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Review of chapter "Chapter Fourteen." from DieselDriver
Review:
Now that Keyes guy is a certifiable psychopath. Doesn't give a hoot for all the people he just caused to die as long as he isn't hurt and doesn't get punished.

This: "General who sort out Faith with his eyes" Looks like another one of those darned typos. I suspect you meant "sought" instead of "sort". Right?
Comments from author:
Yep, right on both counts...all though I might hold my hands up to the sort/sought thing, I've have to check!

Cheers,
D.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [15 Jan 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eleven." from DieselDriver
Review:
Gah, 9mm are such a waste of materials if you're not after soft targets. They should have had 45's on hand at the very least. I kind of like Wes' idea of iron bullets. Pretty hard on barrels though. Silver is a "known" antithesis to evil but casting bullets from it is impractical because it shrinks a lot as it cools. It might work better if the silver bullets are dipped in lead leaving the tip exposed so the lead will peal away sort of like a sabot. Oh now there's an idea. 45 cal bullets out of a 50 cal with sabots to make them the correct caliber. The do that a lot in blackpowder shooting. That last bit of the chapter reminds me of my father's Desert Eagle in 44 mag. Even my mom could shoot it. A lot of the recoil is taken up operating the action. They're now available in 50 cal action express rounds. Would definitely make a predator take notice...
Comments from author:
Not a fan of 9mm, which is why Faith picks up on the M22 (I think it is) pistol in .45 cal.

Silver is only really useful against Werewolves and I think the best and easiest way of using it with a fire arm is as buckshot from a shotgun. Trying to make bullets from silver is more trouble than its worth, in my view.

'True Iron' which appears to include steel is the traditional metal of choice against demons...which is why in the Buffyverse swords work and bullets don't...plus I think Joss has something against guns.

A predator isn't really that tough, he's just hard to hit. Once you get over the invisibility thing 7.62mm long or short rounds should chew 'em up in short order.

Cheers,
D.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [15 Jan 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Ten." from DieselDriver
Review:
Very exciting. Good read. Good portrayal of Wesley as a borderline psychotic. Not a psychopath though, he still cares about people, his brain is just "fried" by his upbringing and perhaps a bit of trauma somewhere along the way. Definitely started out trying to compensate and be the "perfect little man" for a father he probably couldn't please. Quite sympathetic really, if you think about it. He's certainly brave, given that I use the definition that bravery is doing what you need to do when you are scared almost out of your mind. An awful lot of people would have screamed and either frozen or turned and run in panic.

For Faith I think they should get her a Barrett 50 cal modified to be easier to carry, sling etc, no bipod. 20 round magazine instead of 10. Weight about 20-25 pounds, not sure how much a loaded round weighs. The bullet is 750 grains which is about 2 1/2 ounces. Muzzle velocity about 2700 feet per second. That would really put the hurt on an alien. One round through the head and done. Trust me, it would go through the head. If it didn't, say the armor stopped the round from penetrating, the blunt force would probably break the alien's neck and possibly rip the head off. That's why you'll probably NEVER see one without a muzzle brake.

The military can afford it, they're only about $10,000.
Comments from author:
One of my disappointments about this series was I never developed the Wes story line as I had originally intended to...he just sort of faded from sight...pity.

I actually quite like Wes after he stopped being used for comic relief!

I know that Barretts are actually used as 'anti-tank rifles' that is against light armour; APCs, Armoured Cars and such like so it would kill most things. But you have to remember that while Faith is strong she still doesn't mass a great deal...check out you tube for some shots of young women trying to use large cal weapons...I think this is the story Faith picked up on the assault shotgun. I mainly choose this weapon because of all the different types of round it could use, most of which I'm assured can be bought over the counter in the States. Steel ball bearing shot is effective against demons, incendiary rounds are effective against vampires and other things. There's also non-lethal bean bag rounds and anti-riot gas rounds.

As will be seen in later stories.

Cheers,
D.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [15 Jan 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Seven." from DieselDriver
Review:
"They had a satellite in orbit right above the city"

This is a physical impossibility. For a satellite to maintain a position over something other than the equator, requires thrust. Thrust means it's under power. The only orbits that are geostationary are at 23-24 thousand miles up and only directly over the equator. I forget the exact number. Anyway, even in those spots some fuel is required to re-adjust the position from time to time due to outside influences like tides. So unless he has a spaceship handy that is capable of hovering over a given spot, any view he has is from off to the south or from a series of satellites as each passes overhead. Maybe change it to a "very high, long endurance, stealth spy plane or drone".
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [14 Jan 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Five." from DieselDriver
Review:
"before her neck shaped and her pistol emptied." Huh? "snapped" maybe?
Comments from author:
Probably...darn typos!

Cheers,
D.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [14 Jan 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three." from DieselDriver
Review:
Weasley, er, Wesley makes such a good Inspector Clouseau.
Comments from author:
You think? Yep I can see that.

