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Review of chapter "Battle Lines" from JCarlHenderson
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Diane Castle wrote: "First-season Cordy was not nice. Cordy after having her life saved multiple times and falling for Xander andsuffering through being poor and working for a living *became* nice. I don't see an Orphan Cordy who never went through any travails becoming a nice person spontaneously."

Cordelia is one of my favorite characters in BtVS and Angel mostly because of the emotional and moral journey she made over her three seasons on Buffy and her three seasons on Angel. (It's really too bad that Angel was canceled after Season 3, leaving us with such a horrible cliffhanger.)

However, Cordelia could have fairly easily gone another way. Since I really like the character, I was hoping she would not in tSRoAM, but it is logical and in character.
Review By [JCarlHenderson] • Date [31 Oct 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Battle Lines" from JCarlHenderson
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1) I'm still loving the story—and the unfolding grand finale—but I do have two minor criticisms:

a) GC-Divide came out of left field for me as a reader. I don't even remember it ever being mentioned. I'm sure it was, of course, but I think for something from the original tSWoAM show to be such a critical plot point, you might want to consider revising the story to make the GC-Divide mentions more prominent. With a story that's well over a million words, its easy to forget a specific gun on the mantlepiece if the gun doesn't stand out a bit from all the other guns up there.

b) I'm sorry but I just can't buy any version of Selina as a Collective member. Even the Frank Miller S&M prostitute Selina would have told these losers to take a hike. I can't think of any version of Selina who would work well in such a rigidly hierarchical organization. I mean even have the name of the "The Collective" would be a turn off for her. You can't herd cats—or Catwoman. (I will happily rescind this criticism if it turns out that Selina is acting as Batman's own "deep cover" agent in the Collective. You know he would really want to have one...)

2) I'm surprised that so many readers were surprised to see Willow being somewhat vindictive. Don't they remember that canon-Willow was so good at vindictive that she was twice offered a job as Vengeance Demon by D'Hoffryn?

3) I also don't see any reason to think that Alex used GC-Divide on herself before the fight. Danielle Arton has more than earned a "bitch!" or two, from even the nicest and most even-tempered of people.
Review By [JCarlHenderson] • Date [31 Oct 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Battle Lines" from dragonsey
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"OTOH unless Cordelia was found to have left a trail of bodies behind, killing her might raise a few eyebrows."

Cordelia was a willing member of a group responsible for the deaths of millions (Lanzhou=3m, Beirut=2m). I seriously doubt anyone will question her death.
Review By [dragonsey] • Date [30 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Battle Lines" from mooncowthree
Review:
So did Care Bears make your list of op codenames? I am sure you could have thought up a way to make batman be forced to go along with answering to Funshine Bear.
Comments from author:
Jack probably has that on his to-do list. Either that or making him answer to 'Rainbow Brite'.

He would probably receive a Care Bear Stare that would not be pleasant. :D
Review By [mooncowthree] • Date [30 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Battle Lines" from Markelo
Review:
Awesome chapter, Diane. I would had Whateley Academy as one of the un iverses in the start of this universe.
Comments from author:
Thanks. And I'm keep Whateley out of the AlexVerse because multiple types of magic are real in the WhateleyVerse. As are Lovecraftian horrors.
Review By [Markelo] • Date [30 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Battle Lines" from FireWolfe
Review:
I can see everyone is worried about the T-Rex but it if reacts like the raptors them it would be golden as it might follow AG directions. Bot that be kind of fun. Its kind of creepy with Maggie seeing AG as her daughter but then again AG human dna had to come from someone and I can see Maggie using her own. I do not however see any positive bonding time no pun intended in their future Maggie is nuts if she thinks that is happening. I can see AG maturing and learnihng as this fight goes on. While she may not be scared or frightened she is wise enough to see there is danger. Her responses may never be human normal but she is developing a more anynintacal way of thinking and reviewing the situation which shows she can learn and grow as a person. I kind of hope Charlie the one who saves her it would put them on a more equal footing.
Maggie took Jack which is a bad idea as a pissed off Willow never a good thing. If she has hurt him well Maggie be toast and burnt for certain. I can so see Willow saving Jack's ass or maybe carter as that tends to happen a lot too. If Jack and Maggie are early version orphans it would explain a lot. As for the Hitler clone I am hoping Willow gets to waste him. I would say it be fitting.

