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Review of chapter "Ch. 10 - Road Trip" from Dragan
Review:
Like what I'm reading so far, just a minor addition to Texas History, the Alamo(And Goliad) also delayed Santa Anna long enough so that Sam Houston could begin to train forces during his retreat until he counter-attacked as San Jacinto(Near Houston) and captured Santa Anna and got him to Surrender Texas to the Republic.
Comments from author:
All true. But more information than I needed then or need for when this (may) come back into play.
Review By [Dragan] • Date [5 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 33" from (Recent Donor)draconin
Review:
Just reread this story; great idea & very entertaining. I gather you have plans to continue it at some point? Very much looking forward to reading more!
Comments from author:
You may or may not have noticed, but I'm currently in the process of revising this story. Especially the first 15 or so chapters. This was my first story here and one of my first stories ever. I did eventually become a better writer, but it took a while. After that, I'm hoping the muse will be inspired to keep writing.
Review By [(Recent Donor)draconin] • Date [12 Sep 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 33" from TrevaRea
Review:
Have you considered whether you'll continue this or not? It's really very good and it'd be nice to see more produced.

Thanks for the read!
Treva
Comments from author:
Will continue, am continuing. Just not going to post until it's finished. Because there's few things worse to me than reading 100k words for a 1k update.
Review By [TrevaRea] • Date [2 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 33" from ChefJackButler
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Sayest Oxnate: "I see you've discovered my secret. I'm good at tweaking canon, but not so great at coming up with original stories. I *am* working on it. Sorry."


Oh do not get me wrong, I think you're a fantastic writer and I really enjoy reading your work. It was a mild complaint at best. And believe me, I understand what you're going through, if in a different fashion. I painstakingly outline each story, and my outlines include goals for the characters, what needs to happen for them to achieve those goals, what might cause them to fail those goals, and so on, and then a chapter by chapter outline of the main plot points.

Within three or four chapters, inevitably the story has taken me in a direction I did not forsee and I'm reduced to basically making it up as I go along. I try to include things from the outline nonetheless, but also inevitably the story will often move so far afield that the outline now applies to a separate story entirely.

I do hope you get to the point where you can continue these stories.
Comments from author:
For this story. The reason I was able to get so far, I think, was that I didn't write an outline until I was many chapters in already. It still got away from me too, but I think I got farther than I would have otherwise.
Review By [ChefJackButler] • Date [23 Jun 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 33" from ChefJackButler
Review:
You keep doing this thing where you write this amazingly entertaining story and get it to a point that would naturally lead to other things and then it stops. I know you've said you do intend to come back to these stories, but damn is this frustrating.
Comments from author:
I see you've discovered my secret. I'm good at tweaking canon, but not so great at coming up with original stories. I *am* working on it. Sorry.
Review By [ChefJackButler] • Date [22 Jun 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 33" from Kumayasha
Review:
Just found your story, it's GREAT!

