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Review of chapter "Chapter 6" from JinaSolo
Review:
More please!

This is a very good story!

So, can Buffy get virtual N7 training? Is she a Biotic also?

Can they split so they are in both Universes when Willow brings Buffy back?

What if it brings a copy of the Normandy back? With the crew as humans?
Review By [JinaSolo] • Date [11 Aug 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Prologue" from JoeHundredaire
Review:
Coming into the story, the first thing I notice is that the story is supposedly beta but still possesses a smattering of basic grammatical and sentence construction problems that your beta probably should have caught - if he's there only for general plot and characterization and such, you might wish to pick up a second beta for actual spelling/grammar/readability reasons - along with a really bad case of Burly Detective Syndrome. Never in canon once do we get "Dark Slayer", "Dark One", "Golden Slayer", et cetera. The character has a name: Faith. The other Slayer has a name as well: Buffy. Faith Lehane and Buffy Summers respectively if you're dealing with a formal character or situation, where a first name alone might prove inadequate. There is absolutely nothing wrong with using a character's name or, failing that, an occasional descriptor for variety. But you don't need to sit there running through a checklist of titles that might apply to a character, especially when they're all fanon to begin with.
Review By [JoeHundredaire] • Date [14 Dec 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 6" from draconis
Review:
I think it would be a good idea to provide a warning at the beginning that the reader must absolutely know Mass Effect...in MUCH more detail than is usually required for a typical fanfic cross-over...to be able to follow this particular story.

The premise was good (giving Faith an alternate shot at redemption without necessarily abandoning the Scoobies), but I had an extremely difficult time following and understanding what's going on...to the point where it makes no sense for me to continue reading. I have had SOME exposure to Mass Effect, but it's not something in which I've immersed myself to any great degree.

If I knew Mass Effect...in detail...before reading the story it would likely be much more enjoyable for me. It would have helped had you provided more background/context while developing the story.

I don't recall having the same problem with any of your other (or other authors') cross-overs. BTW, I hope you'll get "unstuck" on some of your other stories in the near future.
Comments from author:
Your right I should put that warning in. As for the background well this is suppose to be set in place of the new game of Mass Effect 3. In an earlier chapter I gave a small summary of the first two games.

As for my other stories, I'm slowly getting unstuck.
Review By [draconis] • Date [10 Jul 11] • Rating [6 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Prologue" from JoeHundredaire
Review:
While it's not bad to the point of being worthy of quarantine, I highly recommend you get a beta. I can spot at least half a dozen basic grammatical errors in this chapter alone.

EDIT: Fucking iOS autocorrect. Yes, half a dozen. And there is a subforum in the official TtH forum for beta acquisition, as well as the possibility of advertising in your next chapter.
Comments from author:
err... half a different? do you mean half a dozen?

As for a beta, I'd be willing to have someone look over it, if they were interested.

EDIT: Okay, well I think I have it advertised at the end of my last chapter. And I look in the forum to ask for help. Thank you.
Review By [JoeHundredaire] • Date [9 Jul 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 5" from Omegaprime
Review:
An interesting start to this story.

Keep up the good work.
Comments from author:
thank you.
Review By [Omegaprime] • Date [9 Jul 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 5" from Ltlconf
Review:
Howdy!

Never been a big fan of 'Go Ask Malice' as it retconned alot (not that Joss doesn't do that alot as well, and as after-fact ok'ed GaM this was one case) ESPECIALLY Faith's age...and a whole other discussion. Sorry.
In any case this story is so damned original and well done I could give a damn, so keep it up if you would please!



The Cracker!
Comments from author:
Well Thank you and I'm glad you're liking this so far. The reason it's original is because I didn't feel like rehashing what happened in the first two Mass Effect games and I'm just using the little that wAs shown of ME3 at a gaming conference as a sound board.

As for go ask malice, I liked the story besides I didn't think Joss really gave Faith much of a backstory myself so the book kind of help for the explanation to the Crew.

Anyway I'm glad you like this so far and I'll hopeful have more soon.
Review By [Ltlconf] • Date [9 Jul 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 5" from Addlcove
Review:
good start, looking forward to seeing more.
Comments from author:
Thank you, I'm glad you like it so far.
Review By [Addlcove] • Date [8 Jul 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Prologue" from JacobPhoenix
Review:
hey good Start
Comments from author:
Thank you.
Review By [JacobPhoenix] • Date [8 Jul 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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