DC divide dangerous if I recall so I am hoping Danielle better nature survives the split though not expecting her to come out unscathed. Its a gutsy and risky move Terra did and shows she not all white hat anymore which suggests she becomeing a little less forgiving and darker in nature more like Batman. While he wont kill he not a saint either. Riley is every bit as tough as batman and maybe just as dangerous though he not in costume. I think the badies tend to forget he is an orphan with a bit more to him. He would nto be an opponet I want to face. As for having lots of supers its to be expected that the SRI would have counters to the bad guys even if they are all more loosely connected. I have to say I am really happy with the way AZ fighting and going to town on the bad guys. I have to admit to having a soft spot for her. She is kind of she-hulk like in her attitudes but she becoming a better person so thats great.

I kind of feel bad for Sam. She to bad ass to be carried around by a kid thought he practical side sees why its nessesary. I hope she gets a chance to take names and kick ass too. I hate seeing her in a role where she subordinate to anyone in the brains department. Not that she really is but it seems she been placed in a secondary role here. Willow smart in this universe but Sam's exceptional as well. It might be fun to see what can happen when they team up.

I wonder if Maggie will have cloned Jack. That be kind of a blast to see. Esspecially if clone Jack like the origional and wont take her crap.

I can see this battle being a bit drawn out with the advantage going back and forth and all depending on who has the most back up plans. I look forward to seeing what happens.

Fire
Comments from author:
I think this is a double post.
Review By [FireWolfe] • Date [30 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Battle Lines" from FireWolfe
Review:
I can see everyone is worried about the T-Rex but it if reacts like the raptors them it would be golden as it might follow AG directions. Bot that be kind of fun. Its kind of creepy with Maggie seeing AG as her daughter but then again AG human dna had to come from someone and I can see Maggie using her own. I do not however see any positive bonding time no pun intended in their future Maggie is nuts if she thinks that is happening. I can see AG maturing and learnihng as this fight goes on. While she may not be scared or frightened she is wise enough to see there is danger. Her responses may never be human normal but she is developing a more anynintacal way of thinking and reviewing the situation which shows she can learn and grow as a person. I kind of hope Charlie the one who saves her it would put them on a more equal footing.
Maggie took Jack which is a bad idea as a pissed off Willow never a good thing. If she has hurt him well Maggie be toast and burnt for certain. I can so see Willow saving Jack's ass or maybe carter as that tends to happen a lot too. If Jack and Maggie are early version orphans it would explain a lot. As for the Hitler clone I am hoping Willow gets to waste him. I would say it be fitting.

DC divide dangerous if I recall so I am hoping Danielle better nature survives the split though not expecting her to come out unscathed. Its a gutsy and risky move Terra did and shows she not all white hat anymore which suggests she becomeing a little less forgiving and darker in nature more like Batman. While he wont kill he not a saint either. Riley is every bit as tough as batman and maybe just as dangerous though he not in costume. I think the badies tend to forget he is an orphan with a bit more to him. He would nto be an opponet I want to face. As for having lots of supers its to be expected that the SRI would have counters to the bad guys even if they are all more loosely connected. I have to say I am really happy with the way AZ fighting and going to town on the bad guys. I have to admit to having a soft spot for her. She is kind of she-hulk like in her attitudes but she becoming a better person so thats great.

I kind of feel bad for Sam. She to bad ass to be carried around by a kid thought he practical side sees why its nessesary. I hope she gets a chance to take names and kick ass too. I hate seeing her in a role where she subordinate to anyone in the brains department. Not that she really is but it seems she been placed in a secondary role here. Willow smart in this universe but Sam's exceptional as well. It might be fun to see what can happen when they team up.

I wonder if Maggie will have cloned Jack. That be kind of a blast to see. Esspecially if clone Jack like the origional and wont take her crap.

I can see this battle being a bit drawn out with the advantage going back and forth and all depending on who has the most back up plans. I look forward to seeing what happens.

Fire
Comments from author:
With all the possible points of view, the battle might take a few pages.
Review By [FireWolfe] • Date [30 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Return" from fanreaderonetwo
Review:
"LFW, I think most of the rest of us agree that Willow did not intend that her victims should leave the room alive, at least not both. She set them up to kill each other. I call this being vindictive, someone else said that it was worse than vindictive, anyway, that is Dark Willow come to the party. She said herself to Alex that she did feel she had the potential to become Crazed Revenge Woman, and here are the two people in the world whom she has the most reason to hate (at least until someone kills or injures Jack). Of course she is not going to simply let them off with a quick death.

