Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Stationary
really love this! hope you make more like this!
Review By [Stationary
] • Date [29 Jan 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Genuka
Review By [Genuka
] • Date [30 Jul 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Gideon
I was hoping for a bit more paintball in the story than we got so I guess I will just have to imagine what they do to destroy the airforce team :) I can see mini!Jack telling the Slayers that it is not winning that counts - it is winning without blowing your cover!
Also love what the other kids thought of miniJack - I am not suprised. Maybe Cassie could pretend to go out with him?
Review By [Gideon
] • Date [1 Nov 10] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from DeepBlueJoy
That was great fun. We all need to be accepted and remembered. Uncle Jack would be very happy indeed!
Review By [DeepBlueJoy
] • Date [18 Nov 08] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from spring
I love this, I also think it would be way cool if you expanded on this, come on you know that you can.
Review By [spring
] • Date [19 Oct 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from chrysanne
Wonderful! Wonderful! I love how sweet this is. Thank you!
Review By [chrysanne
] • Date [22 Jul 08] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from dogbertcarroll
Nice character piece.
Review By [dogbertcarroll
] • Date [2 Apr 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from zephyrRS
Wonderful! More mini-Jack!
Review By [zephyrRS
] • Date [1 Feb 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Duskie
That was SOOOO adorable! I just want a teddy bunny to hug and squeeze and preserve the VWEEEE feeling with.
Review By [Duskie
] • Date [21 Feb 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from EdBecerra
Y'know, there's a potential sequel here. Have you ever seen the TAC-8 paintball gun? It has a *vertical* feed magazine. Result is a paintball pistol you can do the John Woo gunfight thing with. There's even an assault rifle version. Only real annoying limit is that each magazine holds only eight paintballs.
On the other hand, you can do the "I'll empty a mag and slap a fresh one in" thing. I can see Mini-Jack getting his hands on a few dozen courtesy of the Council, and surprising the living $hit out of the Air Force team...
Here's their website. WARNING! Annoying Shockwave graphics introduction on the home page.http://www.tiberiusarms.com/
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review and the link. My problem with doing a sequel is worrying about not living up to the original. If I can come up with something I will definitely do it though
Review By [EdBecerra
] • Date [28 Dec 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Sulien
I really enjoyed this story and would love to read more if you decide to write it. It's a perfect beginning to something larger.
Constructive criticism: you might consider finding a good beta reader to catch the few grammatical errors and such. There weren't many, but they do show.
Thanks for sharing this and I hope you write more of it! :-)
Review By [Sulien
] • Date [17 Oct 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Shieldage
Paintball team 8)
Review By [Shieldage
] • Date [13 Sep 06] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from zafaran
Oh, I *like* this story. I like stories like this where Mini-Jack gets to make a difference and live a quality life. I hope your muse and schedule will allow you to write and post more stories sometime soon. Keep up the good work. Zafaran email@example.com
Review By [zafaran
] • Date [5 Sep 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Bill
Review By [Bill
] • Date [22 Jul 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from thecrystalkey
Love this. I'd love to see the grudge match. Or at least the aftermath. :
Review By [thecrystalkey
] • Date [21 Jun 06] • Rating [9 out of 10]