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Review of chapter "Awakening to a Dream" from falsegod
until that last chapter I would have rated you a 10 but really what was that it seems like an entire chapter wasted. don't you have enough on your hands without adding weird stuff onto it?
Review By [falsegod] • Date [1 Aug 14] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Awakening to a Dream" from fayefree
If you wanted to write another story why didn't you? Adding this on to a story in progress was just annoying. I was looking forward to a new chapter to Alexander Harris not to a new story cram in as if it were a new chapter. I tried reading it and I was only able to get through about a fourth of it. I keep asking myself what does this have to do with Alexander Harris, Spartan- 01? Answer absolutely nothing.
Review By [fayefree] • Date [29 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Awakening to a Dream" from Chan
An interesting viewpoint on linked souls throughout time that is what the chap was about right? if not then perhaps I need to review closer than I had. although being people who making things happen regardless of the timeframe is interesting/frightening at least when this willow goes out of her youth and enters the prime of her power scary...scary...scary.
Review By [Chan] • Date [23 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Awakening to a Dream" from CageFire
Great new chapter. Kind of a unexpected divergence, but I assume it'll be important later.
Review By [CageFire] • Date [21 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Awakening to a Dream" from DarthTenebrus
For this entertaining look at demon hunting in Feudal Japan...

Arigato goziemashita. Anata-wa tomodachi desu.
Comments from author:
Thank you. My daughter speaks Japanese and I don't (not yet).

I am using a Japanese English Dictionary from 1873 and a few other Japanese Folk Lore and Mythology books from before 1914.

Spoiler Alerts.

The TV show BtVS had Willow as the most powerful witch of the millennia, plus she is brilliant as in maybe a Promethean (that's Mensa for Mensa members). They have her channeling magic that, they indicate, would have killed a hundred or a thousand witches.

In the TV shows she became a powerful chess piece (using a war game symbolism) but in every season leading up - she was the small linchpin that allowed Buffy to prevail. The first time (near the end of season 2) with casting the magic that re-ensouled Angel (stopped Angelus) in the nick of time.

So with this flashback story in two chapters, I'm setting the groundwork that she is... more... and that she isn't just a witch. She is a shatterpoint (a person who at a nexus of time and space - changes everything around them) and she is a real demi-goddess.

Something more advanced than even the Alterrans?

She is young and still maturing - so she will eventually emerge from her chrysalis. When she does, will she scare the crap out of Xander and Cortana? Yep!

Plus in this flashback I'm reinforcing the pre-BtVS history of Slayers who fought demons with the help of others and weaving in the pre-history of Stargate. Goa'uld and Alterrans both killing Kaijuu and demons.

Now in my story Xander (as a Spartan) and Cortana are also both shatterpoints; changing everything, changing the world.

Buffy is a local shatterpoint and prevents demon apocalypses ('world endages'). She sustains the world by existing and doing the job; she doesn't want to do.

So what if Willow can use technology and magic in ways that Cortana and Xander can't even fathom at the moment?

How can she change the world with Xander and Cortana? What will be the catalyst?

This Willow is not going to be just a supporting character or the chess queen piece that you only bring onto the board at the end of the game (like they did in BtVS).

I wonder what Illyria, "The Blue Smurfette" and "God-Queen of the Primordium", would say to her when they meet?
Review By [DarthTenebrus] • Date [21 Jul 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Awakening to a Dream" from thundernaruto
Great chapter Update soon
Review By [thundernaruto] • Date [21 Jul 14] • Rating [4 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Awakening to a Dream" from Haxor
Quality of writing is still pretty good, and the chapter is a nice length - but it's essentially 18k worth of OC. It is such a jarring read that I could not find myself giving half a fuck what happens to the characters, despite them being 'previous lives'.

Don't get me wrong - I get it. Wizard is an alien, magic is advanced technology, Xander still knows where the lair is and will get new shiny things. There are just so many easier, better ways to do that. I can't imagine myself being the only person who effectively skimmed this chapter fore the sole purpose of finding the end of that 'quick' flashback towards Japan, only to be bitterly disappointed upon realising that's it. Worse still, that there may in fact be more.
Review By [Haxor] • Date [21 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Awakening to a Dream" from SeniorFleetCaptain
I do not see what this has to do with the story.
Review By [SeniorFleetCaptain] • Date [20 Jul 14] • Rating [3 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Awakening to a Dream" from Bobboky
nice work
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [20 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Awakening to a Dream" from DCG
You heading deeper into the batshit insane area. The fic's been going down hill the last couple chapters but this was just a giant pile of bad fanboy ism wank.

