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Review of chapter "Close To Home" from FinalGuardian
Really, really good. I can't wait for more. XD
Review By [FinalGuardian] • Date [15 Mar 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Close To Home" from JamesBrown
don't worry too much about getting the dyslexia right,
as it is not a disease with set symptoms,but rather a screwup
in the wiring in the part of the brain controlling language pattern recognition.
producing a wide range of related symptoms in different combinations
and degrees.

I personally have trouble connecting the sound of a word to the spelling
of a word and vice versa,in addition to tending to invert the letters
left to right inconsistently - half a word or sentence might be fine
and the rest a jumble.
thankfully speech recognition allows me to be my normal annoyingly pedantic self,
but if it screws up I have a great deal of trouble telling the software whats wrong.
other people may see words mirror imaged (Leonardo da Vinci may have had that problem)
or have letters or words move around as they look at them like trying to
read through rippling water.
(which sounds like the symptoms used in the books)
it may affect only reading or only writing,or some combination.
so as long as you don't try to go into clinical detail,you shouldn't
have a problem.

that said,I quite enjoyed the New chapter,and loved how goat boy kept digging
himself deeper and deeper trying to find out if she was manifesting any signs
of being a demigod. :)
So keep up the good work, and keep posting- and thank you.
Review By [JamesBrown] • Date [4 Mar 14] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Close To Home" from (Current Donor)WildMartin
I'm really liking this story. Can't wait to see the next few chapters.
Comments from author:
Thank you for reading my story and leaving a very kind review.
I'll be updating soon, hopefully.

Review By [(Current Donor)WildMartin] • Date [4 Mar 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Super Powered Hot Chick" from JamesBrown
excellent story so far,
I can really feel her frustration and anger
at having books taken away from her,
as I am also dyslexic -although it doesn't
really affect my reading much,
(5000+ books over the last 55 years
since I picked up my first in kindergarten)
but rather my writing-it is enormously difficult to string
together more than three or four letters
in the right order ( even if I've Just looked at the word)
thank GOD for voice recognition
and Dragon NaturallySpeaking - May its praises
be sung forever.
in any case I've been reading fan fiction(many,many hundreds)
since it was printed with mimeograph machines,
and so far your work compares fairly well.
your character is well-written, and although you will
have to be careful, she does not appear to be descending
in to 'Mary Sue' territory just yet.
however you should probably try to come up
with a general outline for the story.
if you don't have at least some idea where you're planning
to end up,you can find yourself in a blind alley
or down some very deep plot holes.
Even though I have known writers( even professionals)
who successfully 'just make it up as they go along',I've seen
many a promising story abandoned because they wrote
themselves into a corner and couldn't figure a way out.
as to adding in more crossovers- be very careful as
while it can be a lot of fun, adding too many characters can
get away from you and completely lose the main thread.

anyway, hoping to see many enjoyable (and frequent)updates,
and thank you very much for a excellent story.
Comments from author:
Thank you for your very kind review. I'm not dyslectic, I don't know anyone that is so I'm just kinda making it up as go along. Feel free to give me some pointers or tell me when I make mistakes.

I've updates the next chapter so please let me know what you think?

Review By [JamesBrown] • Date [19 Jan 14] • Rating [6 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Super Powered Hot Chick" from TTrunks
Interesting chapter. I sort of wish something would happen already but I get that build up is important. I just want to see Rhea f*ck up some hell spawn lol. She keeps saying she's all scary but it's easy to say so. It's also a bit hard to believe considering an algebra teacher scares her but I'm assuming it's going to be a monster. I love how you've worked her fatal flaw into things. Also how you had her get "hit by the sea". the sons and daughters of Poseidon do change with his moods. Piper mentioned how a different son of his was harsh and typhoon like.

