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Review of chapter "Chapter 1" from Jorrie
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It's a good start. There's not enough story line yet to say much else, but over all a good start. I'm glad that your spelling is good. :) Some of the explanatory details were a bit redundant (i.e ."Once the dust settled the rider turned off the engine and reached up to take off their helmet that was on their head." "Once the dust settled the rider turned off the engine and removed their helmet," would have been more efficient). Just small redundancies really, barely noticeable, but I thought to mention it as a small critique. A certain efficiency is usually appreciated when first describing the scene to lead into the story. Sometimes the reader just want to get on to the juicy/exciting parts. ;) Can't wait to read more. Hope you update soon!
Review By [Jorrie] • Date [8 May 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 1" from eriktheviking
Review:
A well written insertion of Buffy into the beginning of the crossover.
Review By [eriktheviking] • Date [7 May 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 1" from DarthPayne
Review:
Whoa, this could be good. :)
Review By [DarthPayne] • Date [7 May 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Prologue" from SariLane
Review:
I love the movie Legion. So I'm excited about your story. I hope you update soon. I will only nitpick one thing. It's diner, not dinner. Sorry, I'm not trying to be rude. Again, please update soon. I hope this is a Buffy/Michael pairing... with a happy ending.
Comments from author:
thanks for letting me know! I sometimes write to fast and don't catch some of my mistakes so thanks for that!
Review By [SariLane] • Date [1 May 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Prologue" from alexceasar
Review:
very interesting start. more please
Review By [alexceasar] • Date [1 May 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Prologue" from glrasshopper
Review:
A promising start. Looking forward to seeing more of this.
Review By [glrasshopper] • Date [1 May 12] • Not Rated
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