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Review of chapter "I Don't Understand You..." from AceDreamer
Review:
M.A.R. = Multiple Anahata Resonator?

Naming stuff can be fun - dodgy magi-tech that mixes powerful ritual and original Iron Man (mid 1960s?) chest-plate of heart/life preservation...

Warren, or at least what's left of him, is starting to sound very, very, broken... Starting to make a number of the Marvel mad scientists look pretty sane...

You're taking this story in unexpected directions, I do want to see where it goes!
Review By [AceDreamer] • Date [17 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "I Don't Understand You..." from (Recent Donor)nerfherder
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And the funniest part?!? When he found this out, he didn't pick an unpowered, heroless, non-magic world and set himself up as king! Hell, don't like your world, pick another. MO-RON!!!! Dude, seriously! Take your toys and leave! I mean, he highgraded multiple freaking comicbook verses. All he had to do was take his toys to the verse of his choosing and take over economically. All hail Emperor Warren the Undying! Schmuck!
Review By [(Recent Donor)nerfherder] • Date [17 Aug 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "I Don't Understand You..." from (Current Donor)Katrina
Review:
I hate to go simple on the review here, because there is actually a lot I want to comment about, but my typing is funky because I'm tired. Can't tell you how much I've had to go back and rewrite. But I can say that I'm really, really, really enjoying the story so far.

Oh, and I totally agree with you about Xander needing his connections. I very much prefer Xander gets to keep his friend stories, power up or no power up. Just like, I very much prefer that Characters remain themselves stories. I can deal with changes as the story progresses, but New personalities for the sake of plot just don't sit well with me for some reason. But as that does not seem to be happening here, I'm going with thumbs up, absolutely. :)
Comments from author:
You may have been tired when you wrote this review, but it is exactly what I needed!

As I've said in other replies, I'm so worried I'm gonna screw this up, but your praise helps fuel the fire to say "Eff it all, just keep writing!"

Thank you for the review!

I'll try my best!
Review By [(Current Donor)Katrina] • Date [16 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Time to Suit up!" from Kaosreign
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You should have picked a better Acronym since the "R" doesn't leave much to work with.

So Warren broke the fourth wall and it drove him over the edge huh? What a moron.
Comments from author:
I'll admit, I came up with the name first and then thought about giving it an acronym second, in clear violation of how Marvel has done it in the entire history of the comic book label.

I'm starting to get nervous about all this fourth wall talk, granted its not well hidden in the last paragraph of the chapter, but now I'm thinking I'll screw it up because everyone has an idea of where its going...

Despite my insecurities, Thanks for the review.
Review By [Kaosreign] • Date [16 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "I Don't Understand You..." from CageFire
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Great new chapter, keep up the excellent work. :)
Review By [CageFire] • Date [16 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "I Don't Understand You..." from mendal
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Warren is a textbook example of "Cut lex luthor a check".
Review By [mendal] • Date [16 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "I Don't Understand You..." from djhardim
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Almost as if Warren's become aware of the fourth wall(I think that's what it is).

He could have been Tony Stark, if the BtVS writers had written him that way. They're the same ones that wouldn't allow Xander to be trained during the show. It's like what the DC Writers did to Superboy Prime.
Comments from author:
Oooooo, a nail got hit on the head there! not gonna say which though.

I will say that hopefully my explanation as to why Warren didn't live up to his true potential of being just a pervy sex robot nerd billionaire (Kinda like David Nabbit from Angel) is worth it and I guess plausible, at least in context to my story.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [djhardim] • Date [16 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "I Don't Understand You..." from raxadian
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The M.A.R just seems like an awful convenient plot for Xander to be bonded to Buffy, while it would be better to just sent Xander to the Marvel universe so he gets help.
Comments from author:
Ok, yes and no.

Yes: It will force them both to go to another Verse together rather than just Xander. Is it convenient if I always envisioned both of them embarking on this journey together and the hardware they will now share from the first time I started writing plot points? This was always going to be a Xander and Slayer story. Only thing that was in flux was if it was gonna be Buffy or Faith and all my reasoning landed on Buffy.

No: As I see the M.A.R. as a stopgap measure, not a cure. If he was to go alone then it gives him only a finite number of days left to live while securing a cure for himself. With Buffy tagging along it could take him months to get a cure, years even, as he now has time. And that's not necessarily saying that there is a cure out there, or that its in the Ultimate Verse.

And again that's not saying it will take years.

I do have a cure in mind, its just a matter of if I'm feeling kind as to when I give it to him.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [raxadian] • Date [16 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "I Don't Understand You..." from hamishog
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Actually Warren was a moron because most of the stuff that he did was so far past cutting edge that it wasn't funny. The patents alone would have made him a multi-billionaire. Instead he obsesses about a girl who dumped him, obsesses, then winds up killing her. Warren's got a bad case of stupid. Maybe it was the Hellmouth because otherwise intelligent people seemed to go totally off-track. Not to mention how twisted the relationships wound up being.
Well, you're keeping me interested. I can be pretty harsh about fics that power up Xander because they usually leave the reason that he's Xander behind. He's not supporto-guy because he can't do anything else. He's supporto-guy because that's the most important job there is. Those pedestals aren't going to support themselves.
Comments from author:
Now you got me nervous. Hope I don't screw it up.

I don't mind Xander Power up stories, I just hate the ones where he just leaves Sunnydale and never speaks to his friends again. He needs to be in contact with some/all to keep him grounded and vice versa. There was a reason he was the Animus in the joining spell in the fourth season.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [hamishog] • Date [16 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "I Don't Understand You..." from grd
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This is cool. Deconstructing Warren next chapter could be one of the best scenes. Xsn brings up many excellent points. Warren focusing on B was one of the dumbest things. Rob a bank, yeah sure. Lazy ass. Give it to him Xan! With Buffy there they can rip him apart in a metaphysical sense.
Review By [grd] • Date [16 Aug 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Up All Night, To Dust Vampires" from (Recent Donor)nerfherder
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As empowerments go, this is such a Xander way of going about it! Keep up the great work!
Review By [(Recent Donor)nerfherder] • Date [29 Jun 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Up All Night, To Dust Vampires" from Studyofchaos
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All right, I wondered where the other superfriends in Xander's head were hiding out....
Review By [Studyofchaos] • Date [22 Jun 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Up All Night, To Dust Vampires" from raxadian
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Well, you can always have the Hyena and the Colonel sneak around Xander dreams.
Review By [raxadian] • Date [22 Jun 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Of Gloves & Diaries" from raxadian
Review:
Yes, Xander tends to run away when he gets powers in fics.
Review By [raxadian] • Date [22 Jun 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Up All Night, To Dust Vampires" from grd
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I like the Colonel and Momma. Warren gets to be the squeeling piggy. Nice.
Comments from author:
At first I was thinking Momma could just eat him and basically just 'Delete ' the A.I., but now I'm thinking I want Buffy and Momma to meet and take care of this nuisance.

Plus I just want Buffy to fly off the handle at being called 'Little Warrior'.
Review By [grd] • Date [22 Jun 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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