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The trouble with families

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Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from Morgomir
Review:
Great chapter. Keep up the good work.
Comments from author:
Thank you.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [Morgomir] • Date [24 Feb 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from DieselDriver
Review:
ACK!!! NEED MORE!!! Few minor typos but Woo Hoo what a start to a story!
Comments from author:
Thank you for your kind review.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [9 Jan 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from Bobboky
Review:
Cool
Comments from author:
Thank you for your review
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [8 Jan 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from lordamnesia
Review:
This is an interesting start! Keep up the good work!
Comments from author:
Thank you for your kind review.
Review By [lordamnesia] • Date [8 Jan 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from removedauthor
Review:
Interesting chapter. I hope to read the next chapter soon and hope is as good if not better than this one was.
Comments from author:
Thank you for your review.

I wish i could get the chapters out faster but life keeps getting in the way but i will get the next chapter out as soon as i can.
Review By [removedauthor] • Date [8 Jan 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 1" from Morgomir
Review:
Great chapter. Keep up the good work.
Comments from author:
Thank you for the review.
Review By [Morgomir] • Date [4 Jan 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 1" from DragonBard
Review:
So, Xander gets things explained, but we're left in the dark about the situation?

Sorry, but it's kind of irritating to be honest.

Also, the title? Suggests that the story is about discovering weird things in the family closets of the Scoobies.
Review By [DragonBard] • Date [27 Nov 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 1" from Chargone
Review:
Probably needs a beta reader (or a better one :p), as there are a lot of issues with sentences (particularly dialogue) which don't flow well, as well as missing punctuation. The result is... choppy, and kind of awkward to read.

http://www.sussex.ac.uk/informatics/punctuation/toc should help a lot with the punctuation issues, at least. Commas would be a good starting point. I should probably reread that myself, as i probably overuse them.
Review By [Chargone] • Date [27 Nov 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Prologue" from Morgomir
Review:
Interesting start. Keep up the good work.
Comments from author:
Thank you for the review
Review By [Morgomir] • Date [23 Nov 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Prologue" from (Current Donor)Truthmaker
Review:
Interesting premise. Hope to read more of this.
Comments from author:
Thank you
Review By [(Current Donor)Truthmaker] • Date [19 Nov 13] • Rating [6 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Prologue" from LordCorwin
Review:
Excellent start.... I've marked you as a story to follow. I look forward to the next chapter.
Comments from author:
Thank you :)

I'm hoping to have the next chapter up early next week, if not sooner...irl willing
Review By [LordCorwin] • Date [18 Nov 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Prologue" from Chargone
Review:
Well...
Interesting beginning.
Poor door is doomed.

Any particular reason for the katana? As swords go they're actually pretty shit. All the stories about the spectacular skill needed to make them? That's not because of the awesome finished product, it's because of the crap materials available to make it from. I think about the Only way they're actually better than a European longsword is quick-draw techniques (Pretty much all of which leave you wide open and screwed if they fail). There's a reason Samurai used a spear or bow in battle over the katana if at all possible. Anything with armour, anything you need to block, anything you need to stab, how hard it is to break, a European long sword's better. Also a Lot easier to make. And modern spring steel is superior to anything non-mystical for making them from. And European soldiers and warriors still preferred axes, maces, spears and lances (or bows, depending) over the sword for battle. the sword is, ultimately, equivalent to the modern use of pistols and the like. The reason the katana was ever considered good was that it was the only one still in use (and accessable) when the west (particularly the USA) rediscovered interest in the sword arts, so the only masters with any experience were those who used it. A lot of western stuff's been rediscovered since, mind you, from manuels and such.

Anyway, pet rant there. If there's a particular reason for the katana it's fine, but if you were trying for 'cool' or 'powerful', the katana falls flat. Plus, training in the weapon's proper use should be easier to get for European style blades (Guiles, SCA, others.)

Be interested to see where you're going with this (particularly the poor door's fate :p)
Comments from author:
Ok first off, thank you for the review.

Yep, the door is doomed. :)

As for the Katana. There are several reasons 1) The katana was chosen because it was made by a character that is due to make an appearance later in this

story and he was born and raised in the mountain regions of Japan. And its the go-to design for the character to forge when he wants to relax and clear his

head. (He has already appeared in 'Journey'). 2) The katana in question was forged from Adamantine, Mithril and diamond dust (which was used to hold the

sword's original enchantments). 3) This particular Katana was forged to be unbreakable and to never need sharpening. 4) And the character who made it won't

protest over much about it going missing which is why Mick took it. Unlike if he'd taken one of handmade Bastard swords that Lea has forged.

And yes spear, staff and Naginata are fairly effective against Traditional Kenjutsu (but luckily Xander won't be learning traditional kenjutsu).

Even though this story is related to Journey its based far more on the crossover universe that my current and past rpg campaigns are set in. so its very

AU.
Review By [Chargone] • Date [17 Nov 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Prologue" from Bobboky
Review:
Good
Comments from author:
Thank you.
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [17 Nov 13] • Not Rated
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