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Review of chapter "Reunion" from sorawithans
I am 80% certain that Go'ould ships would pown council ships.
Don't let that stop you, though.
Review By [sorawithans] • Date [25 Mar 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "More Than A Memory" from branz
Looks interesting so far, although actually showing Halloween and how Willow/Shepard acts would help.

Just a thought but you may be able to have the BTVS members start to regain the memories from their Mass Effect selfs so they can help Willow Shepard and close the hellmouth. It would mesh things a bit better and keep them more in the loop.

Two more things: 1) using a Mass effect field to lighten a heavy energy weapon for foot-soldiers, Enhancing 21st century weapons with mass effect to hit harder but keep the sizes of the bullets the same.

(would be much more effective than those fingernail shavings they use instead, and with them using those thermal clips the infinite ammo advantage of mass effect weapons is pretty much moot)

Combining Goa'uld personal shields with mass effect shields, the same effects can be applied to ships, modify staff weapons and Zats into Assault rifles and Stun pistols.
Review By [branz] • Date [1 Dec 13] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Reunion" from Delkatar
Great story!
Review By [Delkatar] • Date [29 Aug 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Reunion" from Fablesrogue
I'm hoping you keep this as it is. You could expand more on some of your other plot points, but I think that the inclusion of SG-1 enhances it. I'm waiting to see how your rescue of on Chulak turns out.

Keep up the good work.
Review By [Fablesrogue] • Date [12 Aug 13] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Reunion" from (Recent Donor)tchizek
Good story so far. The first couple of chapters felt forced but it picked up in the last three. I really like this!
Review By [(Recent Donor)tchizek] • Date [25 May 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Reunion" from (Moderator)JoeHundredaire
Honestly, the longer this goes on, the more awkward, random, and hamfisted the entire thing feels. It's a triple crossover that could be reduced to a double in either direction (BtVS/ME, BtVS/SG-1) without really losing anything in my humble opinion, there are some subplots that need far more attention than you're willing to give to them, and then other subplots that just feel like you've got hats full of nouns, verbs, and direct objects and you're drawing a slip of paper from each to decide how to flesh out your story.
Comments from author:
To be perfectly honest, I'm beginning to think the same way. When I started this, I thought adding the third cross of Stargate SG-1 would allow the potential conflict that I would need but I'm starting to believe I rushed it through. You're right that it could be reduced but it would have to be BtVS/ME rather than BtVS/SG-1 because of the rather critical components Mass Effect parts.

I'm thinking about rewriting it and taking out the SG-1 part. My original intention with this fanfic didn't involve SG-1 and didn't have the other ME characters get involved as quickly. I was going to have Willow try to work through the new memories and other effects of the spell(s) without knowing about Amalia working in the background. This was actually what I had began to do when my computer fried and I was forced to get a replacement. Do you think I should try to resurrect the original story or what?
Review By [(Moderator)JoeHundredaire] • Date [8 Apr 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Eighth Of November" from (Recent Donor)Hawklan
good her team arrived on Earth and nice trouble that damn slaver started.
Review By [(Recent Donor)Hawklan] • Date [5 Apr 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Reunion" from HMaxMarius
All I can say is that was one Hell of a Spell!!!

Glad to see you're actually moving beyond Earth and into this whole universe it brought about.
Comments from author:
One part Chaos Magic courtesy of Janus, One part Vengeance/reality warping magic care of D'Hoffryn, put in blender and hit frappe.
Review By [HMaxMarius] • Date [4 Apr 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Reunion" from Difdi
> “I'm not a Goa'uld.” Jacob said quickly in his defense.

> “You look like a duck.” Willow replied.

Willow is of the same species as Adolf Hitler. And right now she's quacking like a Nazi.
Comments from author:
Remember how SG-1 had pretty much the same disbelief they had about the Tok'ra when Samantha Carter had Jolinar in her. That's the same disbelief Willow is experiencing as she hasn't encountered any Tok'ra before.

How quickly do you expect anyone to believe in that the Tok'ra are actually possible without ample evidence? The collar will be coming off.
Review By [Difdi] • Date [4 Apr 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Reunion" from brokenmimir
Wait, Joyce forced Buffy to break up with Angel because he couldn't give her children? Setting aside the fact that planning children at her age (not to mention as the Slayer) is a bit... odd, but what if Joyce had a homosexual child? I mean, Willow and Tara can't have children either. That's a very poor argument for ending a relationship.
Comments from author:
Remember, the journal entry is from Xander's perspective. No matter how close of a friend Xander may be, he might not know everything that goes on in the Summers Home. This is his assumptions and those of a rather older Xander. He might not have remembered everything correctly.
Review By [brokenmimir] • Date [4 Apr 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "More Than A Memory" from Genuka
Review By [Genuka] • Date [12 Mar 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "When I Remember Me" from EroSlackerMicha
still interesting read. SG1 is gonna get some surprises.

as always keep up the good work
Review By [EroSlackerMicha] • Date [5 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "When I Remember Me" from DarthPayne
Nice update... :)
Comments from author:
Thank you.
Review By [DarthPayne] • Date [3 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "When I Remember Me" from Raider
very nicely done sir.
Comments from author:
Thank you.
Review By [Raider] • Date [3 Feb 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "When I Remember Me" from evilredknight
So let's see...

Willow is a hyper powerful Shepard. I'm on board with that.
Cordi is a highly talented engineer. I like it.
Xander is not just a Navy Seal, but one of the best of the best. Meh - kind of standard, and obvious, but whatever.
Harmony (Harmony!!!) is a talented scout/sniper. And the other Cordettes are 'coming along' too. Could be fun!
Joyce is a Asari Matriarch. Interesting.
Dawn as the Key. Has been world altering.

And Buffy is a fairly useless anachronism in this new world, who's 'other universe' persona was a sex slave who killed herself.(sigh)

Why do I feel a little let down that seemingly this trope - *marginalize Buffy/make her pointless*, is one that you decided to keep when you changed the YAHF Super!Xander to Super!Willow?
Comments from author:
Willow as Shepard was a needed part of the story so it's good you're on board with that.
I made Cordelia an engineer to give her a complimentary skill set to Willow. It was either make her an engineer or make her a biotic of some type.
With Xander, I wanted him to still be a soldier but not just an ordinary grunt. An ordinary grunt wouldn't be able to keep up with Willow.
Harmony as an inflitrator and the other Cordettes training was actually the result of a coin flip. I wasn't sure if I wanted to use them like that so I flipped a coin.
For Joyce, I wanted another biotic in Sunnydale and I wanted that biotic to be more powerful than Amalia.
Dawn as the Key, nuff said.

As for Buffy, she's not going to be able to adapt to things as easily as everyone else. She's trying but she is wishing her world was back to the way it was before.
Review By [evilredknight] • Date [3 Feb 13] • Not Rated
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