review By [maxthehobbit] • Date [8 Mar 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Twenty-three: Time to Move On" from maxthehobbit
Review:
So much has happened to Miriel, mostly bad things, but at least she had a chance to recuperate in Rivendale as well as to learn more and practice, even to hunt, a skill which might be needed. Her relationship with Buffy tends to be on again, off again, sometimes good, sometimes bad. Up to about chapter ten I was a little disappointed that there wasn't much interaction between Miriel and Buffy, but now I look at it differently. I really like Miriel, she's almost real, maybe she'll be a superhero in the future, but now she's more like a normal person, making some bad decisions, some good ... learning the ways of the world, especially since she led such a sheltered life before leaving her childhood home.

Looks like now her real adventures will begin with the Rangers, following her destiny.

I really like this story.
Comments from author:
I appreciate your comments, especially your take on Miriel. As a writer, it's very gratifying when a reader describes your OC as real and likeable. And you're right, Miriel's real adventures are about to begin.

Thanks again for your feedback.
Review By [maxthehobbit] • Date [7 Mar 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three: Breaking Point" from maxthehobbit
Review:
So much for the Steward being a good Father ... raping his own daughter. Maybe it isn't the first time, maybe that's why she has these bouts of melancholy. And what could her 'boyfriend/protector' do ... his Lord could have him killed if he did anything. Methinks it is time for Miriel to leave and head to the north country earlier than she had planned. Maybe this is what her Grandfather was trying to warn her about.

I knew this was going to be a good story, I've read other stories you have written. I held off as long as possible, it drives me crazy waiting for updates. But I ran out of stories to read, some of the better ones I've read several times till I almost know the story by heart. I'm trying to read this story slowly so I can enjoy it more, but I doubt it will happen.
Comments from author:
You've pretty much hit the nail on the head regarding your observations on the story thus far. The only thing to which I raise an eyebrow is your comment about Miriel's "Grandfather", but I won't say any more about that just yet...

I'm glad that you've decided to read this tale of mine, even though it's not complete. I have every intention on completing this, hopefully by the end of the year but don't hold me to that. LOL! My muse sometimes likes to draw out storylines that I hadn't planned on.

Thank you so much for the feedback. I really appreciate it.
Review By [maxthehobbit] • Date [5 Mar 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty-four: The Return to Rivendell" from kiwi
Review:
thank you for the lovely update. :)
Comments from author:
You're welcome. :-)
Review By [kiwi] • Date [25 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty-four: The Return to Rivendell" from Misty
Review:
What a beautiful, sweet chapter. Thank you for both the chapter & giving Miriel a chance to breathe
Comments from author:
Thanks for the feedback!
Review By [Misty] • Date [25 Feb 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty-three: Butting Heads" from (Recent Donor)Luna
Review:
This exchange elicited both an "Aw" and "haha":
Elladan smiled. “Not only is she courageous and fair, but she’s clever as well,” murmured the Elf, watching as Miriel rounded the corner. He then took off after her.

Gúron nudged Elrohir’s arm. “Does Elladan have feelings for Miriel?” he asked in surprise.

“Finally catching on, eh?” replied Elrohir with a snort. Slapping the Ranger on the back, he added, “Shall we go watch the bonfire?” The younger son of Elrond then followed the same path as his brother.
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And then this was just total sadness:
“If he truly loved her, he knows,” answered Elladan softly. “One always knows when their mate is in trouble.”

“I wouldn’t know,” said Miriel.

The Slayer’s comment made it painfully clear that she was oblivious to Elladan’s affection for her.

AWWW POOR ELLADAN :(
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I will say, sometimes I can't tell if I hate Miriel or not...I despise a negative attitude but yes, get the trauma deal....I feel like I have a love-hate relationship with this story :p Her exchange with Mithrandir bugged me. I feel like she is possessed sometimes. Her father was only like that because of Sauron's influence on the palantir. I don't know what her excuse is...
Comments from author:
I appreciate your taking the time to read and comment despite your love-hate for this story. ;-) I can somewhat understand your feelings in regards to Miriel and her actions. I have shown throughout the story that she has a tendency to butt heads with authority figures. This, of course, stems from her relationship with her father. She felt helpless against Denethor, whom she considered the most powerful man in Middle-earth, even after she got her powers. When she left Minas Tirith, she had made up her mind not to allow herself to become victimized by those with a substantial amount of influence (i.e. Halbarad, Gandalf, and even Bregolas to a certain extent) over her.

Her clash with Gandalf is the result of her tragic past, contempt for authority figures, ever-growing ego, and youth. That can be a deadly combination, which is why I had Gandalf warn her about her attitude.

Hopefully, I haven't turned you off this story for good.
Review By [(Recent Donor)Luna] • Date [21 Jan 13] • Not Rated
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