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The Beginning Is The End...Pt.2

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Review of chapter "Book Two: Present Paradox:Clone and Gingerbread" from DieselDriver
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"No, their a monster..."

Should be, "No, they're a monster..."

"They" and "Are" contract to form "they're". "Their" is ownership and, of course, "There" is location.

Their car was over there in the parking lot and they're going to go get in and leave the mall.

Good start and again you need to work on word usage and grammar. I hope you end this one better than the previous. I'm reading this one in hopes you do better with the ending.

You still need a better proofreader.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [2 Jun 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Parental Guidance pt.1" from Candygram
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I'm really enjoying this series, and look forward to updates. If you're still thinking of a Daddy for Xander, them may I suggest John Winchester? Not only has he got military training, (maybe he was a friend of Jack O' Neill's, and that's how he met Jessica?) but he knows about the 'things-that-go-bump-in-the-night, and how to fight them. How he reacted when his wife died, and how he raised his boys, if I had a child with him, and was living on the Hellmouth, I'd be worried to tell him about it too!

Xander's father needs to be kick-ass scary, to the point where the Watchers, and possibly the nocturnal residents of Sunnydale, have heard of 'Him', and really don't want to be on 'His' radar, but he also needs to be approachable, and understanding as a father should be. Which is why I thought of John. Also having Xander trying to explain why John, or his boys can't kill either Spike or Angel, could be interesting!
Review By [Candygram] • Date [24 May 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Slayer's Test...pt.5" from Glongi
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I was thinking Sabertooth from Marvel... But really, that was done too, I think.
Mystique would be more... interesting. And a possible source of her being a her, really...

Still, Xan being the outcome of an one night stand of Daniel Jackson... Just not big enough OMPH to have Quentin know about it. (Or really, to even count as something special in the father department.)
Review By [Glongi] • Date [12 May 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Parental Guidance pt.1" from BigredTheBallCrusher
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Does this mean that Riggs is Xander's daddy dearest, I hope so, and yay! for using my suggestion if so. There really aren't enough lethal weapon x-overs out there. Hope to see more soon. Taz
Comments from author:
sorry to disappoint. but...no, he is important to the plot though. I liked the idea of Riggs in the story cause his brand of crazy is similar to fanon Xander's crazy. but I think you will be surprised about who I did pick. It's not a character used in crossovers that I've seen.
Review By [BigredTheBallCrusher] • Date [9 May 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Goddess and Key" from Markelo
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For Xander's dad I would like to see Trick (Lost Girl)
Review By [Markelo] • Date [14 Feb 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Goddess and Key" from Zyanadryn
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For a possible father for Xander is after Freza died. Joyce went on a short holiday to forget her sadness and ended up in a small coastal town in Main called Storybrook. Where she met a local pawn broker and had a memorable evening with to sweep away her sad memories of her departed sister!
Review By [Zyanadryn] • Date [10 Dec 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Goddess and Key" from Kiristeen
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Enjoying the story a lot. : ) I hope you're interested in constructive comments -- if not, ignore this next bit -- The story could use a bit more showing as opposed to telling, but other than that, I love your plot line.

You surprised me with Karr, I'd really thought it was kitt.

I if you still want 'votes' for Xander's father, I hereby place one vote for Snape. : )~

Looking forward to seeing more of this, regardless of who his father turns out to be.

Kiri
Review By [Kiristeen] • Date [7 Dec 13] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Goddess and Key" from (Recent Donor)RavenWoodbane
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Hahahahahaha so freaking awesome !!! \o/ so many feels ... So can't wait for the next installment, you always deliver such Epicness!
Review By [(Recent Donor)RavenWoodbane] • Date [18 Nov 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Goddess and Key" from iamastory
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So funny cant wait for more! Is dawn really 15 shouldn't she be younger? When is xander and spike say thy r goin out or what? Is the storyline with the Mayor goin happen? Wen is xander dad commin to the story? I really hope that u update soon! Please and thank u!
:)
Review By [iamastory] • Date [16 Nov 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Slayer's Test...pt.5" from submariner
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how about mike jenkins for xanders dad. the character is also known as the kildar from the books ghost, kildar etc by john ringo. he is an ex navy seal instructor who is very protective of women and is utterly without mercy to people / bad guys who harm his friends.
Review By [submariner] • Date [15 Nov 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Goddess and Key" from Eureka
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Only one thing to say....LMFAO!!!!!!!
So glad I didn't have any tea in my mouth when I read that one!
Review By [Eureka] • Date [9 Nov 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Slayer's Test...pt.5" from DarkFaerieYumi
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I vote Loki or Tony Stark!
Review By [DarkFaerieYumi] • Date [9 Jul 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Slayer's Test...pt.5" from iamastory
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john winchester from supernatural would be great daddy of Xander cuz then xander will have brothers and other demons and angelsgunning for her!!!! and is Ethan dead or something or r they all dreaming????! and wouldn't xander know that its the first evil or soemthing!!
Review By [iamastory] • Date [9 Jul 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Slayer's Test...pt.5" from (Recent Donor)RavenWoodbane
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Awesome chappie ... Definitely jack for the dad,
Review By [(Recent Donor)RavenWoodbane] • Date [8 Jul 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Slayer's Test...pt.5" from BigredTheBallCrusher
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I have always enjoyed this story immensely, its a guilty pleasure as I don't normally like stories where Xander becomes female for what ever reason. That being said, as a price for him to pay, it works well. I'm glad you updated.
As for Xander's father, I would think that John Maclane would make a believable father. perhaps he tried a year in Sunnydale wile trying to patch things up with his wife post Die hard. Like wise, Martin Riggs could have spent some time in Sunnydale after his wife's death. Both have qualities that can be seen in Xander, and can be more than a little crazy at times, Jessica would no doubt have been worried about that sort of Crazy around her baby. Leroy Jethro Gibbs is another believable Father figure. On leave before he married his wife and not the easiest man to get along with. John Winchester or Bobby singer would also be good fathers for Xander, as they both exist in the fringe as Hunters, and engage in criminal activities as a result of their hunting life style.
All five men would make believable father's to Xander, without having to add too many universes into the mix. The supernatural fandom can be blended with Buffy easily, where ass the cops slip in easily as a part of the normal world. All of them have had trauma's and can be known for being if not out right crazy, over baring and not personable, which would make any woman think twice about the wisdom of allowing them around a newborn.
Anyway, thanks for writing and I hope that helps.
Big Red
Review By [BigredTheBallCrusher] • Date [8 Jul 13] • Not Rated
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