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Review of chapter "Chapter 4" from Morgomir
Review:
Great chapter. Keep up the good work.
Comments from author:
Thank you for the review.
Review By [Morgomir] • Date [12 Sep 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 4" from michaelangelo
Review:
I like this story, it kind of reminds me of Lucifael's Discovery series.
Comments from author:
Thank you for the review.

Thank you

Started to read book one of Discovery last night after reading your review. (After reading your story.) Yeah it kinda does remind me of certain aspects. It's very well written.

I'm in the process of re-writing this story because it has way too many goofs in it and it needs expanding and tweaking. It's turning out to be a lot harder to turn 25 years of an rpg campaign into a story. There is simply so much information to sift through.

Ok I'd better stop now before I really start to waffle.

Thanks again, I'm glad you like it.
Review By [michaelangelo] • Date [16 Jul 14] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 4" from djhardim
Review:
Comments from author:
Thank you for the review.

I was thinking something akin to Boromir's sword because it seemed to suit Xander's personality.

Having re-read the story I'm thinking of doing a bit of a rewrite and sorting out the goofs as well as expanding certain parts and I was wondering what you thought of that idea?
Review By [djhardim] • Date [15 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 4" from grd
Review:
Ahh teen angst. I hope the three choose to stay together either in a relationship or friends. It would be a powerful trio. Each balancing the other.
Comments from author:
Thank you for the review.

It wouldn't be Buffy and Willow without them angsting over something. I didn't intend for them to become lovers but I can't seem to write it any other way. And now i have to adjust 'where did the slayer go'...doh!

In fact having reread this story I'm now seriously considering rewriting it. Removing as many goofs as possible and expanding sections of it that really need it.
Review By [grd] • Date [15 Jul 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from (Recent Donor)nerfherder
Review:
A good beginning for a possibly long tale. Looking forward to more of it!
Comments from author:
Thank you for the review.

Thank you.

As soon as i can shift the writers's block on this story i will get back to. It really needs to be written and finished.

Thanks again.
Review By [(Recent Donor)nerfherder] • Date [4 Jul 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from Morgomir
Review:
Great chapter. Keep up the good work.
Comments from author:
Thank you.
Review By [Morgomir] • Date [10 Jun 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from KrisB
Review:
So is this supposed to be a prequel to your other? I just read it and it seems that Xander nodded at the end like he knew the guy. So I'd say that all this is happening in the background before that.

The heavy bi Buffy is different. I think that Willow is bi as well. They both have liked, shown attraction to and had relationships with boys. It's just the discovering that they swing both ways is new.

Actually it's interesting in the ones that Willow crushes/goes after. Usually it's Xander, Oz, Tara, and than Kenneday. The first three have some major personality traits in common. I've never really liked the last one though. Heck, I get mixed on just Buffy. Buffy/Willow actually just seems right.

I don't see Buffy going after/with Faith. If you want to put done that they hated each other because of PTB stuff fine. Hmm, I wonder if you could work a X/F in there.
Comments from author:
Thank you for the review.

I did intend this to be a prequel to Journey but 'Where did the slayer go' got in the way of that. So I'm gonna have to fix why Xander knows Lea. At the moment I'm thinking I will explain it sometime in the future in 'The Assassin and the Key' (which is being a real pain to write at the moment) at the moment.

Having Buffy bi just seems like a natural progression for the character. There was more than enough spark-age in the show between Buffy and Faith for them to be together. That's not likely to happen in this story thou. (I won't say impossible because i never know whats going to happen between characters until it's written..gave up trying to plan character relationships ages ago..it never worked out how i wanted it to.)
Review By [KrisB] • Date [25 May 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from Bobboky
Review:
Very good
Comments from author:
Thank you
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [25 May 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from (Current Donor)Truthmaker
Review:
I really like where you're going with this. I hope you'll write more soon.
Comments from author:
Thank you.

I have to update two more stories and then i can get back to this one. Shouldn't be too long.
Review By [(Current Donor)Truthmaker] • Date [25 May 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from JediKnight
Review:
Interesting work on the story so far, though I really don't see any cossovers in this. I hope to read more soon.

-What is a "fry up"?
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review

The crossovers will start in a few chapters. Xander needs to be trained in his new abilities before he's set loose on the world/s

a Fry up is bacon, eggs, mushrooms, tomatoes, sauages and baked beans all fried in a frying pan (except the beans). a tradition English Meal. Oh fried bread as well.
Review By [JediKnight] • Date [3 May 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from Morgomir
Review:
Great chapter. Keep up the good work.
Comments from author:
Thank you.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [Morgomir] • Date [24 Feb 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from DieselDriver
Review:
ACK!!! NEED MORE!!! Few minor typos but Woo Hoo what a start to a story!
Comments from author:
Thank you for your kind review.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [9 Jan 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from Bobboky
Review:
Cool
Comments from author:
Thank you for your review
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [8 Jan 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from lordamnesia
Review:
This is an interesting start! Keep up the good work!
Comments from author:
Thank you for your kind review.
Review By [lordamnesia] • Date [8 Jan 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from removedauthor
Review:
Interesting chapter. I hope to read the next chapter soon and hope is as good if not better than this one was.
Comments from author:
Thank you for your review.

I wish i could get the chapters out faster but life keeps getting in the way but i will get the next chapter out as soon as i can.
Review By [removedauthor] • Date [8 Jan 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
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