Review of chapter "37" from Edman
Please continue it, at least finish the Glory arc.
Hope Willow makes.
Review By [Edman
] • Date [14 Apr 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Emperor Xander" from agnar
Too contradictory. If Xander is 'a god' and all these demons and vamps 'sensed' him, causing the low levels to flee and high levels to come and challenge him, then he MUST have kept more than the leadership skills and some equipment.
Yet you, yourself state that is all he kept.
Sorry but that's contradictory and fucks up the fic before it starts. Either he's god-like in power or he's tony stark (leadership and battle armor/able to build weapons). If he's 'tony stark' then Glory and the Mayor and so on wouldn't NOTICE him.
And if God and Metatron popped down and limited his powers, making him into a tony starkish level guy, then they would also need to undo all the attention brought on when he was godlike, or they're guilty of setting off multiple world-ending levels of conflict all at once in sunnydale.
As it is, this reads like you're trying to have it both ways, you power up the scoobies so normal SD events aren't so bad, so you bring in ALL the high level events all at once! But then you power the scoobies down so they're fucked because none of them have the godlike power that brought out all the high level events/enemies in the first place.
That equals dead scoobies, dead sunnydale, California falling into the ocean...
Review By [agnar
] • Date [23 Mar 14] • Rating [3 out of 10]
Review of chapter "37" from Shadowman
A nice story you really need to come back and continue it.
Review By [Shadowman
] • Date [1 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "37" from Balder
Such an excellent story that it's a shame it was never finished.
Review By [Balder
] • Date [14 Sep 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "37" from nerfherder
You are inordinately cruel to leave it hanging here! This is a great story and I am dying of curiosity to learn what the heck is going on!
Review By [nerfherder
] • Date [14 Aug 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Eight" from SledgeHammer
Here's why the respective characters would be both wanting to join, and be horrifically horked-off:
NCIS-Washington - Jonathan Gibbs (Jethro's dead son).
Harry and Helen Tasker (AKA Boris and Doris) - Dana (who, true to form, shows up anyway, with Faith and Kendra in tow).
Bill Gerard - Consider that he runs the premier FIST (Federal Investigative Strike Team) within the USMS. While the USMS is primarily known for prisoner transport and fugitive retrieval, the USMS also cleans up messes too messy for either the FBI or Secret Service. What's even scarier about the USMS is that they are small (the Park Police is larger). Then there is Gerard himself - he hates injustice more than Buffy (or Xander) hates vampires.
James Bond - outside of his role in MI-6, he is also a reservist in the Royal Navy (Commander Sir James Bond, RN-R, if you want to be picky). It's why he would be aware of either, if not both, of the Taskers.
Why President Ryan would warn SG-1 away - The Posse Comitatus Act applies to the SGC (and their teams). It does *not* apply to the NID (however, the Internal Security Act *does*; Ryan COULD use that to put Riley and Company under law-enforcement jurisdiction (of which there are two choices - Gerard or Gibbs)). Posse Comitatus does *not* apply to NCIS (they are civilians); while their *primary* jurisdiction is military, they can/do/have tag-teamed with other law-enforcement agencies where there is mutual interest.
What will Jack (or Teac, for that matter) make of Kendra?
Review By [SledgeHammer
] • Date [24 Aug 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "37" from Tjin
*Poke* *Poke* Is it dead?
Review By [Tjin
] • Date [25 Jul 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "37" from PsychoWing
Very interesting. Loving the various crossover cameos. I hope to read more soon.
Review By [PsychoWing
] • Date [9 May 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "37" from Ancalador
A bloody good story and one that I hope you aren't leaving for dead.
Keep up the grea work
Review By [Ancalador
] • Date [2 Feb 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "37" from Bill
So very well done!
Review By [Bill
] • Date [5 Sep 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "37" from Godogma
This story started with immense potential - after that it quickly became an incoherent cluster fuck because you layered in scene after scene, most of which have no linkages to make them part of the story other than the fact you introduced them in a sort of sequence. Tara received no introduction, Anya received no introduction; how did Giles or Whomever get the Magic Box? Most of the things in latter chapters just frankly don't make any sense because you didn't do the necessary work to make them integrate with the story at large.
Travers mystically appeared then disappeared without a trace, without being contacted first and he didn't show up for the Cruciamentum because its before that ever was scheduled to happen (buffy's 18th birthday)... Dana and Faith mysteriously appear on the Hellmouth in the middle of a black operation to surprise their parents...
All of your latter chapters need to be rewritten with an eye toward making them actually connect together, you need more character interaction and growth and most of all you have to show us what went on and some depth of time to make this remotely coherent. The story began as a good idea, but your execution became worse and worse as time went on.
Review By [Godogma
] • Date [29 Aug 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "37" from Razial
Great story very interesting and a very unique way of halloween happening. I hope you continue this story and finish it up.
Review By [Razial
] • Date [22 May 10] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "37" from Frardowin
Hope you update this story again, It is really good.
Review By [Frardowin
] • Date [26 Oct 09] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "37" from Vilkath
Interesting start and idea but I kind of felt the story lost any focus it might of had as it went into far to many cross overs and introduced far to many characters for the author to expect readers to know about. Given how little time each character is given it is expected that a reader would know each of them well enough to not need a description, history etc, which just is not true when you had half a dozen cross overs just to include multiple governmental agencies.
Added to that Xander seemed to have been lost in the shuffle, he seems to not really make any decisions, do any good or fight much of the fight. Not to mention making tons of stupid mistakes like letting glory run around free, not killing her worshipers, leaving the Watchers Council alone despite them having useful information and being hostile towards him. Let his 'main team' like willow and Buffy run around alone without back up.. constantly being ambushed while a freaking God is on the loose.
Heck martial law of some kind should been started ages ago, in very least close down the freaking Bronze aka Demon's fast food central. Over all the Warhammer 40k aspect of the story seems to have been utterly smothered by the rest the cross overs and we have not seen any kind of growing faith, weapons, armor or anything related to 40k show up. Instead we heard more about Stargate's NID and their little games.. something Stargate command and such should dealt with on their own ages ago. In the end it's really like Xander is calmly trying to organize a full force, from the ground up while enemies are already at his gates. You don't talk about long term logistics, country of orgin or playing nice nice with the corrupt watchers council you have to bribe to get information out of to save the world. Xander really should been a man of action, not reaction like this.
Review By [Vilkath
] • Date [9 Sep 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "37" from GundumM
good fic and chapter. hopeing for an update soon
Review By [GundumM
] • Date [31 Aug 09] • Not Rated