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Review of chapter "Chapter Ten" from theunixer
Review:
Ok. It's been exactly one year to the day since you ended this story. When I reread the story, I saw a lot of time had elapsed but I waited a couple more months before writing this so that it was a full year.

Has that been sufficient time to work on all the other stories you wanted to continue with (yes, I have been enjoying your Builders series you recently started)? My (probably obvious) reason is to ask (beg?) you to continue the story as a series.

As I stated in my previous review (13 Apr 13) you have created a story with just too much going for it to let it end there. It would be a shame to not to continue it.

My reasons for wanting it to continue are in that review (please look it over as a reminder). You've created a new, better culture which needs time to flesh itself out (and interesting enough to *show* its' progress over time). Also, among the other things I mentioned, you did state an interest in multiple Earths (created by the Preservers of this non Star Trek Universe?) scattered around the Milky Way Galaxy, each of which being from a different series (Babylon 5, BSG2003, and any others you might be interested in [although I'm hoping *not* anime - just a little peccadillo of mine I suppose]) as a place for an adventure by the Scoobies and perhaps a morality play if you desire.

So, again, please continue this as a series.


Late addendum: How about the Honor Harrington Universe taking place as one of the other Earths?
Comments from author:
Hmm I have at least one story on here that I should work on, two stories on another site that I really want to work on before I start something new... not to mention my builder stories... to work on. I can't really say when I'd get back around to this, it doesn't have my interest anymore. It might get it again but I doubt it will be soon. Sadly as much as I used to get irked when people didn't continue things... I have a better idea of why these days.

We'll see is the best I can say.
Review By [theunixer] • Date [3 Apr 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Ten" from Netchka
Review:
Cool but odd story. :-)
Comments from author:
I'm glad that you enjoyed it. Most of my stories are odd in some ways.
Review By [Netchka] • Date [26 Jun 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from DragonBard
Review:
Ancient Gina is a character from the Gold Digger series of comics from Antarctic Press. She has the brains of a super-genius (7 Doctorates including Archeology as well as ones in physics/engineering) access to alien tech that rivals/exceeds that of the Ancients and Asgard of Stargate: SG-1, as well as so much magical power that when compared to a well known and respected Arch-Mage, it was like comparing a dwarf and a giant... and the Arch-Mage was the dwarf!

She is sometimes known as the Ancient One, but her real name is Madrid.

I'll let you read up on her as the adventures of Gina Diggers, and the secrets behind Ancient Gina are very fun.

The daughter didn't show up in the What If Comic.

The comic was about how Tony Stark in one timeline eventually became Sorcerer Supreme instead of Dr Strange, while still using a version of his Iron Man armor. The daughter aspect was just a way to make the character female for Willow. It was kind of like how Willow, Buffy, Xander, and Dawn became the children of Daniel Jackson and Vala or Samantha Carter, when those characters never had children in that episode.

Sorry I had to use another review to explain things, but you don't have an e-mail set up on your TtH profile, and wasn't sure if you would have read a PM from FF.net since you haven't updated it in so long.
Comments from author:
Ah interesting for the Gina character.

I see for the what if.

Tony as the sorcerer supreme is frightening.

As to FF.Net... I believe I have things set up to notify me so yeah, I'd answer. I haven't updated in a while because I don't like how they want me to update. With a file and gah... it's a pain. I'll work on updating things over there. A lot of my new stuff probably goes past their ratings though so I haven't really wanted to push things there. I should look at updating stuff there though.
Review By [DragonBard] • Date [11 Jun 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from DragonBard
Review:
Instead of Magik, I would have suggested either Ancient Gina or possibly the daughter of Tony Stark Sorcerer Supreme (from a What If comic) and Clea who was ruler of the Dark Dimension, and had as much magical power her grandmother Umar (who was as powerful as the Dread Dormammu.) Maybe Washu Hakubi from the Tenchi Muyo anime. Grant super-tech as well as magical knowledge and power.