Cheers,
D.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [14 Jan 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Ten." from DieselDriver
Review:
Santa Claws??? How about Santa Claus? There have been a lot of wrong words like this but this one pushed my button. Sorry. Good story, I like it, but it really needs some proofreading.
Comments from author:
It's awhile since I wrote this but I think I actually did mean Santa CLAWS, a reference to Anya's story about the Santa that disembowels small children. I promise you I do know the difference.

And yes, homophones are a bugger.

Cheers,
D.

Just Checked back, its definitely Santa CLAWS, a reference to the evil Santa. Long long ago I wrote a fic called 'Santa Claws is Coming to Town' (I think) and y'know what, I might very well write a 'Claws' fic for this Xmas!
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [6 Sep 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Seventeen." from WhippingDawn
Review:
Finished. Took longer than it should have because my notebook went beyond the call of duty as far as being unstable goes, so I had to reinstall the whole shebang. This morning 173 updates were waiting to be installed...

Well at least it works beautifully now. The story was absolutely the best in the series! I have seen bits of "Predator" and you have really made a brilliant description. Also it's good to see Faith back in full shape, killing the bastards. Makes me wonder how she would deal with Klingons... :)

Also the Willow part is very well done, I hope those two end up together for good in the future.

The Wesley/Shannon interaction was also quite brilliant. I like the idea that watchers and slayers should be paired with caution instead of randomly. But I still hope to see Wesley and Rona interact again, that was damn fun!

OK, going to #9 now. Thanks again for this wonderful series!
Comments from author:
Now that is a lot of updates!

Ok, Willow; now I realise that I should never have had Willow/Faith as a couple. It made the back story too messy. Oh well, hindsight is an exact science.

I really wanted to do more Wesley/Shannon but there just didn't seem to be the time.

Ok, glad you're liking these stories.

Cheers,
D.
Review By [WhippingDawn] • Date [16 May 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Seventeen." from SilverWave
Review:
Cracking read :-)

Cheers
Comments from author:
'Predators' are such bullies!

Cheers,
D.
Review By [SilverWave] • Date [8 Dec 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Seventeen." from Dragonelf
Review:
You have done a great job so far with the series and I am already looking forward to start reading the prequel.

::Gives the plot bunny a slice of Chocolate Cheese Pie::

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"I am Grey. I stand between the candle
and the star. We are Grey. We stand
between the darkness and the light."
- Delenn, Babylon 5
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Comments from author:
Thank-you.

Funny, but I was reading through what will be the First FITA story last night set before Faith enlisted. I think its good to go. Now, the only thing is when do I post it?

Well the answer to that is after I finish the 'Faith in Basic Training' fic!

Cheers,
D.
Review By [Dragonelf] • Date [26 Jul 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Seventeen." from lunalurker
Review:
I love this series So. Hard. Seriously. Okay, I might be an easier sell than some because I'm already a Faith fan, but still. It's been a great ride so far, and I can't wait until more arrives. Thank you so much for writing. :)
Comments from author:
Thank-you so much for your nice review. I hope I won't disapoint with future stories.

Cheers,
D.
Review By [lunalurker] • Date [25 Jul 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Seventeen." from maxthehobbit
Review:
Not only do you write excellent Kennedy, but you write Faith as a good guy even better than most people write Buffy. Never been a real big Faith fan, but the way you write her ... I could read almost forever. Willow falling for Faith made sense to me, I've always had this notion that Willow was an untapped source of wildness .. mild-mannered shy witch ... indeed. Looking forward to the next installment in this series.
Comments from author:
Yep, they say you should always look out for the shy witches, they'll be offering you 'cups of the good red gold if you'll be their lover so true' as soon as look at you!

There's a Fita story with both Faith and Kennedy in the pipe line, we'll see how that goes! In BtVS S7 Faith and Kennedy seemed to get on quite well the few times they interacted, so, I don't know where people get this Faith hates Kennedy thing from.

Anyway thanks for all the nice comments, glad you're enjoying the series.

D.

Ps; Once upon a time I wasn't a great Faith fan either...now look at me!
Review By [maxthehobbit] • Date [9 Jul 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Seventeen." from BillieBog
Review:
Really enjoyed this chapter. Great AU
Comments from author:
Thank-you,
D.
Review By [BillieBog] • Date [24 Jun 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Seventeen." from BrownFinderth
Review:
Glad that Wesley has fallen hard for Shannon!! Yet, feel that he should come clean with her.
Comments from author:
So it would seem! As for telling the whole truth, we'll have to wait and see.

Cheers,
D.
Review By [BrownFinderth] • Date [18 Jun 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "CXhapter Eight." from BrownFinderth
Review:
Could Wesley be falling for Shannon? Or, will he use her for his own ends?
Comments from author:
This is what I'm trying to work out for the spin-off story!

Cheers,
D.
Review By [BrownFinderth] • Date [18 Jun 12] • Not Rated
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