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Review of chapter "Chapter Four V2" from Morgomir
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Great story. Keep up the good work.
Review By [Morgomir] • Date [10 Jul 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Four V2" from draconis
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Good replacement chapter. Yet more surprises in store for Alaska base personnel as they see what the 3 ships can do in Earth's atmosphere. I'd bet just the two F302's could take out the oncoming squadron. Were I Landry, unless there was no other choice, I wouldn't want to show them the drone technology just yet.

Unless I'm not remembering correctly, the "Puddle Jumpers" had no point-defence system at all. No beam or kinetic weaponry...just the fairly limited supply of over-kill drones. Also seems very odd, particularly without a point-defence system that the Ancients didn't give them a shield. After all, a cloak doesn't protect the jumper from shrapnel, over-pressure, or from debris strikes. At the speeds it travels it literally must have a kinetic shield of some sort and that wasn't addressed in canon...and that's also assuming the hull and "windscreen" protects from radiation in space and weapons (for which a shield would otherwise also be required).

Question to think about re: your chapter's reference to apparently limited knowledge of habitable planets (with/without Stargates)...wouldn't the Asgard have included their list of all planets with Stargates and/or populated planets in the Milky Way galaxy? (Especially ones with the Asgard covered under the Protected Planets Treaty). There'd likely not be a 100% match-up in this universe, but I would think it means Landry wouldn't be starting from scratch their search for an alternative to Earth.
Review By [draconis] • Date [30 Jun 14] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Four V2" from AlphaBeta
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Not a bad replacement. Hope the next chapter will be out soon!
Review By [AlphaBeta] • Date [23 Jun 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four V2" from Bobboky
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Very good work
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [23 Jun 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four V2" from Vianca
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Much better, though if I was Laundry, I would still be a bit wary.
I would also hold quite a lot back.
See it like this, to Laundry, Robotech Earth is just some newly found planet with a culture slightly above Earth´s norm (if you forget the SGC).
Then think on how they treated similar planets?

Finding out if the Antarctica Outpost is there, is step one, step two is checking it and bringing it online for a network check, in order to detect the other outposts still working.
That would give them the all they need for Atlantis & it´s sister ship, The Tower.
Why that wreck?
With it, you got a place to relocate that super-volcano shipyard to, as in rebuilding The Tower into a shipyard-ship.

This page might help you, if you ever let them play with cityship designs.
http://www.its.caltech.edu/~atomic/snowcrystals/
http://www.its.caltech.edu/~atomic/snowcrystals/class/class.htm

As for my last review and what I meant with them playing/acting International-Resque/Thunderbirds?
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=-YyTfxeJxvQ
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=2K9rVRuehGU

O and some fun stuff.
http://www.startrek.com/article/nasas-latest-warp-drive-design-looks-very-familiar

As for the ATA-gen, what about the retro-virus?
Review By [Vianca] • Date [23 Jun 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four V2" from raxadian
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Thankfully Carter have that thing a force shield.
Review By [raxadian] • Date [23 Jun 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four V2" from fanreaderonetwo
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nitpick
Only _two_ ATA positive people on the entire ship?

Given the jumper and all the Ancient tech they used or might encounter I would expect a dozen or more with the ATA "injection", including 4 or more pilots.
Review By [fanreaderonetwo] • Date [23 Jun 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four V2" from AllenPitt
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Much better. just grabbing people by transporter would have the potential for causing all sorts of problems, and these are people Landry needs --he needs their goodwill. Better to do it right even if it's a bit slower.
Assuming they share some tech & make earth safer, there are all sorts of questions. What happened to the Asgard in this universe? (My guess is, they died out a long time before)... Tollans, as you mentioned, lots of other questions. Hm, they have a database of stargate coordinates --lots of 'interesting' places to check out, if they're the same as back in the other 'verse. Not even counting, maybe the Atlantis exists also? If they can get a power source, and can salvage that city-shape, that'd be huge.
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [23 Jun 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four V2" from Jomei
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Chapter Four V2 is much more realistic. I thought that in the first version, Landry had taken on Thor's questionable MO of abruptly beaming someone up. It's kind of arrogant and/or shows a non-human understanding of how people would react to what is essentially a kidnapping. For Thor it's acceptable; for Landry, given in the position he was in, it was bit of an incendiary move.
Review By [Jomei] • Date [23 Jun 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four V1" from Bobboky
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nice work
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [17 Jun 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four V1" from raxadian
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He does have a sense of humor, doesn't he?
Review By [raxadian] • Date [16 Jun 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from raxadian
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You just love fusing things, don't you?

Do Stargates exist here?
Review By [raxadian] • Date [16 Jun 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from raxadian
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Oh, so they will meet the Space Fortress Macross, and their enemies.
Review By [raxadian] • Date [16 Jun 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from raxadian
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Damn, that's not good!
Review By [raxadian] • Date [16 Jun 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four V1" from tosca
Review:
Excellent story - I'm really enjoying this. :-)
Review By [tosca] • Date [16 Jun 14] • Not Rated
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