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Review of chapter "Chapter One" from DarkKing
What Greywizard wrote.
Review By [DarkKing] • Date [16 Aug 13] • Rating [1 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Current Donor)Starfox
Very funny take on the meeting between Harry and Buffy.
Review By [(Current Donor)Starfox] • Date [23 Feb 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Greywizard
Okay, I've read the other reviews, and your responses to them.

You mentioned in the summary that Harry's been 'a bad boy,' and that he basically appears to have been acting like a Parker Abrams clone, albeit with magic options. Yes, this is not something that anyone wants to see happening, but it's also not something that is putting the Wizarding World in peril. It appears that the Ministry feels something needs to be done about the situation, simply because they don't like the choices Harry's made.

For the Ministry to decide that Harry needs to put aside his existing life style and stop being a dick because there are better things that *they* think he can be doing is something that is horrendous and completely in keeping with the mindset of the old Ministry, in that they seem to believe they know better than Harry does, what Harry should be doing. They apparently seem to think that because he's indolent and living a sybaritic life style, and that he's not doing what he should be doing (according to their agenda and way of thinking), then he's doing something wrong.

The fact that they're using Buffy to humiliate him (comparatively speaking) by pointing out that she's saved the world numerous times (and that's a claim which they didn't examined in much greater detail, primarily because it suited their own agenda) is piss-poor, mean-spirited and nasty, at best.

I could easily see Harry digging into Buffy's life in great detail, in order to find out more about this clearly superhumanly incredible role model he's been offered and, after finding out the dirty details no one really likes to come out (i.e., how exactly was Angelus released from the soul curse; that she ran away from home after sending Angel to hell; that Buffy basically committed suicide to save Dawn, because she didn't want to deal with her life's responsibilities anymore; that she consistently treats those around her without significant power as unimportant and irrelevant, and other non-flattering information) ending up greatly disappointed with the real person.

Which is not to say that Buffy's done anything significantly wrong, aside from being human and fucking up her own life and, sometimes, her friends' lives by occasionally making what eventually turns out to have been a wrong decision.

And on a side note, Buffy's taking it for granted that *all* of the girls they Awakened through Willow's spell are going to be perfectly delighted with having their Slayer powers now, along with the magical bulls-eye they now have on their back, and that they'll all decide to be heroes and unquestioningly follow her and Faith's examples, and the Council's directives, as she noted in her speech, is naive and extremely overly optimistic, too. I'm sure more than a few girls are going to decide to use their powers to better their own situations, and those decisions won't necessarily match up with what Buffy and the Council might decide is best.

Getting back to Harry, if he ever finally gets out of his 'gosh wow!' fan boy mindset and gives this entire situation some thought, I can see him getting extremely pissed at whichever Ministry officials are involved in trying to make him do what they want, to the extent of deciding to do whatever he can to actively oppose whatever their intentions might be.

All in all, the unidentified Ministry officials you depicted, who have tried to manipulate Harry while also knowing Harry's attitude towards such behavior, are just as likely to have aggravated the situation into an even worse condition than the one were dealing with, previously, and you seem to think that they're doing so is perfectly acceptable.

Harry's always been expected to do what's best for everyone else during his entire life, and to put himself at the end of the line when it comes to satisfying people's wants and needs. The fact that he's now living as *he* wants to live is not something anyone should have any say about, as long as he's not harming anyone.

Picking up willing women for sex and then dumping them isn't very nice at all, but it's *not* something that requires official, governmental interference if he's not using magic to mind control them.

In Harry's position, if I learned that the government was doing this sort of thing, I'd leave, along with all of my money, and move to someplace that pays more than lip service to the idea of people being allowed to live their own lives.

And maybe see what I could do about putting a more tolerant government in place, too.
Comments from author:
Well, thanks for reviewing. I think maybe you missed the fact that in this piece I did have Harry "using magic to mind control them," to quote you. Or, at least, mind wipe them so he could dump them easier. And he did try to stun/curse Buffy.

I agree he probably would get pissed off at the Ministry for trying to manipulate him to stop doing what he's been doing, IF he wanted to brood over it. If he was desperate to change his life (which was kind of my mindset but admittedly I didn't dwell too much on that aspect) then he might take it as written, a wake-up call. But he could go the anti-Ministry, leave-me-the-hell-alone way too. It might be interesting to write a follow-up later on to describe which way Harry went with it, particularly if it pissed him off. Nasty Ministry heavy-handedness may well be part of what prompted him to live like a rich slacker in the first place.