Writing still great mind you, and there's a ton of it. But the subject mater.. ewwwwwww.
Review By [DCG] • Date [20 Jul 14] • Rating [1 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Awakening to a Dream" from michaelangelo
So that Higashi wizard chap was an Alterran? his stuff kinda sounds like the precursor weapons and personal shield that the Goa'uld tried to reverse engineer, creating the inferior shield, Zat and staff weapon copies we all know.
Review By [michaelangelo] • Date [20 Jul 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Awakening to a Dream" from RoyalTwinFangs
I don't even know what this is and find that this is not what I wanted. I have be waiting for the SG parts to come but "this" throw me off which I hate.
Review By [RoyalTwinFangs] • Date [20 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "A Rough Edged Tool" from Morgomir
Great chapter. Keep up the good work.
Review By [Morgomir] • Date [12 Jul 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "A Rough Edged Tool" from JinaSolo
Xander has to discover Spartan Birth Control. Or at least force Cortana into giving it to him.

There is no way that ONI did not have BC... Pregnant teens are not fun to read about.

If you want to be playing with Xander then you can have Willow taking the BC and not tell Xander till after...

No BC it not right. Pro-choice is not just for girls...
Comments from author:

First, You need to actually read the story.

Xander doesn't want a pregnant teenage Willow or for any of his female acquaintances to be teenage mothers. Not because he can't afford to be a father or doesn't want to be a father. I've made it clear that Xander cares about his friends and the love of his heart. Teenage pregnancies are and always has been more dangerous to a young still maturing female. Teenage unmarried motherhood is a tragedy. All of that is in the story.

Xander has made it clear that he will be responsible for his offspring, no matter how those are arrived at.

I've also made it clear in the story what manner of birth control does work with genetically engineered advanced humans. Cortana already fixed up Willow with her own Obstetrician to obtain those back in the stories December timeline.

Xander wants to be a good man and he wants to be chaste for Willow until they are married. Willow would love to get out of a bad parental homelife but she made a bet with her friends and she intends to win her bet. While giving Xander a hard time with her seductive teasing.

Reality 101 and no more progressive feminist mental diarrhea.

Every contraceptive method has its... failure rate. So if the package states that this method or product is 96% effective in preventing pregnancies, that actually is very close to meaning that if you have sex one hundred times while using that product you have a pretty good probability of having four pregnancies.

No birth control method sold today is 100% effective. No birth control method sold today will stop you from getting a publicly communicable disease from sexual relations or from the close bodily contact and exchange of fluids that is normal to that act. Many of those diseases today are becoming untreatable (drug resistant) and lethal. Some of them will reduce your probability of infection but not stop an infection especially if you persist in reckless behavior.

Since the introduction and wide acceptance of oral female contraceptives in 1970's; the number of teenage pregnancies in the USA has more than quadrupled and the teenage mother demographic is now the majority of live births.

The availability of all forms of contraceptives and birth control methods in the 11 western nations is at a peak and the per-day cost of anyone of those contraceptives is less than $1 per day. This includes both male and female plus preconception and post-conception birth control methods.

So why is - the teenage pregnancy, teenage motherhood and the unmarried motherhood (all age groups) demographic rates so high?

I would recommend that you take some pre-Nursing or Medical courses to learn about the realities of human anatomy, physiology and behavior.

Think really hard about that phrase "pro-choice" because it doesn't actually mean what you think it means.

Just to enhance your own future personal survival chances learn emergency first aid (which for the more advanced first aid courses will include emergency childbirth) and CPR. You may never save your own life with that knowledge but you have a near 100% chance of saving some others life.

FYI: The US Navy and other military services DO NOT "provide" birth control to their female service members nor is birth control mandatory for them. It is made available to them but purchasing those products and using those products is all separate and individual choices.

The female service member pregnancy rates is quite high and the services try very hard NOT to report those numbers to Congress. The financial cost of those pregnancies is high and reduces the combat effectiveness of the units.

Reducing combat effectiveness means more of your people are going to die or be seriously injured. That is bad.
Review By [JinaSolo] • Date [5 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "A Rough Edged Tool" from troujin
good chapter to great story. i hope you update more often though.
Review By [troujin] • Date [4 Jul 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
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