Adding this to tracking, hope to see the rest one day.
Comments from author:
Wonderful. Glad you love it. I also hope to see the rest one day too.
Review By [Kumayasha] • Date [5 Jun 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 33" from Addlcove
Review:
having re-read this, again, I hope you muse brings you back to this story at some point.
Comments from author:
She does, very occasionally. But I'm not going to make people re-read 100k words for a 2k update. WHEN I update, it will be worth it.
Review By [Addlcove] • Date [18 May 14] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 33" from uochou
Review:
This story rocks! I really hope that you add to it at some point, I am really looking forward to reading what happens next! You are a very talented writer.
Comments from author:
Thank you. I will be finishing this at some point. I just don't know when. Thank you again.
Review By [uochou] • Date [20 Apr 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 33" from nemogbr
Review:
Great story. I did wonder whether Cordelia, Jonathan and the others of the Trio, Oz and perhaps the magical community would be recruited by Xander. They should be able to recruit more.
Comments from author:
Huge casts are hard for both authors and readers to keep track of. There will be some growth, but not everyone.
Review By [nemogbr] • Date [30 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 33" from MasterRahl
Review:
Buffy shouldn't really get mad at Xander, emergency treatment comes before modesty. I really enjoyed your fresh take on Ford and I'm looking foreword to where things go with Walsh.
Comments from author:
She shouldn't, but Xander isn't a doctor. Or she doesn't know/comprehend that he performed a doctor's duties for her. If she thought of him as a doctor, she wouldn't be upset. But she thinks of him as a friend boy, so her initial reaction is to prevent him from seeing her naughty bits.
Review By [MasterRahl] • Date [15 Mar 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Episode 5: Return of the Jolinar" from Paradoxicality
Review:
violating conservation of energy as a side point is not nearly as bad as Mass Effect
Highschool Chemistry says "you need protons to have atoms" and "atomic number=number of protons in atom"
Eezo, the basis all tech in Mass Effect has an atomic number of Zero and somehow changes MASS(and they are VERY specific about it)
Comments from author:
I'm not terribly familiar with Mass Effect. Hopefully you think my explanations here are at least plausible.
Review By [Paradoxicality] • Date [9 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 33" from RedCalypso
Review:
It's been well over two years. Is this yet another wonderful story that will never be finished?
Comments from author:
I've said from the beginning that this one isn't dead and I mean it. WHEN it gets finished, I do not know. I'm still working on it occasionally but I'm not going to post anything more until it's finished - because we're already 3/4 the way to the end.
Review By [RedCalypso] • Date [9 Feb 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 33" from BotticellisMuse
Review:
I forgot to plead about doing something about ppairing buffy with angel. Im not sold on the idea when the series was still airing. And joss et al continuing it in the comics is really pushingit too far. I mean enough already, you can only take so much angst and drama about the star crossed lovers not to mention that by their very natures, theyre really contradictory. Just please pair her with anyone asidefrom angel. Ford would be okay here since hes already part of the scoobies and that would even things up bec even the adults have romantic lives.. look at joyce having a potential boyfriend in the police officer she met in that ride along occasion!
Comments from author:
I'm very sure that I was never planing on pairing anyone with any vampire (except other vampires). Not even sure if I was going to pair anyone with anyone else.
Review By [BotticellisMuse] • Date [2 Jan 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 33" from BotticellisMuse
Review:
Im thoroughly enjoying this story andi do hope you find inspiration enough to continue writing for this. Its quite good and the microhard, thats gold. Thanks so much for sharing your creativity with us!

Im hoping too that the explosion is a result of a self destruct mechanism from the robot and not something stupid that buffy did. Because if she shot the robot and caused the explosion, the subsequent conflict and pain and guilt for her and between her and the rest the scoobies would be quite sad. I get your desire to show the limelight to others. And that at this point remnants of a bratty immature buffy with not so good martial skills is quite understandable. Buffy is not booksmart like willow. Shes not even a third of upgraded xander at this point too. But buffy is an intelligent capable hero and fighter, very human in all her shortcomings and passion yes but a hero nonetheless.. so i really really hope you have plans to portray her character progressing maturing into a better person fighter and team player. Otherwise its such a disservice and waste.
Comments from author:
Thank you very much.

The explosion was not the result of a self-destruct mechanism. But there's no way anyone could have known that it would explode so there's no blame, and very little guilt.

Honestly, I'd have to look at my notes to figure out where I was going with Buffy in this story, but it was one of my first stories ever, so yeah, it went a little Uber-Xander. I don't know if there's enough room left in the story to bring back any semblance of balance.
Review By [BotticellisMuse] • Date [2 Jan 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 33" from TheLandYacht
Review:
EXCELLENT story, even after a third (or is it fourth) re-read.

Looking forward to more when the Muse decides to cooperate again.
Comments from author:
Thank you. I also want to this thing finished.
Review By [TheLandYacht] • Date [26 Nov 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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