Comments from author:

Canon Willow could certainly be vindictive when she chose."

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Given that Billy Bob was a _known_ rapist and serial killer I doubt that anyone would worry about his fate.
OTOH unless Cordelia was found to have left a trail of bodies behind, killing her might raise a few eyebrows. Consider that AFAIK the worst things she had done to Willow in Sunnydale were under the limits of "HS Bitch-Queen oppressing a peasant", strictly mental torture with little or no (literal) blood spilled.
Comments from author:
I think that given the situation, beating the snot out of Cordy and locking her in that cage is justifiable. And hitting someone in the back of the head with a steel pole that had a steel light unit atop it is going to do more than just give him a bruise.
Review By [fanreaderonetwo] • Date [30 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Battle Lines" from mooncowthree
Review:
It would be cool if Maggie threw in a little owl dna so Hanna could do the full 180 degree head twist, great party trick.
Comments from author:
:D :D There probably isn't that much difference between velociraptor DNA and modern raptor DNA.
Review By [mooncowthree] • Date [30 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Battle Lines" from fpb
Review:
LFW, I think most of the rest of us agree that Willow did not intend that her victims should leave the room alive, at least not both. She set them up to kill each other. I call this being vindictive, someone else said that it was worse than vindictive, anyway, that is Dark Willow come to the party. She said herself to Alex that she did feel she had the potential to become Crazed Revenge Woman, and here are the two people in the world whom she has the most reason to hate (at least until someone kills or injures Jack). Of course she is not going to simply let them off with a quick death.
Comments from author:
Canon Willow could certainly be vindictive when she chose.
Review By [fpb] • Date [30 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Battle Lines" from asqwerth
Review:
That's my understanding of its meaning as well.

Sorry, I'm just being particular about word usage. Riley is an Orphan, highly-educated, in the military, trained in numerous ways to kill people. He should know better. :-)
Comments from author:
And he should never exaggerate! :D
Review By [asqwerth] • Date [30 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Battle Lines" from DieselDriver
Review:
Sheesh. How many heros do they have? Seems like a lot of them have gotten themselves swatted. At least I was right about Jo and Riley. Hurray!

I see questions about disembowelment so I looked it up on my favorite "lookitup" site, dictionary dot com. Here's what I found:


disembowel [dis-em-bou-uh l]
Word Origin
verb (used with object), disemboweled, disemboweling or (especially British) disembowelled, disembowelling.
1. to remove the bowels or entrails from; eviscerate.
2. to cut or slash open the abdomen of, as by bayoneting, so as to expose or remove the viscera.

That's it. So "disembowel" is a long word for "Gut" as in "Gut him like a trout". So sticking in a knife and twisting it around doesn't qualify as "disembowel" as such. Maybe classify it as "Horribly Irritated Bowel Syndrome" or "HIBS" for short.
Comments from author:
:D :D With Riley's healing, it may just be Annoyed Bowel Syndrome.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [30 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Battle Lines" from fpb
Review:
Asqwerth, the particle "dis-" in "disembowelment" has a definite sense of outwards and negative motion. To dismiss is to send out, to send away; to disenfranchise, to place someone outside the franchise. So I would say that definitely, disembowelment is that kind of atrocity where people's digestive tracts are ripped out of their bodies.
Comments from author:
It's the value of Latin. I keep telling people it's useful for things besides reading spells in Harry Potter...
Review By [fpb] • Date [30 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Battle Lines" from LFW
Review:
Hey, I read this addition again and I have to wonder where Willow got the material to pad her Cordelia bra and shoes?
And why did she not do something to psychowhatever after she hit him?
Yes I believe that killing him is beyond her at this point, but tie him up with his shirt? Take his shoes?
Thanks
Comments from author:
I imagine she got the padding material from assorted nastiness in the dungeon, like sound-proofing material, or the interior of a gag.
Review By [LFW] • Date [30 Oct 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Battlezones" from asqwerth
Review:
Fun chapter.

I have a bit of a morbid question: does the definition of the word "disembowelment" include what allegedly happened to Riley, ie the guts are all sliced up on the inside but do not leave the body?
Comments from author:
Technically, no. The Latin prefix tells us that. Or at least it is supposed to, since words have this annoying tendency to change their meaning over time.
Review By [asqwerth] • Date [30 Oct 14] • Not Rated
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