Magik seems to fit Dawn's nature as the Key more... well, her or Blink with Blinks trick of offensive teleportation. Unless you want to use Zeltrech from the Nasuverse, who has a magic that allows dimensional manipulation at unimaginable levels, but he's a vampire and insane.

Eh, that's just me.

I'm kind of thinking of writing something similar, but with elements of 'Bet on the Hellmouth,' using Ancient Gina.

I'd think about using the female Tony Stark Sorcerer Supreme idea, but I don't want to run afoul of Marvel's anti-lemon policy.

Either way, hope to see more stories from you.
Comments from author:
I'm glad that you enjoyed the stories. I don't remember ancient Gina... but I'll look into Tony Stark's what if daughter.

Thanks for the suggestions.
Review By [DragonBard] • Date [11 Jun 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Ten" from (Recent Donor)tchizek
Review:
Wonderful story!

Tom.
Comments from author:
Thanks. It's been a lot of fun.
Review By [(Recent Donor)tchizek] • Date [10 Jun 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from ivanjedi
Review:
You seem to have a taste for elaborate, multi - fandom spanning plots; check this out:
http://www.tthfanfic.org/Challenge-7428/Luck+of+the+Draw.htm
Comments from author:
That's actually sort of an amusing challenge. I could see doing that challenge several different ways... :)
Review By [ivanjedi] • Date [18 Apr 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Ten" from theunixer
Review:
One question. Where did Faith get her Mjolnyr (sorry about the spelling) hammer? Unless I missed something? I reread the story and don't remember anything about her getting it but it took several days due to things happening in the middle of reading it.



All I have to say about it ending is this: NOOoooo!

Please continue it as a series. Getting back to their Universe *is* a good ending point. It sets things up perfectly for continuing in their own Universe.

One *major* reason is that you were having a new culture form with the Scoobies but it hasn't had enough time yet. I think it's important, especially since it is a much freer society than what we have now (vastly less prudery for one thing, which is very, very healthy - there is no reason or anything wrong with a woman being respected and admired for competence in her achievements in some technical or other field while she is also wanting to be a lusted after sex object who goes nude publicly to do so even at the same time or does so just because she is totally self confident [Faith comes to mind in this case]; why not have it all? No need to not be a complicated person.). While many are nude at Willow's beach I didn't get the sense that any beyond Faith had joined Dawn in doing so whenever they are off duty. Raven's awakening with Willow nude was in a closed room.

Also, it is good to show treating children with respect for their mental abilities (unlike in the real world) and reasoning with them instead of just giving orders with implied punishment if they don't obey and saying they'll understand why some years down the road. Both L. Neil Smith and Stephan Molyneux have articles (Smith) and YouTube videos (Molynuex) about this.

You really should show where they go with it all to do it justice. Also, stories about free people who disdain Authority (yeah, with a capital A) are sorely needed these days. Very sorely needed.

Plus the sub plots you started and projects they are doing need time to flesh out. Who of the 1500(?) stays with them?


As for where you could go with it:

How about the new BSG? Disregard the canon ending, it stank and was an insult to its' fans besides being nonsensical (worshiping the Greek gods 150,000 years ago? No way, they were in our time period. It shows the 13th tribe, or a destitute remnant of it, got to Earth and influenced things even though their origins from 'out there' was lost). When is a good question. Before and prevent the Holocaust or find the Remnant Fleet? Ah, decisions, decisions.

How about variations of other canons that started out the same but diverged in this Buffyverse?

Ex. Star Trek: The Preservers took humans from Earth and put them on other Earths that they created. Several fics use this.
Such as Babylon 5 (their mid 23rd century is our now). Other Earths could be from any show, movie, or book you want. All are happening at the same time, each on its' own Earth.

The events leading up to the Federation don't happen here but diverged into it's own timeline (hence Andrew getting to be Kirk from that Universe).

I still think the uniform should include a phaser (cross draw to go with the ST Empire inspired uniforms), especially for the non-Kryptonians. It's just too cool not to. And a light saber.

There is so much potential here it would be such a waste not to continue it. Please, please go for it.
Comments from author:
Faith got her hammer from Supernatural... Season 8 episode 2... Thor's hammer was in the show... (they left the damn thing somewhere... rather than keep it... I've got no clue why it was never explained why Sam didn't keep it...)