Anyway, not gonna write that follow-up most likely. I would never look for 100% approval of a plot like this but Harry must be the third rail of fan fiction to get some of the responses I did. So I will let this one stand on its own without any further attempts to explain the potential aftermath. It is what it is, and that's all it'll likely ever be.
Review By [Greywizard] • Date [14 Jan 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Past Donor)improvedpeanut
Interesting story, I always thought that Harry was way to well adjusted considering how terrible his life had been. I've only read a couple of fics were Harry just storta takes a break to live life and make mistakes

It's also nice to see the scoobies get recognition as well as Buffy.

oh and I pictured Luna and Neville as the Marauders cause I've been reading fics where there is timetravel and Harry/Hermoine, Luna/Neville and Luna used the map to play tricks on Dumbledore, she used the mischief managed line alot.
Incase you were curious
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review! I think some people take issue with Harry ever having any issues at all (see some of the reviews below). But this story is based on the idea of what would you actually DO if you were 17, rich, famous, and had no steadying adult influence in your life any more? At the end of HP7, Dumbledore, Sirius, Lupin, Moody, et. al. are all dead. Given the evidence of top professional athletes who get wealthy at a similar young age, it could be ugly. Whole story came from that idea. Still can fix his life within canon timelines too. So thanks for the nice rating!

Re: Luna and Neville -- yes, it could be lots of different folks, that's why I left it to the reader's imagination. All the original Marauders are technically dead, but who knows who inspired them or who had the map before Fred/George/Harry? And if it were taken AU, obviously the door is wide open. The idea of it being Luna and Neville is pretty amusing, IMHO. Hadn't thought of that myself.
Review By [(Past Donor)improvedpeanut] • Date [20 Dec 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from jimk
Umm, this is more in response to your comments on negative reviews. One fundamental point you seem to be missing is most people would read "Harry's been a bad boy" as tongue in cheek and not as you paint him, which is just a dick and a dumb one at that. That's why people label it as nothing more than a bashing fic. If it is a character I find annoying then I often enjoy a good bashing fic. In this case I stopped reading once the wand was snapped. At that point, to me, it was clear it was a simple bashing fic and really didn't have much humor to it unless you enjoy the humor of Harry bashing. From the initial summary I thought it was going to be much more of a fun fic but that's not the direction you chose.

Edit: Not sure what your womanizing cad point is. I did say that the reason it is clearly a straightforward bashing fic is because you portrayed him as nothing more than a dick and a dumb one at that. You can call it b** word if you wish to swim all day in the Nile, but to anyone else it pretty much matches the definition of a stereotypical bashing fic.

Edit: Oookay. Would I really be reading BTVS fics if I had a problem with a woman capable of beating up guys? I stopped reading when she casually destroyed a Deathly Hallow because it was already clear how you were portraying Harry, (an idiot and a jerk), and now you weren't playing it for laughs but simplistic all Buffy and everyone else sucks. I didn't continue reading because I saw no reason to. I skipped to the end and saw it ended with Buffy apparently taking away Harry's wand and giving it to Ginny for him to "earn" back. That just kind of confirmed my feeling about the story. Anyway, great that you clarified the summary. Nothing wrong with the concept of your fic but it wouldn't have been something I was interested in.
Comments from author:
Well, the sweet art of subtlety is apparently dead to the world. Sigh. *Bows to the inevitable.* I will put a warning on the Summary, though I refuse to use the b*** word, as I think that is really overstating it here. I have to say you express yourself oddly -- it was apparently OK that Harry was a thoughtless womanizer who stupefyed an unsuspecting girl in his bed, but once it was clear he was about to get his a**-kicked, THEN you stopped reading? And since you admit to not reading it all the way through, you really don't get where the humor comes in. The two appropriate words here might be, "lighten up," don't you think?

Update: I GOT the message. I CHANGED the summary. My point is this: after the 1st section of the story, it was totally obvious where it was going. But you only stopped reading when Harry was about to take a beating from Buffy. So the question you have to ask yourself is, are you bothered more by Harry (a) being portrayed as a bit of a jerk, or (b) getting beat down by Buffy (or any other hot chick with superpowers). For those of you who answered (a), then you really shouldn't read the story, which is why I added a warning per your request. For those of you who answer (b), this probably is not the appropriate fan site for you period. Simple as.

Update to Update: So, not interested but not unwilling to comment extensively in a negative way. Ok. Have any last words you will. Bored now.
Review By [jimk] • Date [11 Dec 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Misty
What a fab story! Really enjoyed it. Thank you very much
Comments from author:
Thanks for reviewing and the nice rating!
Review By [Misty] • Date [10 Dec 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from tjmitchem
Hmm. Bash Harry fic.