Honestly, I sort of pity the Minotaur. Percy is just as loyal to her as she is to him. He killed the minotaur because it was a threat to hiss mother. Rhea being involved as well... I'm imagining a "Sudden and severe hurricane hitting the lake shore" or a massive tsunami or something. Part of me was hoping we'd get to see Rhea knock Smelly Gabe out when Sally brought him home to meet them.... Seems wrong that she's letting her mother get abused and not doing anything.

As for a favorite character, I don't really have any in the PJ books. I guess Percy, Tyson, Bob, and Nico are decent. Honestly all the chars are pretty likable. I do have to admit Night and Tarterus are my favorite baddies, because well they are epic boss level baddies. Gaia seems like a whiny b*tch to me, always trying to warn of the kids, Tarterus just f*cks their s*it up...
Comments from author:
Thank you for your review, I loved reading it.

Mr. Vogel isn't what he appears to be, that's all I'm gonna say about that, I don't want to ruin the surprise.

She won't allow smelly Gabe to do anything to her mother, trust me. She kind of needs him right now since he smells bad enough to hide her and Percy, so no matter how much she wants to get rid of him he's kind of a necessary evil.

And I agree, I don't like Gaia at all. She's not really all that scary.

I've updated, so please let me know what you think.
Review By [TTrunks] • Date [15 Jan 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Momentum" from MissLynn
I feel so sorry for her being dyslexic. I can hardly wait until they go to camp and how she will change things around. I love how she manipulated her father and I'm anticipating their first meeting as father and daughter.

Hoping for another update soon!
Comments from author:
I know, I can't imagine what a nightmare it would be, especially for someone like Rhea, who loves reading and writing.
I'm also looking forward to her meeting with Poseidon, it'll be interesting to say the least.
I'm updating soon, so I hope you'll let me know what you think of the third chapter.

Sincerely, Hanane
Review By [MissLynn] • Date [8 Jan 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Momentum" from TTrunks
I really liked this, please update soon.

Honestly your character seems a bit like Rachel Dare but more sort of awesome. I can't wait to see the two of them get pissed, Percy and Jason caused a Hurricane... And Percy alone has nearly caused a volcanic eruption, AND beaten a goddess ((Won't go into details to avoid a spoiler for House of Hades)). Something tells me your character will make Clarisse back off, and I almost pity any daughters of Aphrodite who try and break his heart.

Do you know yet if them getting sent to the camp during the school year will effect Thalia, Luke, and Annabeth yet?

Also, huge HUGE bonus points if she uses a gun. They've said a few times that they have them in Camp half-blood and they work. And yet despite major battles, they ignore them. I mean a shotgun let Percy's Mom drop a Cyclops, and yet they just ignore them. I get that it's hard to write a gun battle interesting and that swords are more greek. But I don't think a gun as a back up, or first contact weapon would be that out of place. Especially since I doubt most of the "Common" monsters even if they survive a Celestial bronze bullet would be as threatening with either it's kneecaps blasted, or a clip of celestial bronze in it's chest. Even if you don't want to take the story that direction please have her mention it or something. I never got why the books just threw away the idea.
Comments from author:
I'll have to look into the gun angle, it sounds promising actually. It's good to hear your thoughts on Rhea, I think she's pretty kick-ass too.

I've actually decided not to let them go to Camp Half-blood early. I did intend to do so, but it came out differently, and I kind of like the change I made. I'm updating soon, and you'll understand what I mean, I hope.

Let me know what you think? I loved reading your review, so thanks for taking the time to let me know what you thought, and for your excellent suggestions.

Sincerely, Hanane
Review By [TTrunks] • Date [6 Jan 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Momentum" from MamaLadyWolf
I love it and can't wait for more. Thank you for sharing your story with us.
Comments from author:
You're very welcome! I enjoy writing this story very much, so it's good to hear that you actually like it.
Thanks for reviewing. I'll update soon so I hope you'll let me know what you think about the new chapter.