As for continuing the story... We'll see, I've got other projects to work on first... (If I continue it at all.)

It's interesting playing with new worlds. I enjoy seeing how people would react when they're presented with new experiences.

My parents treated me with respect. I don't see the problem with dealing with children as people rather than monsters. (or idiots)

Honestly I think people have forgotten that we're not all clones.

Some of the clothes or not is left to the people reading... are they... are they not.. did they... others I explained.

As for plots and sub plots... I can see them working on those if I continue it. :) It's always nice to leave a couple of what ifs... :)

I absolutely hated the f-ing ending for BSG. I wanted to beat Adma to death with a baseball bat and the stupid religious nutcase... the angel? Baltar....? wtf... them abandoning their tech.... another wtf... Basically so many are you fucking crazy... moments... for the crap ending... It was like some stupid Christian got a hold of the ending and says... oh right the mechanicals are right... So yeah I would be ignoring that if I ever went there...

I could see some people showing up with their later is the main character's now... That could be fun.

I can see them wanting some firepower. I can see them using lightsabers as well...

As for continuing it... I want to play with some other stuff... like my Hp fic on another site, like an older story on here that I need to continue... that type of stuff. It was an interesting ride up I like my other stories as well. Thanks for the review.
Review By [theunixer] • Date [13 Apr 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Ten" from (Recent Donor)nerfherder
Review:
Waaaaaay overpowered, but fun!
Comments from author:
I think that's some of the fun in a story... but yeah over powered. It takes a bit of work to balance insanity with high tech stuff... trying to keep things within a legit power level... but sometimes it's fun to just not care if things are over powered.
Review By [(Recent Donor)nerfherder] • Date [7 Apr 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Ten" from LFW
Review:
Great end
A great read, you did not cover every little thing and you did to go to every different universe that you could have.
Thanks
I am looking forward to more from you
Comments from author:
I'll write other stories. I had fun with the story. I'm glad that you enjoyed it.
Review By [LFW] • Date [7 Apr 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Ten" from alynambered
Review:
As I told another author, I private review my editing ideas because, when I think the story is good, I want others to enjoy it and I'm not out to put down any authors. You and the other good ones are a treasure to be nurtured and encouraged for future 'goodness'. Buffy-isms forever!!

Keep up the good work and I'll be waiting for the next adventure.
Comments from author:
I'm decently happy for editing comments... I'm generally really happy for excellent private editing comments. :)

Hopefully it won't be too long before I continue writing here. Thanks for the reviews and edits.
Review By [alynambered] • Date [5 Apr 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Ten" from banditdoz
Review:
Fantastic thank you for writing this wonderful piece of fanfic ;D
Comments from author:
I'm glad that you enjoyed it. It was fun.
Review By [banditdoz] • Date [4 Apr 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Ten" from Bobboky
Review:
Cool
Comments from author:
Thanks.
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [3 Apr 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Ten" from Morgomir
Review:
Great ending. Keep up the good work, whatever it may be.
Comments from author:
I'll figure out something, I'd go crazy if I don't. Thanks for the reviews and I'm glad that you liked the ending.
Review By [Morgomir] • Date [3 Apr 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Ten" from eriktheviking
Review:
It's been a fun read, well done.
Comments from author:
Thanks and I'm glad that you had fun.
Review By [eriktheviking] • Date [3 Apr 13] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Ten" from CageFire
Review:
Only 10 chapters, so not very long. But they did seem to get a lot done and it was rather entertaining so I guess being short isn't too bad. :) Theoretically you could have probably had it go on almost forever with multi-verses, but I suppose you have to draw the line somewhere.
Comments from author:
I could have had it continue for a while... but I wanted to end on a high note for the gang... they defeated a First... saved some old friends and got back home... only to realize that they had outgrown the place. I figured it was a good place to end it. Thanks for the reviews and I'm glad you enjoyed the story.
Review By [CageFire] • Date [3 Apr 13] • Not Rated
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