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Review of chapter "Late Night Walks 2/2" from AceDreamer
Review:
Just re-reading this. It's as good, if not better, than the first time I read it.

Thanks for writing such good stuff.
Review By [AceDreamer] • Date [18 May 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Late Night Walks 2/2" from kffs
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Crazy, creative, and very well done.

Thanks for writing!
Review By [kffs] • Date [9 Apr 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Late Night Walks 2/2" from (Current Donor)Ironbear
Review:
Interesting. I really like this concept and story.

I watched the Watchmen film just last night, and found myself thinking that a YAHF with Jonathan dressing as Rorsach would make for a neat non-Scooby Halloween story to write. Or for a more terrifying idea: Snyder as Rorsach. ;)

I disagree with a lot of the other reviewers on the non-Scooby Sunnydaler vignettes and cameos: I think they add a needed element to the depth of the story. Just make sure that you plot out all of the secondary storylines and arcs so that they complement and support the main story and plot, and they should add richness rather than being intrusive.

Nice work so far. I'll add this to my story tracking.
Review By [(Current Donor)Ironbear] • Date [9 Oct 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Late Night Walks 2/2" from Moontrap
Review:
Another great chapter. Thank you for letting us read your work, and I can't wait to read more of it.

Sincerely

John
Review By [Moontrap] • Date [5 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Late Night Walks 2/2" from (Recent Donor)deitarionSSokolow
Review:
First time I've actually seen someone NOT break the bust and I'm surprised nobody thought of it sooner. Nice job on the supporting cast. Characterization bits like Harmony's Goa'uld experience and Frank Colcoon's backstory and reaction to the powers in the Buffyverse really make the fic.

I worry that, with so many of them being so good, it'll feel disappointing if you don't follow up on them and risk diluting the story if you do, but you seem to be managing it decently so far, so all I can say is "excellent work".

Nice touch with Janus echoing Ethan's peanut butter dichotomy and how you're having Xander's knowledge adjust things without it taking over the story. That kind of narrative finesse is far too rare.

However, the sequences (dreams?) at the end of chapter 3 and beginning and end of chapter 4 don't really feel appropriate. They feel like you haven't prepared the reader adequately to care about them and, as a result, when I get through them, trusting that you have a purpose to them, I end up feeling annoyed that I just wasted my time when I could have skipped over them without missing anything of value.
Review By [(Recent Donor)deitarionSSokolow] • Date [19 Jul 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Repercussions" from Darklight
Review:
Like it, but got more interested in Harmony and Amy what they are going to do and changes apply to them. Also nice one about Xander,looking forward to see how things will change. Keep the chapters coming.
Comments from author:
Really? Most people don't care to see what's going on with Harmony. I kinda wanted to do a short spin-off about her.
Review By [Darklight] • Date [1 Jun 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Late Night Walks 2/2" from Dusel
Review:
Finally a new chapter! Finally! What a DAY! Happy Day! I love it. I would have loved more Willow, but that's just me. :D
Review By [Dusel] • Date [1 Jun 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Late Night Walks 2/2" from Gideon
Review:
Well Willow is starting to be a little useful but sounds like she will be a giant walking bruise soon, if she isn't already. Maybe she can help find Buffy? I wonder if House has done anything useful like locking up the zombie woman maybe? Or would he just follow her home? Angel needs to step up his game if he wants to appeal to Buffy when her friends are becoming tougher and more useful. Maybe he could help vanquish a certain demon to win her favor back?
I like the interludes where we see the other side of each possession, we don't see that very often.
Comments from author:
Well, if she would give herself some time to recover that wouldn't happen. Silly Willow. But when it comes to Angel... I just don't like him. I try to keep personal bias out of fics, but sometimes it leaks through as interesting plot-points. I mean, I know some people think of Xander as the karma houdini (TVtropes does!) but Angel has it just as much. And he's pretty stupid in the early seasons. I think the first time I noticed it was when they were fighting for Acathla's arm, and he jumped in the water. After Buffy. Who is a slayer. Who can swim. Thereby letting the potentially world-ending arm get away. ???

Don't even get me started on the AtS episode where Cordy is getting false visions... does he ever get even a slap on the wrist for that? Not to mention when he killed that woman with the baby's Champion...

Double standards, I tell ya. Faith kills one guy on accident and gets guilt-tripped till she goes Dark Side. Angel takes out a couple dozen good guys even with his soul and only does a 'opps'.

...Sorry about that rant.
Review By [Gideon] • Date [1 Jun 11] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Late Night Walks 2/2" from lunalurker
Review:
Another update, hurrah! This has been an extremely well-crafted read so far, with nice little character details as well as Halloween consequences you don't often see. Do keep up the good work, hope more comes along soon, and thanks for writing!
Review By [lunalurker] • Date [1 Jun 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Late Night Walks 1/2" from angrymonkey
Review:
Good story, I like seeing how Rosarch and Willow`s personalities clash. The only criticism I have is that it feels a little cluttered with the many references to other fandoms that seem somewhat secondary to the main plot.
Review By [angrymonkey] • Date [20 Mar 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Late Night Walks 1/2" from Moontrap
Review:
You are money and you don't even know it.
Read this a week ago, but was unable to reply till now. Thank you for letting us read your work, and I can't wait to read more of it.

Sincerely

John
Comments from author:
Thank you for reading, and reviewing. This story is one of my 'heavier' ones and takes a bit of time to get in the proper mind-set to write. But I shall do my best.
Review By [Moontrap] • Date [31 Dec 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Late Night Walks 1/2" from CJNyfalt
Review:
Nice chapters so far, looking forward to more.
Review By [CJNyfalt] • Date [21 Dec 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Late Night Walks 1/2" from Gideon
Review:
Quite a cast of characters! I hope that Willow's trust for Xander can overcome Rosarch's distrust of everyone. They are stronger together than apart!
Review By [Gideon] • Date [19 Dec 10] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Late Night Walks 1/2" from mokahi
Review:
Nice! I love the glimpse of Elizabeth's life at the end. So intriguing.
Review By [mokahi] • Date [19 Dec 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Late Night Walks 1/2" from VillageOrchid
Review:
Some of the vingnettes stand alone well, while other seem to pull away from the narrative. The parts with the main characters going well. I like the dark Xena and Kiki gals.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [19 Dec 10] • Not Rated
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