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Review of chapter "Chapter eight: Halloween Part One" from bradsan
Review:
Ok this story got potential and I like it.
I thought it was Buffy centered but I read more about Peria and the charmed ones than Buffy.
Where does this leave Dawn because she is made out of Buffy so she is technically Buffy's daughter if you gone write that she is Buffy's sister than she is also Peria's daughter. So just curious.

When the demon came Peria ordered everybody upstairs while she isn't the one who used to fight demons. That sounds strange to me and Buffy and Willow aren't persons you can order around. Peria is activated after the spell so Buffy has more experience fighting than Peria will ever have. Buffy has more experience than the charmed ones and why because Buffy has to fight them every night for seven years. while the charmed ones didn't. And you can't say because Peria is her mom she obeyed. She just know her.

Well I'm done. Oh one thing try to take your time and go deeper in to some objects because sometimes you rush through a chapter while you can take it much deeper.
Now I'm done and waiting what will come next. I'm tracking so I won't miss anything.
Comments from author:
Thx for the review.
Review By [bradsan] • Date [17 Oct 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter four: Butterfly Fly Away" from AmeliaHalliwell
Review:
I love your story and yes i am the person that she writes about at the bottom of each chapter. her BFF. I especially love the ending that's my favourite song by Miley Cyrus
Comments from author:
thx for reading it. tell me what you think at school some time
Review By [AmeliaHalliwell] • Date [14 Sep 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three: The Birth of Junior Jacobs." from Duchess
Review:
*g* So that's how little Paige Junior entered the world? Cute! Why don't they just call her PJ? *curious*
Comments from author:
because that is what they call Phoebe's first born Prudence Johnna.
Review By [Duchess] • Date [9 Sep 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One: What Once Was" from liit
Review:
Hi it's me again, geez when I said "what" out for spelling mistakes, here I am making spelling mistakes...hehehhe. what I meant to say is watch out for spelling mistakes ;) goodluck!
Comments from author:
thx and if you can spot some it would be helpful
Review By [liit] • Date [30 Aug 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter four: Butterfly Fly Away" from liit
Review:
Hi you're story has the potential to be great. What out for spelling mistakes (there were quite a few)...the story seems rush and a bit confusing...I am not saying that your story sucks, it's not. Like I said it has the potential to be better ;) keep on writing and don't be discourage by criticism...
Comments from author:
Thx and the more i write the better it would be!
Review By [liit] • Date [29 Aug 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter four: Butterfly Fly Away" from ThePureOne
Review:
I like it so far is Buffy gonna get a nifty charmed power up?
Comments from author:
she and her sisters are going to be the power of four!
Review By [ThePureOne] • Date [28 Aug 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
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