Comments from author:
I appreciate you left a comment and rating, but I guess you didn't get the "Harry's been a bad boy.." part of the summary? Anyway this kind of fic is bound to get extremes. Sorry you're so into Harry you missed the humor or the fact that I left him plenty of room for redemption.
Review By [tjmitchem] • Date [9 Dec 12] • Rating [1 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from eriktheviking
A great fun story with an unusual storyline and a real twist at the end at who the jokers were.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review and the nice rating!
Review By [eriktheviking] • Date [9 Dec 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from deliza
Love the story. I appreciate good characterization of Buffy. I hate seeing all the Buffy bashing stories. And for her to outdo the Boy Who Lived...lovely! And I do like the idea of an immortal Buffy...after everything she has been through and lived (or at least came back), it would make perfect sense.
Comments from author:
Yes, I am pretty much Buffy-centric, all the time, in what I look for on this site. Xovers are fun because you can do stuff like compare her to Harry -- and obviously that is really one-sided in favor of Buffy -- but I'm just teasing most of the Harry fans. I hope they get that. I appreciate the rating very much also.
Review By [deliza] • Date [8 Dec 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from bsams
excellent character asassination of Harry! What a great bash of his character to make Buffy look better! Really?Doesn't work because while Death is Her gift; Harry is Death's Master and can revoke the gift. 1 out of 10 for the bashing
Edit: Bashing another character is the opposite of fun. I don't like bashing of any sort but is that really an excuse? that someone else does it too? you could have made the point at the ceremony with them doing shots together in an I Never dare, but to make Harry out as a douche isn't fun, it's tasteless and brings down the story. you could have had Buffy inspiring Harry to get back in the Fight, but all you do is run down both characters.
Comments from author:
Um, I don't think Buffy needs to be made to look better. And plenty of Buffy-bashing goes on here on this site. So, thanks for reviewing, not so much for the rating. Note that the timeline here still works for Harry's total redemption after this a la HP7 Epilogue. Were you ever young and foolish? Not really a character thing.

Updated Comment: I haven't read a fic on this site that doesn't engage in some manner of character reuse/misuse/abuse. I don't like Asher hooking up with Buffy in the Anitaverse, for example, but there are some really good fics that have that pairing. For some, that could be construed as character-bashing. But I did say in the summary, "Harry's been a bad boy." Why read it with that kind of warning? Do I really have to say in every story on a fanfic site. "WARNING: you may NOT like the way I use the characters in this story." Anyway sorry you didn't like it but others did; it all balances out.
Review By [bsams] • Date [8 Dec 12] • Rating [1 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Rich
Outstanding !!! Harry was pretty OOC in this, but it was worth it to set up that award ceremony, which was LOL funny. As Buffy herself once remarked : "there are lots of scarier things than you, and I'm one of them"; I think he got the message.

PS: Buffy's deaths - drowned by the Master, jumped off the Tower, shot by Warren (possible), and run through with a broadsword (the First said it was mortal but the First said a lot of things). So two confirmed and two possible - and those are just the ones we saw onscreen.

PPS: Buffy and magic - Buffy was effected by magic on the show; but she always recovered. She was also effected by Dracula's thrall, and the Master's before that; those didn't last either. If we assume as you do that she's gotten stronger over time, then it's reasonable to assume that she's now pretty resistant to both magic and thrall.
Comments from author:
Yes, Buffy as what the creatures of the night are afraid of is my favorite image of her. Since I've made HP basically that, in a different context, Buffy is the scary answer to his problems in this little interlude from canonical text and characterization for him. Thanks for reviewing!
Review By [Rich] • Date [8 Dec 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Current Donor)mmooch
The last quote from the Marauders has me wondering who the top Auror and MoM could be. Moony seems to be an obvious pick for one of them, and since canon-wise Sirius is dead, maybe a jr. Marauder? George? Or is the HP'verse a tad AU also?
Comments from author:
Well, you could imagine it was them, and the HP verse is a bit AU. Or you could imagine it was the original marauders, still a bit AU. Or you could imagine it was some pair of folks who the Marauders looked up to, say it's non-canon but not AU. Or you could just think of it as a way to both salute all of the above and also drive TTH readers mad trying to figure out what this meant. Thanks for reviewing!
Review By [(Current Donor)mmooch] • Date [8 Dec 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from SpacedCadet
Entertaining and very original.

Well Done !
Comments from author:
Thanks, I appreciate the support!
Review By [SpacedCadet] • Date [8 Dec 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from CrystalBlaze
Of *course* she snapped the Deathstick.

Death is her gift. So she took it back.
Comments from author:
Yep. You can just imagine what she'd do with the other hallows. Sew the invisibility cloak into a stealth slayer suit. Use the stone to bring back nasty big bads so she can kill them over again. Thanks for reviewing.
Review By [CrystalBlaze] • Date [8 Dec 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from DofEire
GredandForge, the MoM and Chief of Aurors?! Oh my, YES! Love it! :)
Comments from author:
Thanks for reviewing! Fred and George are one way to see it there. I'm going to be mean and say the intent was to have people interpret that the way they want, but just to make it clear this has all been a huge prank on Harry. (And maybe on fanfic readers? Huh, never thought of that.)
Review By [DofEire] • Date [8 Dec 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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