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Review of chapter "More Things Change, More They Stay The Same" from bucksavage
Review:
Firstly, I must say this was a very entertaining read. The characters were well thought out, and felt true to how they could or should act. That alone is quite the feat.

I must say however, I think you could have benefited from having a beta reader or two helping you with this fic. There are some minor grammar and spelling errors that pop up here and there...and some places where things aren't so clear, like when one reviewer mentioned a part where Anise or Freya are talking, but you never really differentiate who is talking about whom.

But other than that, those issues don't, in my opinion, really affect the quality or readability of the story.

It was a great story and thank you for writing it.
Comments from author:
Oh I so needed a beta reader. The worst mistake I spelled soldier as solider through most of the fic ~cringes~ I've gotten better and keep looking at that thinking I should re do it. I've started roughing out a sequel to wrap up season 10, but until I can get my original stuff making some money and be able to quit the 7-5 crap I'm not sure how it is going to happen. I'm still around so thanks!
Review By [bucksavage] • Date [23 Apr 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "More Things Change, More They Stay The Same" from lateVMlover
Review:
A very incredible, original and thoroughly entertaining story!
Review By [lateVMlover] • Date [22 Mar 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "More Things Change, More They Stay The Same" from leb
Review:
this was a great story! please write the sequel soon
Review By [leb] • Date [11 Oct 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Offworld Repercussions" from Shayna
Review:
A really good story. A bit long though... :P

Anyway, there's a paragraph that seems to have a little problem. This one:

**Anise rose to her feet unsteadily .... “No General, I apologize, ... ” Both Tok’ra nodded to General Landry and left. With Anise cradling her broken hand.**

The "Symbiote" is talking about "Anise" and her bad behavior. However, Anise IS the Symbiote. So who is talking about whom? Is Anise(symbiote) talking about Freya(host) or Freya about Anise!?
Review By [Shayna] • Date [19 Jan 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "More Things Change, More They Stay The Same" from mojtaba
Review:
so basically You rewrote canon sg1 with 2 bystanders watching everything and in THE meantime build a relationship..... wow really this is what You write????
Comments from author:
I guess I don't understand your comment. I thought I stated (though it was ages ago) I was trying to write it so that if you squinted at the episodes you could see them just leaving the camera view. It was an exercise about not changing cannon. My sequel.. well that will be destroying canon.
Review By [mojtaba] • Date [15 Jan 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Teal'c's Wish" from DominoEffect
Review:
I like this story, though you really need a beta reader.

also

trigger warning for talk of boundary cross


it's not "reverse rape" it's just plain rape. any gender can be raped.
Review By [DominoEffect] • Date [28 Dec 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Offworld Repercussions" from DragonBard
Review:
I should point out Anise 'is' the Symbiot. The host is Freya or something similar.
Review By [DragonBard] • Date [9 Dec 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "More Things Change, More They Stay The Same" from (Recent Donor)nerfherder
Review:
This definitely needs some proofing but it is damn good! That is a mighty nice corner you painted yourself into, plotwise... How you gonna get out?
Comments from author:
oh yeah the first few chapters were ROUGH... My writing had gotten much better over the years. Oh nah, I know the answer plot wise.. just never wrote it out and still need to watch the last two SG movies...
Review By [(Recent Donor)nerfherder] • Date [3 Aug 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "More Things Change, More They Stay The Same" from (Recent Donor)tchizek
Review:
What a great story!

I hope that eventually you continue this with a sequel!
Review By [(Recent Donor)tchizek] • Date [20 Jun 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "More Things Change, More They Stay The Same" from DebraN
Review:
I thought you did a great job of developing a relationship between Xander and Faith that was believeable. I liked all of the interaction with the SGC. Everyone was in character. The betting pool on how the 'new kids' sparring match with Teal'c would go was very entertaining. I also liked the friendship between Faith and Vala. I hope you will consider a sequel at some point.

-Debra
Review By [DebraN] • Date [26 Mar 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "More Things Change, More They Stay The Same" from Katt
Review:
Sequel Please? I know it's been forever but.... pleeease?

Katt
Review By [Katt] • Date [25 Feb 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Fighting to Fit In" from Downery
Review:
Yea... decided to keep giving the story a shot but you keep going over the top with the emo-ness. Hope it tone it down if you write other stories because if it wasn't for you portraying Xan and Faith as 14 year olds dressing in all black and slitting their wrists it would've been a great story.
Review By [Downery] • Date [18 Dec 11] • Rating [1 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Tests and Results" from Downery
Review:
This chapter kind of killed it for me. Was enjoying the story but you over did everything in this chapter.

Rape? A 17 year old hooking up with a 16 year old is rape?He called her a CHILD when he was only a year older?!?! Wtf?!?! So Xander called the cops anytime he saw a senior with with a junior in highschool right? Or anytime he saw a senior with a freshmen because that never happens in highschool.

And the whole emo-ness of the test score scene made me want to slit my wrists.
Comments from author:
lol, remember Xander is the White Knight, with a over developed sense of responsibility. And she was 15.. technically according to California law it if was consensual on both sides at that age, it was not rape, but Xander saw himself as taking advantage of a young girl, when we both know damn well Faith was in charge the whole time. It is just one incident, but was meant more to point out that assumptions can be dangerous. Xander is a hero at heart... and as such he saw himself failing Faith by having sex with her... hey I never said the emotions were logical, just that they were real.
Review By [Downery] • Date [18 Dec 11] • Rating [1 out of 10]
Review of chapter "SGC New Recruits?" from Downery
Review:
Enjoyed it. Although whoever made the comment about splitting and keeping them together seems to forget Xander negotiated a partnership and that Faith was there as his bodyguard. I want to stab the guy.
Review By [Downery] • Date [18 Dec 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "More Things Change, More They Stay The Same" from rainbe
Review:
Years later and I still want a sequel.
Review By [rainbe] • Date [27 Sep 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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