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Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from Redsfan
Review:
Excellent story, easily one of the best Buffy/Charmed crossovers I've read.

One thing I would like to know is whether Cordelia is still in Sunnydale, and if she ever had a romance with Xander in this AU. Buffy says she thinks Cordelia is the spy in Chapter 2, but that doesn't make any sense unless Cordelia is still in Sunnydale. Normally by Season 4 she would have been in LA.

I normally like Anya, but I can't see a good reason to not vanquish her in the story.
Review By [Redsfan] • Date [12 Dec 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from hamishog
Review:
I just found this story today (9/16/14) and I don't know that you'll be reading this. I noticed that it hadn't been updated in a year. That's too bad. It's a little topheavy but that's what happens when you're trying to make two separate structures fit together. It's an experiment worth trying. I must encourage you to continue.
I also noticed that you made particular note that Willow refers to herself as bi rather than a lesbian. And that she still regards Xander as someone she loves although she's given up on any romance. Foreboding, no? Because it occurs to me that if she is a practitioner-progenitor and he is a scion of the Warren line than we got ourselves a royal flush. Now, all they've got to do is suborn Tara and de-rat Amy and they've got their own three on the Hellmouth.
Comments from author:
I do plan to continue it at some point in the future once I've figured out how to get myself out of a little corner in the plot that I inadvertently got myself into regarding Xander's powers.
Review By [hamishog] • Date [16 Sep 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from DieselDriver
Review:
I see you haven't updated this story or written a sequel in quite some time. An abandoned story of this quality is a real shame. Please take it up again and tell us more.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [19 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from DieselDriver
Review:
Being as I'm quite the nitpicker/grammar maniac I'll say first that I like the story a lot. I'm reading it despite the numerous grammar errors (needs a lot of commas) and homonyms used such as "hear" instead of the correct "here".

There are the few completely wrong words too (really just another homonym just not as obvious) where I think you mean "reeked" not "wreaked".

reek: [reek] noun
1. a strong, unpleasant smell.
2. vapor or steam.

verb (used without object)
3. to smell strongly and unpleasantly.
4. to be strongly pervaded with something unpleasant or offensive.


wreak: [reek]

verb (used with object)
1. to inflict or execute (punishment, vengeance, etc.):
They wreaked havoc on the enemy.
2. to carry out the promptings of (one's rage, ill humor, will, desire, etc.), as on a victim or object:

I wish I could help you with this but I'm so busy that it's just impossible. I get to read in my off moments and do a lot of that. I hope this helps you and whoever is beta reading your stories to do better. The story is fun and I'm looking forward to reading more, much more.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [19 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from Kindleflame
Review:
Is this story dead?
Review By [Kindleflame] • Date [7 Feb 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from twlight
Review:
Wonderful. I love how you explained the new magical bloodlines, very cool. I do look forward to learning the reasons that TPTB have for not informing the right people about Willows abilities. I am eagerly awaiting the next installment to this wonderful wonderful story.
Review By [twlight] • Date [29 Jan 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from WCSII
Review:
*Finishes reading On Angels Wings too... looks at late update dates. Reaches up and pulls rope (seemingly dangling from thin air) wash pan drops on author's head (it's empty, no need to brake the snoozer's neck, we want a completed story after all)*

Did that wake you? If so, how soon before we get a new update, on either of these two interesting stories?
Review By [WCSII] • Date [10 Jul 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from (Recent Donor)tchizek
Review:
Hmm, interesting start to the story. I was a bit worried when it started with a time travel bit but it picked right up and I really enjoyed the story and characterization.

I will be interested to see where you go with this.

Tom.
Review By [(Recent Donor)tchizek] • Date [10 Jul 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from Narf
Review:
Nice update, keep up the good work thanks and bye.
Comments from author:
Thanks. I'm glad you liked it.
Review By [Narf] • Date [20 Mar 13] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from moringstar
Review:
Another great chapter. I understood what you were saying about willow, so good job there.
Comments from author:
Thanks.

As I said in another reply I was a bit worried that people wouldn't understand what I meant as it was the one section of the chapter that gave me two ton of trouble.
Review By [moringstar] • Date [17 Mar 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from (Recent Donor)faithfan
Review:
I agree with SnakeFox's review. The idea of saving Prue has to be dealt with as either possible or not. If Prue cannot be saved, why can Xander?

Also as seen in Chap 4 if Willow's magic training prevents her addiction, the will be no reason for the break up with Tara, will that maybe change her (tara) fated death?
Comments from author:
I have plans for Prue as I never liked how the character was killed off.

True it will prevent her break up with Tara whether that changes Tara's fate I haven't decided yet. Though if Tara does end up getting shot and Willow keeps her wits about her enough she could call Andy and he could heal her.
Review By [(Recent Donor)faithfan] • Date [17 Mar 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from SnakeFox
Review:
It's a good story, a little heavy on the verbose language and light on the punctuation at times, but a good story nonetheless.

One question though: if Paige has gone back in time with the intent of saving someone who died - why has no one, not Paige herself, or her sisters in the present before she left considered that she could also save Prue, as her death is still a year into the future?
Comments from author:
The reason Paige's sisters never went back in time to save Prue is basically they didn't know the time travel spell was there as the Book of Shadows still holds alot of mysteries for the sisters and it would take years to understand and learn every single spell and potion written within and what said spells and potions do.

Chris of course knew about the spell as it was the same one he used to travel back in time from the future to save/stop evil Wyatt.

As for Prue I do have plans for her as I never liked how she was killed off.
Review By [SnakeFox] • Date [17 Mar 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from Studyofchaos
Review:
Your explanation was good. Born with magic, some potential and learned (practitioner), lots of potentia l/ power leading to children who are born with magic (practitioner / progenitor). Looking forward to the next chapter.
Comments from author:
Thanks I was a bit worried that it might come across as quite convoluted and hard to understand. I'm glad to see that it is not.
Review By [Studyofchaos] • Date [17 Mar 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from willie
Review:
Loved this. Can't wait to read more. Please continue soon
Comments from author:
Thanks.

I'll have the next chapter ready soon.
Review By [willie] • Date [6 Mar 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from Bobboky
Review:
very good work
Comments from author:
Thank you.
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [24 Feb 13] • Not Rated
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