Sincerely, Hanane
Review By [MamaLadyWolf] • Date [31 Dec 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Momentum" from Destrark
really good characterisation, I really like this story and cant wait for more. Have you read the Melissa Potter series by any chance? its similar... (FemHarry as Percy's older half-sister)
Fav book of the series are House of Hades and Last Olympian.
Comments from author:
Thank you, it's good to hear that you enjoy my story. I haven't heard of the Melissa Potter series actually. Could you tell me the name of the author and where I might find the story? I'm always interested in checking out good stories.
I'm updating this story soon, I hope you'll let me know what you think?

Sincerely, Hanane
Review By [Destrark] • Date [25 Dec 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Passage" from Eureka
I do so hope that you continue this story. As I have read all the series I really like the idea that he has a sister and that she knows at least the first part; and can help to keep him safe. My question is though, Did she get to read the entire series to her nephew or just the first book?
Comments from author:
Thank you for your great review. She read the entire series, so she knows what's coming. But on the other hand she's not an avid fan, she just read it to her nephews because it's what they wanted to listen to.

Review By [Eureka] • Date [14 Nov 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Passage" from Chargone
Being unfamiliar with the source material, i honestly have no idea why I'm reading this...

But it looks pretty good so far, so i shall continue to do so :D
Comments from author:
Thank you, that's a great compliment. I have to tell you though, reading unfamiliar works is pretty much how I got into this fandom. Along with Inuyasha, Naruto, Bleach, Katekyo Hitman Reborn! Vampire Diaries, Assassins Creed, and many others. Usually I just read a crossover between something I'm familiar with and something I don't know anything about, it keeps things interesting. I have been known to read something because it simply caught my eye though, even if I was unfamiliar with the fandom.
It can be the best decision ever, or irritating because you have to look up a lot of things.

If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to ask. I can point you to a couple of good crossovers if you want, so you'll have a feel for what you're reading.

Sincerely, Hanane
Review By [Chargone] • Date [13 Nov 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Passage" from MissLynn
I like this story and would keep on reading more and think you should continue writing and posting it! I can't wait to see the reactions of her mother and other adults at how fast she'll master things like walking and talking.

Update soon please!
Comments from author:
Thank you!! I'll post the second chapter soon, it's pretty much done, but I won't post until I've written the third chapter, that way I'll always have a chapter in reserve.
Hope you'll let me know what you think about the second chapter too.

Review By [MissLynn] • Date [12 Nov 13] • Rating [1 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Passage" from Doodle
Excellent chapter. 2,000/10

Its a great narrative, the details are great, it reads like a real person is experiencing it rather than a one/two dimensional character.

Was her previous reality the same one she's in or a different one?

Its ironic that she died near water by a lightning bolt considering her next life.
Comments from author:
Wow, thank you for the compliment.
It's an original character so it's very exciting to hear she's not one/two dimensional. The reality she died in had the Percy Jackson books so no, she's not reborn into her own universe. She'll find out soon that a lot of things that were fiction in her world are in fact real in her new life. I'm not really sure who or what, but don't be surprised if Iron Man suddenly flies by, or something like that. Or not. Like I said, I'm not sure about that yet.
If you have any suggestions, please let me know, it's always good to hear ideas.

The irony thing was done intentional, and will be brought up in later chapters. I don't want to give too much away, but there's so much more going on than Rhea knows.
It'll be fun to watch her uncover what's really going on, and why things happened the way they did.

Thanks for the review, and I hope to hear more of your thoughts in the future. Feedback is always good.

Sincerely, Hanane
Review By [Doodle] • Date [11 Nov 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Passage" from EllandrahSylver
It's an interesting beginning. I'll be watching for updates.
Comments from author:
Thank you for reviewing, it's always good to hear people enjoy reading my work. I'll update as soon as I can.

Review By [EllandrahSylver] • Date [11 Nov 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Passage" from periskyye
Pretty interesting so far!
Comments from author:
Thank you! Hope you'll enjoy the next chapter too.
Review By [periskyye] • Date [11 Nov 13] • Not Rated
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