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Review of chapter "Chapter 3: Farewells" from Martin
Review:
I love the character you have given to Buffy, but I don't really care for your story. Lots of oddities. She missed 2 years of magic schooling, so she should be 13 instead of 16 in the show, which means she should be in Middle School not High School. She was getting perved on while she was 12 or 13 by Angel. It simply doesn't fit. You are trying to jam things in to fit your story idea. And if you wanted to fit things you should have just had magic school start at a later age, say at age 13. She would have been 3 years behind but able to catch up 2 of those years to be in the same classes as the golden trio.
Comments from author:
You are entirely correct.

I have completely removed the part with Angel, there was never anything between them now.

And In this story I have Buffy now at age 13, I've put a little forward in chapter 3. I'm thinking of doing a bit of rewriting of this to slip it into chapter 1, somewhere.
Review By [Martin] • Date [14 Jan 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3: Farewells" from starwolf
Review:
so far this looks good, looking forward to more.
thanks
Review By [starwolf] • Date [21 Dec 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3: Farewells" from deathgeonous
Review:
Decided to reread this one. It needs an update. Well, thanks for writing this, bye for now.
Review By [deathgeonous] • Date [1 Jan 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3: Farewells" from bradsan
Review:
I read this story for a second time and something doesn't feel right. As a mother I know that you would do everything for you're child. And one of those things what most parent don't want, is that their child chooses a path where they can become "evil'.

But Joyce Summers words are "ok. But if this doesn’t work out then I’m pulling her back at the end of this year.

Don't she understand what could happen when magic isn't under control. And don't tell me she just a concerned mother that's no excuse, when you are a mother you'll do everything to try to understand what is happening and that's something I still don't she her doing.

Well this disturbed me in the series and also in other fices.

Oh I forgot. I do like the story and please update
Review By [bradsan] • Date [10 Jun 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3: Farewells" from bradsan
Review:
well those are very strong wands. I hope she can use them separately and together otherwise she will have a problem when she loses one. So Buffy is a very, very strong witch with veela blood, who can do wand and wand less magic? I hope you will update soon, because I like this story and please no slash look at some boys they are really cute. Or even better let it be friendship.
Review By [bradsan] • Date [5 Jun 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3: Farewells" from deathgeonous
Review:
First off, I just had to reread this one again, because while thinking back on it, I came up with a question, and this is, since I don't really see a yea or nay in the fic so far, Is Buffy supposed to be a Veela or something? Because Veela are really big into the fire making don't cha know? Hehe. Well, thanks for writing this, bye for now.
Comments from author:
thanks.

If you read the very first entry I list two challenges this story responds to. The information you want is in the two challenges. If you like more mystery I'd just hold off.

I'm ridiculously busy at the moment (exams, moving to another city, and a new job), so I'm not sure when an update will come, but one will come eventually.
Review By [deathgeonous] • Date [17 Apr 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3: Farewells" from darkplayer
Review:
Very interesting story. I like the whole scene with the Council. Please update soon.
Review By [darkplayer] • Date [9 Mar 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3: Farewells" from (Recent Donor)SlayerandWereLeopard
Review:
great chapter. So if buffy isa witch does that mean her slayer powers will leave her.
Review By [(Recent Donor)SlayerandWereLeopard] • Date [15 Jan 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3: Farewells" from PATM
Review:
Well well, this one is a consistent pleasure to read. Buffy is carefree in a burdened by slayerhood kind of way and is familiar to canon. Willow should meet Tara soon but not required. I hope to catch the next update.
Comments from author:
thanks. It was my intention to make this story a lot lighter hearted than my other stories, and to practice my dialog writing skills here more as well. I appreciate you taking the time to review.
Review By [PATM] • Date [6 Jan 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3: Farewells" from ecifrog
Review:
"Buffy was eying the poker in Joyce’s hands. “Giles, I have some money I need you to make copies of.” " *grins*

Buffy has two wands? Very cool :) Very nice chapter. Looking forward to the next.
Comments from author:
thanks!
Review By [ecifrog] • Date [5 Jan 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 3: Farewells" from (Recent Donor)DrakePendragon
Review:
I like it. Its moving along at a good pace and I feel that Joyce's stress on all things normal is quite in character for her. Very good.
Comments from author:
thats what I like to hear.
Review By [(Recent Donor)DrakePendragon] • Date [5 Jan 11] • Not Rated
Review of story "Buffy Summers and the Girl Who Thought Too Much" from Sahugani
Review:
Love the story so far. Hope to see more soon.

to: crystalblaze
I doubt she's a Veela. My assumption would be that the changes the slayer's essence made to Buffy physically are permanent. Once a Slayer always a slayer.
Comments from author:
thanks for the review. look to the challenges for clues, or don't if you want surprises.
Review By [Sahugani] • Date [4 Jan 11] • Rating [9 out of 10] • Edit Comment
Review of chapter "Chapter 3: Farewells" from CrystalBlaze
Review:
Given the fireballs from the hands, I had a thought.

Given that the First Slayer has moved on into Kendra, Buffy's revival on the very cusp of the Hellmouth invoked the nearest equivalent of an enhanced human.

Namely, a Veela.

If Buffy Summers is Veela, then sooner or later the Allure will kick in until she learns to manage it....
Comments from author:
you know, if you read the first part of this story with the introduction it gives the two challenges this story is being written in response to. I think another review even linked to them in the previous page of reviews. You're only sort of right, and one of the subtexts I'm going to try having run through this story is the oppression and bigotry that exists in the wizarding world, not just for 'mudbloods' but also for anything less than human as well.
Review By [CrystalBlaze] • Date [4 Jan 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3: Farewells" from ein
Review:
"Another intriguing and refreshing Buffy/Hermione!" Was what I'm going to say, but it's not until later (much later). Okay, I'll wait. I often discover the best romance fic through slow process of courting and lots of patience. Although knowing Buffy, she would likely to hammer this story with a lot of adventure.

Two wands! I would not expect anything less.
Comments from author:
thanks for the review!
Review By [ein] • Date [4 Jan 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3: Farewells" from zigpal
Review:
Great update. Of course Buffy needs two wands. Now it should be fun the first time she uses them.

And I wonder who Buffy's magical tutor is going to be. Hmmm.
Comments from author:
Hagrid?
Review By [zigpal] • Date [4 Jan 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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