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Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from lokison
Review:
Good start, as for a name for his ship I always liked Azure Angel the name of his fighter it could easily be a name of a bigger ship. Other names could be Leviathan which was the name of Revan's Flagship or Ebon Hawk which was Revan's ship once he came back to the lightside.
Review By [lokison] • Date [11 Apr 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from TDK
Review:
Wow what a great start to your story I look forward to reading more of it. How about The Blue Sky for the name of the ship.
Review By [TDK] • Date [16 Feb 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from Markelo
Review:
What about "Twilight"?
Review By [Markelo] • Date [10 Feb 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from Robby
Review:
Awesome story idea!!!

I look forward to seeing where this goes!!!

Keep up the great work and good luck.
Review By [Robby] • Date [25 Nov 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from dialNforNinja
Review:
Oh, now this is MUCH better! The first chapter felt like you were rushing too hard to try to set things up - the thing is, you have to start off strong, or a lot of people will just drop the story rather than giving it a chance to improve. I usually give things three chapters unless they're utterly putrid, but not everyone is as forgiving as I am.

I did notice you have "Troguta" rather than "Togruta" - it's consistent, but I'm pretty sure that the second is correct.
Review By [dialNforNinja] • Date [30 Oct 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from dialNforNinja
Review:
This could be a really good story, but in almost every case you're narrating about the characters' conversations rather than showing them. Rewriting those scenes to fill them out wouldn't be too much harder than adding quotation marks and "he said/she said," and would improve it by at least 200%
Review By [dialNforNinja] • Date [30 Oct 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from LalaithQuetzalli
Review:
I would suggest Shadow Angel, or Dark Angel, or something along those lines. The reason... well, Anakin compares Padmé to an Angel (and if I understand correctly, the actual Angels of Iego are huge creatures, that I would connect more with dragons than angels, so it would fit a bulky ship), the other word is in allusion to Anakin's own somewhat darker nature, which seems to be more obvious with the past you're giving him in this particular fic (him knowing how to shoot, dealing with mercenaries, bounty hunters, and the like...)
I really, really hope that even if you choose not to make Anakin a Jedi in this (because I suspect that's what you're aiming for with this fic), that you will still pair him up with Padmé... because I just love that pairing, it's my favorite of the whole SW universe! I will never forgive the ending of EIII and how awful it made everything. In the end, Anakin's only sin was to love Padmé, really; his love fueled his fear, and then he had no one to lean on, no support because the Jedi did not like him! So yes, I fully support Anakin, and his romance with Padmé.
Please update soon! I wanna read more! It's been a while since I last read a good SW fic, and I have a feeling this one could be awesome!
Review By [LalaithQuetzalli] • Date [29 Oct 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from Genuka
Review:
Ursus meaning bear. You know Anakin is going to give it claws at some point and its a big lumbering bear of a ship. I'm loving this story.
Review By [Genuka] • Date [19 Jul 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from omnimercurial
Review:
Hi!

Like the Fic! :)

Maybe name the Ship:

Leviathan or Collossus or Titan or Out of Context Problem or Nimbus or Doistinsuvo?
Review By [omnimercurial] • Date [15 Jul 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from Bobboky
Review:
Very good work
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [14 Jul 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from Loatroll
Review:
It's very interesting so far! I love that you're taking the stuff that's actually more remarkable about Anakin and doing something about them rather than just going for the force. Really looking forward to more.
Comments from author:
Thanks, I appreciate the support.
Review By [Loatroll] • Date [7 Jul 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from Silverfish
Review:
Hmmm... names for Anakin's freighter?

How about the "Angel Queen"? Cliché, I know but...
Comments from author:
Oh, come on! You can do better than that...
Review By [Silverfish] • Date [6 Jul 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from Rogue
Review:
I had pretty much forgotten about this story. I am glad to see it is not dead.

Now this is really interesting. It sounds to me like anakin has just found fighter support for his ship... Great backstory for that character, it really brought her to light.

The other part of this I find interesting is the review of the security for Naboo. I think I have only ever see one other story where that was even gone into. It could be really fun if that subject comes up to Padme, who I am sure suddenly has more pull as queen if most of the government has been decapitated. A stronger Naboo with Anakins help could be interesting, maybe as a home base for his ship, and it could really change the way things went in canon.

Thanks for the read.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review and suggestions.
Review By [Rogue] • Date [5 Jul 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from ovid
Review:
I love this fic. I mean, I had to go back and reread chapter one, but I still love this thing. I love how we see the more interesting side characters of the star wars universe, and not so much of the never ending conflict between force users that usually drives the galaxy. I like that there's more real day-to-day feel to this story. The details of fixing and upgrading ships and tools are pretty interesting, and I love that Anakin's most useful tool (right now) is his technical expertise, not his force powers. Hell, I actually liked jacen and jaina solo not because they were jedi, but because Jaina had Han's skill with machines and Jacen had his affinity with animals.

I have no idea where you are going with this fic. You keep referencing other characters like you've talked to readers about them. I've got no idea who they are, or why they'd show up. And this fic is yours, so no one should tell you how to write your fic. With that in mind, could we see some potential money making in the future? Smuggling, shipping (of legal goods), selling the ships of pirates that anakin's captured, etc.? I love seeing some realism in star wars fics AKA less flashy fights and more day to day activities.
Comments from author:
There is more to the Star Wars universe than lightsaber duels. (takes cover behind sofa) No, really! There is. Just like there is more to Anakin Skywalker than angst and the Force.

Good to know you are enjoying my work. Thanks for the review.
Review By [ovid] • Date [5 Jul 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from madamssaiyan
Review:
I think this is great. Anakin is normally helpped from outside. This time Anakin is helping himself with some smarts and better attitude. I want to see MORE!!
Thanks
Comments from author:
I'm glad you like my version of Anakin and the story in general. Thanks for the review.
Review By [madamssaiyan] • Date [5 Jul 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
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