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Review of chapter "Chapter One" from docfeng
Review:
more please
Review By [docfeng] • Date [28 Aug 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from mandigrrl
Review:
Loved it...wouldn't mind seeing more.....
Review By [mandigrrl] • Date [28 Aug 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Genuka
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*laughs uproarously* Dawn has really bad luck.
Review By [Genuka] • Date [28 Aug 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Lyssippe
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This is great. The only thing that would be better, would be if Beckett suspected Dawn because the coincidence of her knowing Navajo was too suspicious, and it's finished, so that wont happen. *Sadness* ... *assurance to author of enjoyment*
Review By [Lyssippe] • Date [11 May 13] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Xovervore
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"Giles-in-Training" = GIT. That's a Britishism , usually used to insult a person who has made a bad mistake. So amusing in acronym form.
An interesting little tale, but needs resolution of Beckett's case in a further story. Dawn should be able to make an insurance claim for her car, also.
Review By [Xovervore] • Date [22 Apr 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Gideon
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I like how the story proceeds without turning into some complicated overlap of responsibilities, that makes a nice change. I did find the prose a bit flowery but the characterisation was good. Maybe Beckett will look Dawn up next time she needs a translation?
Review By [Gideon] • Date [22 Apr 13] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from SamJames
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Dawn admits that this is her car and that reads (and therefore most likely can write) and fairly obscure language found at the crime scene. So why wouldn't she be at least questioned if not immediately arrested?
Review By [SamJames] • Date [22 Apr 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Ramenth
Review:
Diné means 'The People', technically speaking.
Comments from author:
Yes, but in Navajo.
Review By [Ramenth] • Date [21 Apr 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from PATM
Review:
Beckett needs to talk to Buffy. Why an Isuzu? Funny name? Fairly amusing, keep adding stories to this.
Comments from author:
My mother had an Isuzu, that exact model. It was my favorite car. I wanted to pay it homage.
Review By [PATM] • Date [21 Apr 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from ShyBob
Review:
Too funny; you've got Dawn's speedramble down pat. I hope Buffy doesn't get called back to the States as a suspect...
Review By [ShyBob] • Date [21 Apr 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Starfox
Review:
Nice one - fits the two shows and without many forced revelations or "let's take the investigation over" scenes.
Review By [Starfox] • Date [21 Apr 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from tealruby
Review:
This was really nice, and begs for a sequel!
Review By [tealruby] • Date [21 Apr 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Current Donor)ayg
Review:
Still giggling about it after a second reread.

I do have a few questions/comments.

1. Shouldn't the pen knife in her pocket have caused problems? Aren't there any metal detectors at the entry to the police station?

2. Stolen car? Did Dawn report it as stolen before she found out Buffy was the one who "borrowed" it? And if it wasn't reported as stolen, shouldn't Kate have had a few questions about it? And if it was part of a serious crime scene, shouldn't it take longer time and more effort for Dawn to get it back?

3. Are you going to write about the Colorado incident? I assume this is a Stargate reference?
Comments from author:
Wow, you are a tough cookie. Note, I am trying to answer based my the mental story that resides in my head and not in any written form.

1. It was a wooden knife?

2. It had been partially stripped, giving evidence that it was stolen. Dawn has an alibi. She's not getting it back, just releasing herself of it. Allowing for it to be junked when it is free to be junked.

3. Possibly.
Review By [(Current Donor)ayg] • Date [21 Apr 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from TAO
Review:
Y'know, I can just imagine a follow-up with this...Dawn showing up a couple weeks later with a bag.

Beckett: "What's this?"

Dawn: "A couple pairs of shoes...I was able to blackmail...er...convince my sister into buying a couple pairs for you to compensate for the headache she caused."

Beckett: "Well, that's nice...but I'm not sure I can take them."

Dawn: "Well you could always confiscate them as evidence."

Castle (walking by): "Well if you don't want them, I'll see if Alexis or my mom will take them."

Dawn (stares at Castle for a moment).

Castle: "What?"

Dawn: "Sorry...but I think I know you from somewhere...weren't you a star in a crappy sci-fi series at some point?"

Castle: "What? No. And it wasn't crappy!"

Okay, I'll shut up now.
Review By [TAO] • Date [21 Apr 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from CPTSkip
Review:
Please write more. You did an excellent job on this little story. I thought both your Dawn and Kate were darn near perfect. I could easily see and hear their voices in the theater of my mind. Plus I think it would be interesting for the Scoobies to get involved with one of Kate's cases that turns out NOT to be supernatural case once they start messing with her team. It always seems in the crossovers that Kate's team gets sucked into Buffy's world and I think it might be interesting to do it the other way around. Plus I'd just like to see the Scoobies interact with Kate's cops.

I know it is usual to have the Scoobies mistake Castle for the crazy preacher dude but they are not the same guy in spite of both being played by Captain Reynolds. I think the Scooby seeing him should quickly realize that. I've known several people who looked like they could be darn near fraternal twins and who weren't even related. My dad had a guy who looked so much like him it used to freak my whole family out. But if you want to make with the confusion for fun and games, go for it. Just write more, please?
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [21 Apr 13] • Not Rated
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