Large PrintHandheldAudioRating
using
 paypal
Twisting The Hellmouth Crossing Over Awards - Results
Is your email address still valid?

Murphys Laws of Combat

StoryReviewsStatisticsRelated StoriesTracking
Review of chapter "2. Recoilless rifles - aren't." from Aximand
Review:
You need to raid the Mass Effect wiki, you miss spelled a lot, including Shepard's name.
Review By [Aximand] • Date [6 May 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "2. Recoilless rifles - aren't." from (Past Donor)Jewel
Review:
Good start - looking forward to more (since I have really enjoyed the few ME fics here)
Review By [(Past Donor)Jewel] • Date [12 Jan 14] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "2. Recoilless rifles - aren't." from Raider
Review:
yet again you amaze and impress, well done sir!
Comments from author:
thanks for the review, i kinda doubt i will be returning to this though, while i love the story myself, the reader response has been...

lacking...

I will most likely put my effort into things that my readers prefer.
Review By [Raider] • Date [9 Sep 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "1. Friendly fire - isn't." from Raider
Review:
oh I like it, I just really wanna see if you cant keep the momentum you built up.

more please :)
Comments from author:
I am glad you enjoyed it, i have been working on the next chapter, but with work and life eating up my free time it is like pulling teeth.
Review By [Raider] • Date [5 Sep 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "1. Friendly fire - isn't." from Blackguard
Review:
Interesting start, looking forward to more.
Comments from author:
thanks, i will be trying to get another chapter out, sorry but work and life have caused some rather abrupt changes in my free time.
Review By [Blackguard] • Date [28 Jul 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "1. Friendly fire - isn't." from Raider
Review:
well now, thats an interesting start to be sure...
Comments from author:
I hope you liked it.
Review By [Raider] • Date [10 Jun 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "1. Friendly fire - isn't." from (Current Donor)NekoHibiki
Review:
"How you can look at Sovereign and even consider it to be Geth is beyond me, it is like looking at a Toyota and confusing it with a Ferrari,

Finally, I am considering adding in some of the other team members from the other games, Legion, Jack, Vega, Etc. do you think I should, or should I keep it Vanilla outside of the already added members?"

Add more members.

Anything is better than the original timeline.

I'd like to see you add Ranma Saotome too.
Comments from author:
most likely will not be adding Ranma, i have only seen about three episodes so i don't have a solid grasp on the character.
Review By [(Current Donor)NekoHibiki] • Date [10 Jun 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "1. Friendly fire - isn't." from RoyalTwinFangs
Review:
Very nice.
Comments from author:
glad you liked it.
Review By [RoyalTwinFangs] • Date [10 Jun 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "1. Friendly fire - isn't." from RockyWilliams
Review:
Run on sentences are a major problem. One really long sentence is not the way to make a paragraph.
Comments from author:
yeah, sorry about that.
Review By [RockyWilliams] • Date [10 Jun 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "1. Friendly fire - isn't." from ShadowMaster
Review:
Great!

I was hoping someone was going to do a Mass Effect crossover with Xander as the lead character! True there is that other GREAT fic but there Xander is in his usual support role whereas with this one he's the hero. Not a bad start though I would have preferred it if the chapter was at least twice as long as it was but I'll take what I can get.

I approve of your decision to keep the other Scoobies out of the mix. If they showed up both the readers and you might get tempted to perceive Xan back in his support role and that wouldn't be right.

As for bringing characters/crew from the other ME games in early...I'm as divided as you are on that. On the one side of things I think the storyline for ME 1 was great as is and think there's a natural progression to the whole storyline that comprises the trilogy that needs to be kept. On the other hand I myself try to live by the saying 'do what has not been done before' so taking a few of the other characters from the other ME games and putting them in the first game could be a good thing. If you choose to go this way though I'd be extra careful to make sure the characters you choose can feasibly make the leap back. Like don't take Grunt and bring him back because no matter how you slice it he probably didn't even exist by this point or if he did he was still growing in his tube. Feasibility of transfer will be important.

Whatever the direction you decide to take I'll be keeping an eye on the fic and hoping for new chapters real soon. Keep up the good work!! C YA!

PS-Pairing-wise I'd prefer you go with Xander/Liara rather than Xander/Ashley because the former would be more interesting in my opinion.
Comments from author:
Thanks, i will definitely be considering it, as for pairing... Tali, Samara and Liara are the top three contenders with Jack a close runner up... Tali has the Willow personality, Samara is close to Cordelia and Jack is Faith, Liara surprisingly enough is very similar to Ampata...

still considering it.
Review By [ShadowMaster] • Date [10 Jun 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "1. Friendly fire - isn't." from AnimeRonin
Review:
add in a few others. Xander and Jack, that'd be interesting to see which one tries to kill the other first (no points for guessing right).
Review By [AnimeRonin] • Date [10 Jun 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "1. Friendly fire - isn't." from Selias
Review:
Other than some typos, it seemed alright. It's Nihlus and Saren, by the way. Also, I'm fine with other team members.
Comments from author:
Patched some of the Typos, and edited the names, thanks.
Review By [Selias] • Date [10 Jun 13] • Not Rated
StoryReviewsStatisticsRelated StoriesTracking