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Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from WhiteWolf
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"my new friend Mr. Denneck" That was meant sarcastic, right? or the enemy of my enemy is my friend. Because you know "Buffy" is Hank's 'enemy' and Mr. Denick is Buffy's 'enemy'.
Review By [WhiteWolf] • Date [24 Jan 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from CPTSkip
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For some reason up until now I haven't been reading your story. I am so very glad I have finally come to my senses. This is one powerful and involving story. Even thought Hank is the 'villain' he is not evil. He is a father who has lost his beloved child and wants her back. And your Elizabeth is wonderful. One of the things that bothered me about the final seasons of BtVS was how Buffy seemed to have not matured as much as she should have. But in your story, Elizabeth is a mature woman and not a child with superpowers. I can't wait to read more of your lovely story. I so hope that eventually Bulizabeth *lol!, I love that name* and Willow meet. Possible at SGC? After all, you are to eventually cross with the SGC guys and Willow would be a great asset to the Stargate Project. Whatever you do, I look forward to reading about it as you are a wonderful storyteller.
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [24 Jan 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from BeatriceOtter
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Ok, this was a great story for the first three chapters. But Mr. Denneck threw me _completely_ out of the world--he was too much of a caricature. It was like watching a serious movie that stops half-way through and turns into Monty Python. If you could tone him down to being even half-way reasonable, I'd appreciate it. I'm not saying you should make him a nicer or a better person; I'm just saying that packing every cliche ever written about top businessmen into half of a chapter is a bit over the top, imho. If it helps, think of the Mayor. He didn't come across anywhere near as evil as he actually was, even when we knew he was pure evil. Instead of shoving the fact that Mr. Denneck is the biggest chauvinistic asshole in the entire universe down our throats, let us figure that out ourselves a bit more gradually. Just my two cents.
Review By [BeatriceOtter] • Date [24 Jan 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from grd
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I'm enjoying this story. It's always good to see Buffy portrayed as actually intelligent. Interesting development on Hank's attempt to get his daughter back may end up pushing her and his wife completely away. He may as well go looking for his secretary.
Review By [grd] • Date [24 Jan 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from EricThorsen
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And thus Hank Summers, through his own actions sinks back into the role of villainous minion. I say minion, because he only assists others in making Buffy's life hard, not really initiating action himself. At times I thought that Denneck was a little too annoying, but if he is connected to The Trust, then I would say that his personality is pretty accurate. Looking forward to the next installment.
Review By [EricThorsen] • Date [24 Jan 06] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from VillageOrchid
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Very cool. I like how you got the exposition in about her work-outs, studying and examples of behavior over elapsed time without it interupting the story. Would Buffy have scanned the internet and the LA directories for the wolf, ram and hart? (beyond their pagan more positive significance). An interesting choice of which scene to fully dramatize. Let us know a little more about Buffy's research and results in upcoming chapters.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [24 Jan 06] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from (Moderator)Ava
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I'm enjoying the pace you're setting and the fact that you're allowing the reader deep into the characters psyche. The section devoted to Hank was nicely done and makes us empathize with a character you usually love to hate. I love your attention to detail, your spin on the SAT scores and your take on 'essence' of a Slayer. The reader can tell you've taken the time to think out these aspects of the story and make us enjoy it all the more.
Thank you for sharing.
Ava
Review By [(Moderator)Ava] • Date [23 Jan 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from harpy
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Very very interseting. I'm looking forward to see where you're going with this
Review By [harpy] • Date [22 Jan 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from Teldra
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More please ^_^
Review By [Teldra] • Date [22 Jan 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from siannasilver
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I love this story and how it's progressing (perfect pacing), I can't wait to read more and congrats on the charcaterization it feels "spot on". Again, can't wait for updates (hint hint)!
Review By [siannasilver] • Date [22 Jan 06] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from kiwi
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really interesting. can't wait to see how the story progresses. :)
Review By [kiwi] • Date [22 Jan 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from oberon
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Chapter 3 should definitily have some plot development. Chapters 1 and 2 gave us some character developmentment (IE Buffy accepting but not really accepting the new reality) and should be enough at this point. If you develpe characters or setup the atmisphere more at this point the story will just drag. For the next chapter you should get the ball rolling just to keep the stroy from going stale.
Review By [oberon] • Date [22 Jan 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from Odjn
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I still like this. I have a question though: that whole first part with the First taking over, is that just in Crazy!Buffy's head or is there actually something to it?
Review By [Odjn] • Date [22 Jan 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from Xelab
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Great chapter, I love the fact that you are taking things slow and giving us a glimpse of whats going on in the background. I really dislike stories that just suddenly have Buffy or whoever suddenly meeting SG-1 in a bar or some other convinient location and instantly clicking, becoming best buds or something similarly unrealistic and contrived. Looking forward to reading more.
Review By [Xelab] • Date [22 Jan 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from VillageOrchid
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Some interesting stuff in this chapter. The one who sees, she doesn't look for at all. Now, finding someone with the last name "Harris" is probably more difficult than finding someone named "Rosenberg" but not a spare thought at all? I do like that you had her look up Willow and Giles, but also mentioned her backing down. It's culture shock, indeed. But still if Giles works with antiquities at the British Museum there's still a chance that he knows a lot of ledgends or is a part of a secret (or not so secret) society for studying them. I found this chapter facinating and gripping overall, look forward to what you might have planned next. Curious about your analysis of the "slayer" as a distinct deamon spirit-entity and wondering if you extrapolated that or read it in one of the book adaptations?
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [22 Jan 06] • Not Rated
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