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Review of chapter "Forsaken" from starwolf
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this has been very good so far, but...its time to toughen dawn up. she is very stubbern and by this time Spike taught her how to handle a knife (if buffy hadden). under the circumstance I could see Dawn gutting malfoy with no problem. great story, thanks
Review By [starwolf] • Date [12 Nov 13] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Throw Your Arms Around Me" from maxthehobbit
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The ending left it open for another story, a ton of stories since it wasn't really an end to a story, more like an end to a chapter. A great story although I expected more from Buffy being at Hogwarts.
Thanks for posting.
Review By [maxthehobbit] • Date [3 Mar 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "With Or Without You" from maxthehobbit
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Isabel, suicide ... you write like Alfred Hitchcock never know what's going to happen next. The thoughts and observations by the characters were so close to real when dealing with Isabel's death and funeral. Either you have experienced death of someone close to you, or read a hell of a lot on the subject. I know I felt many of those feelings when a good friend of mine died some forty-odd years ago. She was close to the same age as Isabel, she was only in seventh grade. Makes me doubt there is a 'God.'

Great chapter.
Review By [maxthehobbit] • Date [1 Mar 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Estranged" from maxthehobbit
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Good Job with this chapter, didn't see it coming, Isabel being turned by her boyfriend, guess she'll change the way she thinks about werewolves now.
I like the way you have Dawn having 'slayer dreams' and she's seeing all that's happening in Sunnydale while at Hogwarts, well the highlights anyway.
It's a wonder she hadn't gone crazy, first all the Sunnydale mess, then almost being raped, then tortured, then getting dumped by her first boyfriend/cherry buster.
Too bad the Aurors weren't armed with shotguns-- they could have just blown away all the Death Eaters that were torturing Dawn - they certainly deserved to be killed or better yet tortured to death over a period of three months or more.
Review By [maxthehobbit] • Date [1 Mar 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Brave New World" from maxthehobbit
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Well, I came back to this story after reading more fics about the marauders and find I'm enjoying it. LOL you still beg for reviews too much, especially since you seem to get more than just a fair share of them. The sex scene with Dawn and Sirius was tasteful without being too graphic. The part that disturbs me is a 15 and 16 year old having sex in the first place. I guess I imagine Dawn as innocent and having morals, not being somewhat 'slutty.' However I am enjoying your take on Dawn, making it much more interesting since it is so much different from my views. I am also very happy with your sense of humor, not laugh out loud, but the kind that puts a smile on my face.
Review By [maxthehobbit] • Date [29 Feb 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Business" from maxthehobbit
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Song fictions are always cheesy. Add to that a few hundred words of notes and begging for reviews ... well it just isn't worth reading any farther than this.
Review By [maxthehobbit] • Date [23 Jun 11] • Rating [4 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Smells Like Teen Spirit" from ptbptb
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Chapter 41 and they are _finally_ talking about special training. Really they all have had a great many opportunities to realize that they should be worrying about how well they can fight before now.
Review By [ptbptb] • Date [5 Apr 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Silence" from ptbptb
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Remus, James and Sirius' reaction to the vampire incident seems out of character. They are supposed to be fifth year Griffindors and handy with their wands. So they're just going to leave the vampires to kill all the muggles in there without fighting back? The vampire incident itself also came out of the blue and didn't fit the setting. Except when they are incited by dark wizards like Voldemort and Grindelwald vampires and werewolves rarely assault highly populated areas in groups. People outside at night and in isolated houses are more likely to be victims.
Review By [ptbptb] • Date [4 Apr 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Silence" from PhoenixRe
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“My sister’s the Slayer. In my world, vampires are a lot worse than here. Or so Dumbledore said,” Dawn snorted

Where exactly did he say that? I didn't notice any conversation about her world or theirs, just an implicit understanding that Dawn is from another dimension from Dumbledore's part.
Review By [PhoenixRe] • Date [20 Mar 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Throw Your Arms Around Me" from (Recent Donor)Luna
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So, I have finally reached the end of this mega story… And I’m a bit at lost for words. I mean, how does one describe such a wonderfully intricate, well-planned, expertly written, beautiful, and touching story as this? Literally one of the best things I have ever read -- Partly because I love Marauder Era stories and yours really shines light on how things may have gone (well, okay, I guess if only Dawn magically had appeared, but you know what I mean). You have a wonderful vocabulary, use great descriptive language, kept things interesting, tied Dawn very well and believably into this world, and properly dealt with the other Sunnydale characters through the dreams and their final arrival.

Soooooo… Thank you : ) Thanks for sharing, this has been a delightful read!
Review By [(Recent Donor)Luna] • Date [17 Mar 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Fumbling Towards Ecstasy" from (Recent Donor)Luna
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I love this story.

That is all.

:)
Review By [(Recent Donor)Luna] • Date [16 Mar 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Business" from (Recent Donor)Luna
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Definitely enjoying this story so far :)
Review By [(Recent Donor)Luna] • Date [11 Mar 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Brick In The Wall" from Chikageko
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Did snape still call lilly a mudblood? I would assume so but with your ideas on storylining you never know. I just think it's kind of important because one of the major roadblocks in lilly and james' relationship was his and snapes treatment of eachother. after it ended fith year and james' parents died a little over half way through his sixth she started going out with him. there was probably alot more too it but those were the cannon mentioned cornerstones. anyways good chapters since my last posting. though i'm curious as to what catastrophie you're going to arrange to get dawn to your next string where she meets harry.
Review By [Chikageko] • Date [15 Dec 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Blurry" from Chikageko
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Can you even place a fidelious charm on a person? I would understand an object like a vault or the obvious choice of a house of a building but is it even possible to place such a charm on a mobile person? and even then, how would she be able to clue people into her presence? you have to know the secret to perceive what is hidden. Meh, i guess for the purposes of your story it will work. while i don't particularly like a number of the things that are happening in the story your writing is so far quite good. I still maintain that as a marauder she should learn to become some form of animagus. I'd vote for either a panther or a Sphinx. or if you're wanting to stay closer to the title of kitten there are the Japanese nekomata; Dangerous, Powerful and intelligent, but small and deceptively cute.
Review By [Chikageko] • Date [13 Dec 08] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Imitation Of Life" from Chikageko
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Dawn did write this vision down in her journal didn't she? also, I know it's your story and it's really far to late to think about changing anything, but why aren't the marauders teaching dawn about animagi transformations? you've written it yourself; dawn has enough power to frighten Dumbledore and enough skill to be his rival; fitting 4 and a half years of education into 2 months is not a simple thing. anyways, great story thus far. hope you don't mind the number of reviews. see you in a couple of chapters.
Review By [Chikageko] • Date [11 Dec 08] • Rating [8 out of 10]
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